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The Legend of the Mysterious Well
In a small boring country lay a small boring city and in it lay a small boring town and this town was called Zamkastad. Nothing ever happened in Zamkastad. The people wanted a little bit of excitement more than anything but nothing ever happened that was worth noticing. Until one day a young girl called Aaroi suddenly dissapeared. This caused the whole city to be scared and shocked but nobody did anything about it.
Then an amazing piece of evidence was found by a news reporter called Akkaw. He saw some large footprints on the ground and stupidly decided to follow them. He followed them out of the town until they stopped at a small well. He looked closer at the well and saw that 'Aaroi' was painted in blood. He screamed and before he could turn around he was pushed into the well.
Two days later the people of Zamkastad were getting very worried. There was a murderer on the loose. So a top team of detectives had to investigate. There were called Arthy, Ariac and Addeir. They followed the footprints to the well and saw two names written in blood on the side of the well this time. They were 'Aaroi' and 'Akkaw'. The detectives stared into the well and noticed that there was some more writing on the side that said: 'I will kill all with 'A' until I kill the one called Abay.' One of the detectives ran as fast as he could and got away but the other two stayed and thought about it. Then they turned round and were faced with a horrible sight but before they could scream they got pushed into the well.
Once Addeir reached the town he ran into the palace and shouted to the king 'The killer will kill everyone until he kills your daughter!!!' The king and his daughter, Abay, stood up looking shocked. The king thought this was outrageous and ordered the guards to kill the man.
The next day, Abay went missing. The king looked everywhere for her until he saw an old shed which was locked. He ordered the guards to open the shed and when he walked in, he was faced with a horrible sight. Abay was dangling from a rope. She had hung herself. She obviously knew that she was going to die so she commited suicide so that nobody else would die before her. So for hundreds of years the whole town was shocked by the legend of the Mysterious Well.
By Wakka.
In a small boring country lay a small boring city and in it lay a small boring town and this town was called Zamkastad. Nothing ever happened in Zamkastad. The people wanted a little bit of excitement more than anything but nothing ever happened that was worth noticing. Until one day a young girl called Aaroi suddenly dissapeared. This caused the whole city to be scared and shocked but nobody did anything about it.
Then an amazing piece of evidence was found by a news reporter called Akkaw. He saw some large footprints on the ground and stupidly decided to follow them. He followed them out of the town until they stopped at a small well. He looked closer at the well and saw that 'Aaroi' was painted in blood. He screamed and before he could turn around he was pushed into the well.
Two days later the people of Zamkastad were getting very worried. There was a murderer on the loose. So a top team of detectives had to investigate. There were called Arthy, Ariac and Addeir. They followed the footprints to the well and saw two names written in blood on the side of the well this time. They were 'Aaroi' and 'Akkaw'. The detectives stared into the well and noticed that there was some more writing on the side that said: 'I will kill all with 'A' until I kill the one called Abay.' One of the detectives ran as fast as he could and got away but the other two stayed and thought about it. Then they turned round and were faced with a horrible sight but before they could scream they got pushed into the well.
Once Addeir reached the town he ran into the palace and shouted to the king 'The killer will kill everyone until he kills your daughter!!!' The king and his daughter, Abay, stood up looking shocked. The king thought this was outrageous and ordered the guards to kill the man.
The next day, Abay went missing. The king looked everywhere for her until he saw an old shed which was locked. He ordered the guards to open the shed and when he walked in, he was faced with a horrible sight. Abay was dangling from a rope. She had hung herself. She obviously knew that she was going to die so she commited suicide so that nobody else would die before her. So for hundreds of years the whole town was shocked by the legend of the Mysterious Well.
By Wakka.
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It was the kinda of story I'd expect to read in a child's compendium of stories in a short book.
That is why I didn't enjoy it.
That is why I didn't enjoy it.
Painfully short, and whilst descripitive at times, the story hardly put me off balance let alone blow me away.
Edgy wrote:
> Can't say I enjoyed this.
Why not?
> Question, what is the story behind everyone's names starting with A?
The thing that was killing everybody wanted to kill the king's daughter and knew her name began with 'A' but it didn't know what her name was. Therefore by killing everyone who had a name beginning with 'A' the king's daughter would ultimately die.
> Can't say I enjoyed this.
Why not?
> Question, what is the story behind everyone's names starting with A?
The thing that was killing everybody wanted to kill the king's daughter and knew her name began with 'A' but it didn't know what her name was. Therefore by killing everyone who had a name beginning with 'A' the king's daughter would ultimately die.
Oh well. Did you like it?
Can't say I enjoyed this.
Question, what is the story behind everyone's names starting with A?
I was hald expecting somebody to be called Aardvark.
Question, what is the story behind everyone's names starting with A?
I was hald expecting somebody to be called Aardvark.
:D
Short, very short and to the point. I think, however, it reads more like a news bulletin then a story.
Short, very short and to the point. I think, however, it reads more like a news bulletin then a story.
The Legend of the Mysterious Well
In a small boring country lay a small boring city and in it lay a small boring town and this town was called Zamkastad. Nothing ever happened in Zamkastad. The people wanted a little bit of excitement more than anything but nothing ever happened that was worth noticing. Until one day a young girl called Aaroi suddenly dissapeared. This caused the whole city to be scared and shocked but nobody did anything about it.
Then an amazing piece of evidence was found by a news reporter called Akkaw. He saw some large footprints on the ground and stupidly decided to follow them. He followed them out of the town until they stopped at a small well. He looked closer at the well and saw that 'Aaroi' was painted in blood. He screamed and before he could turn around he was pushed into the well.
Two days later the people of Zamkastad were getting very worried. There was a murderer on the loose. So a top team of detectives had to investigate. There were called Arthy, Ariac and Addeir. They followed the footprints to the well and saw two names written in blood on the side of the well this time. They were 'Aaroi' and 'Akkaw'. The detectives stared into the well and noticed that there was some more writing on the side that said: 'I will kill all with 'A' until I kill the one called Abay.' One of the detectives ran as fast as he could and got away but the other two stayed and thought about it. Then they turned round and were faced with a horrible sight but before they could scream they got pushed into the well.
Once Addeir reached the town he ran into the palace and shouted to the king 'The killer will kill everyone until he kills your daughter!!!' The king and his daughter, Abay, stood up looking shocked. The king thought this was outrageous and ordered the guards to kill the man.
The next day, Abay went missing. The king looked everywhere for her until he saw an old shed which was locked. He ordered the guards to open the shed and when he walked in, he was faced with a horrible sight. Abay was dangling from a rope. She had hung herself. She obviously knew that she was going to die so she commited suicide so that nobody else would die before her. So for hundreds of years the whole town was shocked by the legend of the Mysterious Well.
By Wakka.
In a small boring country lay a small boring city and in it lay a small boring town and this town was called Zamkastad. Nothing ever happened in Zamkastad. The people wanted a little bit of excitement more than anything but nothing ever happened that was worth noticing. Until one day a young girl called Aaroi suddenly dissapeared. This caused the whole city to be scared and shocked but nobody did anything about it.
Then an amazing piece of evidence was found by a news reporter called Akkaw. He saw some large footprints on the ground and stupidly decided to follow them. He followed them out of the town until they stopped at a small well. He looked closer at the well and saw that 'Aaroi' was painted in blood. He screamed and before he could turn around he was pushed into the well.
Two days later the people of Zamkastad were getting very worried. There was a murderer on the loose. So a top team of detectives had to investigate. There were called Arthy, Ariac and Addeir. They followed the footprints to the well and saw two names written in blood on the side of the well this time. They were 'Aaroi' and 'Akkaw'. The detectives stared into the well and noticed that there was some more writing on the side that said: 'I will kill all with 'A' until I kill the one called Abay.' One of the detectives ran as fast as he could and got away but the other two stayed and thought about it. Then they turned round and were faced with a horrible sight but before they could scream they got pushed into the well.
Once Addeir reached the town he ran into the palace and shouted to the king 'The killer will kill everyone until he kills your daughter!!!' The king and his daughter, Abay, stood up looking shocked. The king thought this was outrageous and ordered the guards to kill the man.
The next day, Abay went missing. The king looked everywhere for her until he saw an old shed which was locked. He ordered the guards to open the shed and when he walked in, he was faced with a horrible sight. Abay was dangling from a rope. She had hung herself. She obviously knew that she was going to die so she commited suicide so that nobody else would die before her. So for hundreds of years the whole town was shocked by the legend of the Mysterious Well.
By Wakka.
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