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"SSC27-I Need Someone"

Today I felt terrible I woke thinking my wife would be laying, beside me and I would be able to put my arm round her. But no I couldn’t it was just lonely me I got up, and walked to the shower. I washed myself nice and clean, so I didn’t smell then I got dressed, in some nice clothes. Even though no one would really care I was wearing nice clothes. I went out the house and walked down the street, I walked along looking down at the floor, feeling sorry for myself.

Like I normally do every single day; every single second, minute, hour. I feel sorry for myself and I have never stopped. I have been acting like this since my wife went; we had been together for 10 years. She stopped it to go off with some other man, so now I hate her. I walk down the road kick some rubbish along. I walk into the café I go into every morning, to have my breakfast. I go in and ask for the usual bacon, egg, sausages and a nice warm cup of tea.

I shove it down me then walk out, I walk down to work I work in a little tiny office, where there’s no air conditioning and it’s boiling. Well the things to do today, walk up loads of stairs to my office because the lifts broken, then turn on my computer and wait for five damn minutes for it to load, then sit down and type up a load of horrible work. So I walk into the office no one greeting me I go and sit down, turn on the computer and wait for it to load. I go and open a window, when I look back round a woman is walking into the office. A woman I had never seen before with long blonde straight beautiful hair, her face so nice her eyes look glazed she was beautiful and I wanted her.

I went over to Mike “Who’s that woman” I asked. “What that one” He answered. “No the other Woman there” I answered “O she’s Sal” he told me. “Oh she’s beautiful. I didn’t need anybody anymore I had found the perfect person and she was great.

C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> I know just trying to set it in a depressed mans life.


dont lie, you were hoping, HOPING I SAY

Tagline wrote:
> C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> Today I felt terrible I woke thinking my wife would be laying,
> beside
> me and I would be able to put my arm round her.
>
> What type of sick fantasy is this??? and it is deadly boring

I know just trying to set it in a depressed mans life.

C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> Today I felt terrible I woke thinking my wife would be laying, beside
> me and I would be able to put my arm round her.

What type of sick fantasy is this??? and it is deadly boring

Well I am going to try and do a different story,and not make it identical but how should it be?

Memorandum! wrote:
> If you thought it was crap, why did you post it?

Don't know thought I might be in for a chance.

Marinky_Kongshi wrote:
> Memorandum! wrote:
> And it's not ironic at all. If you write a story and you don't like
> it, if you personally believe it to be a bad story, why post it?
>
> Yes it is. You people tell him not to post, and yet you guys are
> doing so.

That doesn't even make sense.


> There isn't a point in acting like it's a fact either!
> Everyone has their own opinions, so some people would like it.
> Also, remember these two magic words: "I think..."(or any
> other combination of opinion words)

If you're honestly trying to argue that this could be considered good in terms of language or plot development, I feel for you.

Memorandum! wrote:
> And it's not ironic at all. If you write a story and you don't like
> it, if you personally believe it to be a bad story, why post it?

Yes it is. You people tell him not to post, and yet you guys are doing so. Although all you people just keep saying is that it is crap, just like all your posts. Perhaps he just wanted to enter the contest, which is more than any of you did. It doesn't affect you does it? You're not physically injured are you?

> The story is crap. There's no point in lying or dressing your
> opinion up to make it something it's not.

There isn't a point in acting like it's a fact either! Everyone has their own opinions, so some people would like it. Also, remember these two magic words: "I think..."(or any other combination of opinion words)

At the beginning, people tried to help. He received loads of advice. Did he pay any attention? No. He continues to fill this forum with re-runs of his stories, which are almost all identical.

And it's not ironic at all. If you write a story and you don't like it, if you personally believe it to be a bad story, why post it?

The story is crap. There's no point in lying or dressing your opinion up to make it something it's not.

If you people hate it so much, then why did you all even bother posting in the first place? I know you are all entitled to your own opinions, but saying "Why did you post it in the first place" is a tad bit ironic don't you think? If he/she wants to write a story then let 'em. What harm will it do? At least he/she put something, even if you guys don't like it- it's better than nothing! If you all actually helped rather than just spurting out "It's crap" then we might all get somewhere.

It's actually proper English.

*gasps*

:O

EDIT:

To avoid confusion.

/sarcasm