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This is my story, a story about Legend of Zelda. Please read each installment and give me your opinions!
(by the way, i'm 12 years old)
CHAPTER 1: The Story Begins
The master blade hummed a few inches from Links shadowed face as he sat underneath the tangled boughs of the lost wood, his eyes closed in silent preparation for the next section of his training routine.
In a sudden burst of speed and power he leapt and spun his blade towards the cowering kokiri kid, resting it an inch from his neck.
''Oh, it's you Pathos,'' he said lowering his sword to his side''I thought I told you not to interrupt me during my training routine, it's too dangerous!''
''I know, Link, but it's really important!''exclaimed Pathos.
''What wrong?''Link's friendly smile turned into a serious look of shock,''what is it?''
''It's Saria, her music has stopped, she must be in danger!''
Link ripped open his rough, leather travel bag, removed the glistening Ocarina of Time, grabbed his sword and brought the magical instrument to his lips.
As the last notes of the song of Soaring began to fade away into the depths of the forest, Pothos shouted one last sentence at the now rapidly departing ball of light.
''Save Saria, Please save her!''
<(++++++++++++++++++++++++)>
Link's feet had barely touched the ground as he ran towards Saria's pale, limp body that was lying atop a tree trunk a few feet away from the forest temples entrance. Link's triforce piece burned as he touched her, he recoiled, his triforce had only ever reacted this way in the presence of the evil king, Ganondorf! He overcame his fears when he saw that her eyes had rolled and that her chest was barely rising as she breathed. He grimaced in pain as he slung her, like a doll, over his shoulder.
Reaching, once again for his ocarina, he glanced around the sunlit meadow. It seemed different, somehow. He shook his head, it must be his imagination.
A glistening butterfly, resting on the top of an overhanging branch, watched them disappear away towards a towering castle in the distance.
(by the way, i'm 12 years old)
CHAPTER 1: The Story Begins
The master blade hummed a few inches from Links shadowed face as he sat underneath the tangled boughs of the lost wood, his eyes closed in silent preparation for the next section of his training routine.
In a sudden burst of speed and power he leapt and spun his blade towards the cowering kokiri kid, resting it an inch from his neck.
''Oh, it's you Pathos,'' he said lowering his sword to his side''I thought I told you not to interrupt me during my training routine, it's too dangerous!''
''I know, Link, but it's really important!''exclaimed Pathos.
''What wrong?''Link's friendly smile turned into a serious look of shock,''what is it?''
''It's Saria, her music has stopped, she must be in danger!''
Link ripped open his rough, leather travel bag, removed the glistening Ocarina of Time, grabbed his sword and brought the magical instrument to his lips.
As the last notes of the song of Soaring began to fade away into the depths of the forest, Pothos shouted one last sentence at the now rapidly departing ball of light.
''Save Saria, Please save her!''
<(++++++++++++++++++++++++)>
Link's feet had barely touched the ground as he ran towards Saria's pale, limp body that was lying atop a tree trunk a few feet away from the forest temples entrance. Link's triforce piece burned as he touched her, he recoiled, his triforce had only ever reacted this way in the presence of the evil king, Ganondorf! He overcame his fears when he saw that her eyes had rolled and that her chest was barely rising as she breathed. He grimaced in pain as he slung her, like a doll, over his shoulder.
Reaching, once again for his ocarina, he glanced around the sunlit meadow. It seemed different, somehow. He shook his head, it must be his imagination.
A glistening butterfly, resting on the top of an overhanging branch, watched them disappear away towards a towering castle in the distance.
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El Liquido wrote:
> what!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????????????????????
LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!???????????
> what!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????????????????????
LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!???????????
El Liquido wrote:
> what!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????????????????????
actually you have a set of ?'s then a set of !'s the another set of ?'s
apart from that, ha ha!
> what!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????????????????????
actually you have a set of ?'s then a set of !'s the another set of ?'s
apart from that, ha ha!
what!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????????????????????
<{TPHÎ}> wrote:
> 72 lines...(yes i was sad enough to count them) isn't really bitesize,
> but as long as it has good fights in, it should be good.
Compared to the whole story, it is!!!!
I mean, if you read 72 lines of a book like lord of the rings you would call it a bitesize piece!!!
> 72 lines...(yes i was sad enough to count them) isn't really bitesize,
> but as long as it has good fights in, it should be good.
Compared to the whole story, it is!!!!
I mean, if you read 72 lines of a book like lord of the rings you would call it a bitesize piece!!!
72 lines...(yes i was sad enough to count them) isn't really bitesize, but as long as it has good fights in, it should be good.
<{TPHÎ}> wrote:
> point taken. BUT... the plot is not all given out at the beginning in
> a huge great big chunk as you have done, it is given to us in bitesize
> pieces (no, thats GCSE revision...) but anyway, all I was trying to
> say was that there was to much plot info at the start, and that all
> the zelda games get into the action pretty quickly.
that is a bitesize piece!!!!!(i've planned a very long story!!!)
> point taken. BUT... the plot is not all given out at the beginning in
> a huge great big chunk as you have done, it is given to us in bitesize
> pieces (no, thats GCSE revision...) but anyway, all I was trying to
> say was that there was to much plot info at the start, and that all
> the zelda games get into the action pretty quickly.
that is a bitesize piece!!!!!(i've planned a very long story!!!)
This gets better mate!
point taken. BUT... the plot is not all given out at the beginning in a huge great big chunk as you have done, it is given to us in bitesize pieces (no, thats GCSE revision...) but anyway, all I was trying to say was that there was to much plot info at the start, and that all the zelda games get into the action pretty quickly.
<{TPHÎ}> wrote:
> Zelda is built around fighting and adventuring. So far I have seen
> very little of either! Apart from lenghthy plot details which none of
> us are going to remember, there has been no real adventuring and no
> decent fights. Give the readers a boss fight or two and some humour to
> make it more better.
well, i'm sorry, but to me, and , i'm sure, lots of other people, including miyamoto, one of the things that make Zelda games so brilliant is the detailed plot and the way that everything fits together neatly!!
> Zelda is built around fighting and adventuring. So far I have seen
> very little of either! Apart from lenghthy plot details which none of
> us are going to remember, there has been no real adventuring and no
> decent fights. Give the readers a boss fight or two and some humour to
> make it more better.
well, i'm sorry, but to me, and , i'm sure, lots of other people, including miyamoto, one of the things that make Zelda games so brilliant is the detailed plot and the way that everything fits together neatly!!
Zelda is built around fighting and adventuring. So far I have seen very little of either! Apart from lenghthy plot details which none of us are going to remember, there has been no real adventuring and no decent fights. Give the readers a boss fight or two and some humour to make it more better.
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