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"Writing Songs, who's lyrics rock? - Competition"

Hello everyone! Few of you probably remember who I am but I'm back. For now anyway and I'm taking this forum to strange new places...cough. I have decided after a very poor attempt myself to start a thread where we can all write and show our songs and get feedback from other members. I know for a fact that some of you are in bands and I also think this will be a good outlet for people wanting to do something creative but a bit different. In other words, if you're sick of writing poems, stories or the occassional Hai-ku then try writing a song! And we'll tell you if it rocks.

Here's my first ever attempt (so be kind!) to start the thread of. Enjoy...or not.

COLD:
1)
Colder than the morning dew
I got up to see you
Feet are cold, late at night
You keep me warm, to fight the fight

Chorus
When I dream you're cold around me
When you're here I'm glad you found me
I'm so cold you, you keep me warm
Arms so strong, the cold is gone

2)
Dark as pitch, the droplets form
A reminder why you keep me warm
Hold you closer than before
Chilled to bone, all I want is more

Repeat Chorus

3)
Tears or rain? The look the same
I have the cold to blame,
But I'm closer than last time,
Hold your hand, grasp with mine,
I realise now, the cold's sublime

Repeat chorus 3 times and fade out

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Well there it is guys and girls, inspired by someone very special to me but I don't think it does them justice. Hope you enjoyed it, it's just a rough draft but if it gets this thread of the ground then I've done my job. Get commenting and creating my little web monkeys. Enjoy! :D

Wow this topic sunk like the titanic. Ohwell, could be worse. *listens to End Of The World by REM* Now there are some kick ass lyrics :D

metalhead wrote:
> Lyrics dont really matter too much if you think about it. Led
> Zeppelin's lyrics were totally bo11ocks, (look at stairway to
> heaven!!) yet theyre recognized as one of the greatest rock bands
> ever. probably the best id say. some people like ozzy just use lyrics
> as something to hang a melody on, and a lot of good songs arent
> actually about anything!!!

I kind of agree. Lyrics by themselves are a bit rubbish. Some of you should post links to recordings or something.

Lyrics dont really matter too much if you think about it. Led Zeppelin's lyrics were totally bo11ocks, (look at stairway to heaven!!) yet theyre recognized as one of the greatest rock bands ever. probably the best id say. some people like ozzy just use lyrics as something to hang a melody on, and a lot of good songs arent actually about anything!!!

Ive got loads of songs I could stick in here but the're pretty naff without music to acompany them.

I'll post this short one. Its not the best but it means a lot to me.

The Caring Touch


Verse
The crystal oceans of my desire,
a warming glow from beside the fire,
the sweetest that smell i crave so much,
i'm still persuing the caring touch,

Chorus
I'm thinking about what i should say to you,
I'm thinking about the way you make me feel,
I'm thinking about what together we can do,
Your caring touch, i'm still in persuit.


My band has its first gig next month. We will suck.

On another note, I almost wet myself laughing when heard some music from local bands in my town.

fair enough, they're in a band and I'm not. But oh my... what a poor attempt at ripping off GreenDay/Blink/Niravan etc

Haha still I laugh

" Stooorrryy offf theee innnnnoooceeent ROCK!!! !

I didnt, write this, but here's the lyrics to one of my old band's songs. Cant remember what we called it! Had a good riff though....



With nowhere to run
We drift further into the sun
What’s the point in saying goodbye?
I already said that yesterday


You just dry up, die and wilt
And I’m supposed to remember
What we once had
But it long became dying embers



And I’m supposed to kneel and pour out my heart
When you always seem to just tear it apart



Goodbye, the future's sold out
There's no use screaming
Who thought we'd ever get this far
Tonight, my faith has come down

Could you touch the sky
Without reaching the clouds?
Could you just let go
And stop acting so proud
Could you stop acting this way?
And give me the time to say…
It’s over

And I’m supposed to kneel and pour out my heart
When you always seem to just tear it apart
Once I let you go, you just walk all over me

Goodbye, the future's sold out
There's no use screaming
Who thought we'd ever get this far
Tonight, my faith has come down

Could you just stop acting this way?
And give me the time to say…
It’s over
It’s over



What thinks you all?

Workin' 9-5

My turn, I guess. Prepare yourselves for some of the twisted crap that comes out of my brain. If you want more of the lyrics I've written, I'll post more because I have written a whole load. =D

"Here To Die"

Running back through fields of death
Bodies I can see
Were they killed by just one man
Or by conspiracy
Running faster than before
Bullets follow me
Knowing that my fate is sealed
The reaper follows me

Is this right or is this wrong
Who am I to say?
Am I a sinner or a saint
Will I be some day?
Here to die, not to live
I will be thrown away

Running blind to certain death
My future I cannot see
Shrapnel dances in the air
Right in front of me
I clench my gun in my hand
I’m trying not to cry
Gunshots echo in my mind
I know I’m gonna die

Is this right or is this wrong
Who am I to say?
Am I a sinner or a saint
Will I be some day?
Here to die, not to live
I will be thrown away

come on guys he may worship the corrs and like sex and the city, but he has made a good effort.

some of the lines need a little work but its a good start. the problem with this competition is that it reads like poetry. there is no music to back it up so you can't really tell what its meant to be. That could be softly sung or have a more aggressive edge, say like behind blue eyes o somehting.

"Tears or rain? The look the same"

I'm almost literally crying with laughter. Pun unintended.