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Playing on my xbox with my brother and my mum called my sister down and said, "so who wants to go up to london tomorrow" But we go there every month to visit friends, so we all just go "ye ok, might as well" then my dad said "well how bout go to london tomorrow then go to florida for three weeks on friday"
I was in shock, we only came back from the usa in november...
What a suprise, and i get to miss the first two weeks back at school...
So i will be gone for about 3-4 weeks, so i will see you all when i get back...
P.S may be many mistakes in this post as i am excited as hell...
I was in shock, we only came back from the usa in november...
What a suprise, and i get to miss the first two weeks back at school...
So i will be gone for about 3-4 weeks, so i will see you all when i get back...
P.S may be many mistakes in this post as i am excited as hell...
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What do I do when I'm being bored?
I be pretentious; that's what I be.
I be pretentious; that's what I be.
You're sick in the head I say!
SICK!
SICK!
And mine for reading it.
That's ten minutes of my life wasted.
Robin wrote:
> Playing on my xbox with my brother and my mum called my sister down
State the person intended, as for all I know, a four eyed monkey could have been playing with my brother, but no other mistakes in that line.
> and said, "so who wants to go up to london tomorrow" But we
The beginning of this line should have went: "and said: " ,not "and said, ". Allways use capital letters for the beggining of a sentence, and London begins with a capital L. Include a question mark, if something is being asked, at the end of the sentence. Try not to start a new sentence with but. It's vulgar.
> go there every month to visit friends, so we all just go "ye ok,
The errors come late in this line, so improvement is definitely seen. None of you went anywhere at the time, so you "all just said", or any past participle which describes the action of speech. "Ye" is currently not an existing word in the English language. "Yeh" is a slang word, commonly taking the place of "yes", though this remains a mystery as to why people use it instead of the same syllabled proper English version of affirmation.
> might as well" then my dad said "well how bout go to london
There is no evidence to suggest what subject "might as well", so remember to include subjects in sentences. Again, end sentences with proper punctuation. The next sentence should state: "Then my dad said:" as there is no captital letter at the beggining of sentence and no punctuation mark to suggest that you would tell us what your "Dad" has said. The next sentence is incomprehensable: revise.
> tomorrow then go to florida for three weeks on friday"
After "tommorow", a break in the sentence is needed. This can be easily applied, through usage of a "Comma". All place names such as Florida begin with capital letters. Again, end sentences with correct punctuation. In this case, use a "Question mark", which is accessed through holding the SHIFT key, and then pressing the bottom right dash key.
> I was in shock, we only came back from the usa in november...
There are not many errors in this line. It would be more appropriate to replace the comma, which procedes the word: "shock" with a full stop. The U.S.A are initials for a place, so use capital letters, and prefferably full stops inbetween the letters, to accentuate the fact that they definitely are initials.
> What a suprise, and i get to miss the first two weeks back at
The word "I" should allways be written as a capital "I". The "first two weeks" of which you speak, have not happened yet, so the structure should be: "and I shall/will get to miss the first two weeks". Otherwise, the sentence is fine.
> school...
Well done. This is the first line which contains no errors.
> So i will be gone for about 3-4 weeks, so i will see you all when i
Remember that "I" is allways a capital letter. It makes bad syntax to put two "So I"s in a sentence and disjoints it. A better alternative would be to place a full stop in place of the comma after "weeks". Discard the "so" in the new sentence.
> get back...
Congratulations! This is the second line which contains no errors. Keep up the good work.
> P.S may be many mistakes in this post as i am excited as hell...
It starts well, but you do not state that "something" may be. Through simple deduction: I have deduced that the common word "There", should precede "may". Remember to use capital Is when talking about yourself.
In response to your statement, yes: there are many mistakes in this post.
As you can probably see, fellow forum members: I'm bored.
> Playing on my xbox with my brother and my mum called my sister down
State the person intended, as for all I know, a four eyed monkey could have been playing with my brother, but no other mistakes in that line.
> and said, "so who wants to go up to london tomorrow" But we
The beginning of this line should have went: "and said: " ,not "and said, ". Allways use capital letters for the beggining of a sentence, and London begins with a capital L. Include a question mark, if something is being asked, at the end of the sentence. Try not to start a new sentence with but. It's vulgar.
> go there every month to visit friends, so we all just go "ye ok,
The errors come late in this line, so improvement is definitely seen. None of you went anywhere at the time, so you "all just said", or any past participle which describes the action of speech. "Ye" is currently not an existing word in the English language. "Yeh" is a slang word, commonly taking the place of "yes", though this remains a mystery as to why people use it instead of the same syllabled proper English version of affirmation.
> might as well" then my dad said "well how bout go to london
There is no evidence to suggest what subject "might as well", so remember to include subjects in sentences. Again, end sentences with proper punctuation. The next sentence should state: "Then my dad said:" as there is no captital letter at the beggining of sentence and no punctuation mark to suggest that you would tell us what your "Dad" has said. The next sentence is incomprehensable: revise.
> tomorrow then go to florida for three weeks on friday"
After "tommorow", a break in the sentence is needed. This can be easily applied, through usage of a "Comma". All place names such as Florida begin with capital letters. Again, end sentences with correct punctuation. In this case, use a "Question mark", which is accessed through holding the SHIFT key, and then pressing the bottom right dash key.
> I was in shock, we only came back from the usa in november...
There are not many errors in this line. It would be more appropriate to replace the comma, which procedes the word: "shock" with a full stop. The U.S.A are initials for a place, so use capital letters, and prefferably full stops inbetween the letters, to accentuate the fact that they definitely are initials.
> What a suprise, and i get to miss the first two weeks back at
The word "I" should allways be written as a capital "I". The "first two weeks" of which you speak, have not happened yet, so the structure should be: "and I shall/will get to miss the first two weeks". Otherwise, the sentence is fine.
> school...
Well done. This is the first line which contains no errors.
> So i will be gone for about 3-4 weeks, so i will see you all when i
Remember that "I" is allways a capital letter. It makes bad syntax to put two "So I"s in a sentence and disjoints it. A better alternative would be to place a full stop in place of the comma after "weeks". Discard the "so" in the new sentence.
> get back...
Congratulations! This is the second line which contains no errors. Keep up the good work.
> P.S may be many mistakes in this post as i am excited as hell...
It starts well, but you do not state that "something" may be. Through simple deduction: I have deduced that the common word "There", should precede "may". Remember to use capital Is when talking about yourself.
In response to your statement, yes: there are many mistakes in this post.
As you can probably see, fellow forum members: I'm bored.
Robin wrote:
> um ye, back to america now, i cant wait, maybe my mum will let me go
> to hooters this time...
#Get on down to Hooters!#
> um ye, back to america now, i cant wait, maybe my mum will let me go
> to hooters this time...
#Get on down to Hooters!#
You can only hope...
Also you've got to take pictures for your good old mate wam man the great...
Also you've got to take pictures for your good old mate wam man the great...
um ye, back to america now, i cant wait, maybe my mum will let me go to hooters this time...
Yes, commas and other punctuational skills go to hell when I'm in a hurry.
I was only teasing mate.
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