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"Tony's Typical Day"

Dogfather here, just as something to do I thought I would write a poem about Tony and a typical day of his life. It took me ages to do and even though some of you could have done better in 5 minutes you could atleast still appreciate it and give me your comments and tell me what you think. Here it is:


As the birds chirped and the church bells rung
Tony knew the day had just begun
So he turned over to see that it had gone past 8
And realized that he was an hour late
He had a board meeting at 11
And he was meant to be at work by 7

So he got out of bed as quick as hell
But could still taste that awful smell
His head hurt from the night before
And his arms were rather sore
He had not time to have his early morning fag
He rushed to get dressed then ran out to his jag

He got in his brand new Jag and he was away
Went speeding at 120mph and was soon to pay
As he speeded on his way to work
He hit an object and felt a sudden jerk
In a panic he got out the car to see what he hit
And saw Ali rolling down a pit.

He looked about and no one was there
Then he grabbed Ali by the hair
And stuck his body in his boot
Getting blood all over his £ 1000 suit
He drove to the nearest football pitch
And threw Ali’s body in a muddy ditch

So off he went, to work in his normal way
Finished at 5 and went home like any normal day
The journey home made him think about what he’d done
He’d known Ali for years he was like a son
But if he hadn’t he would have went to jail
Just this thought sent Tony pail

When he finally got home he went a sleepless night
Then in the morning he got a freight
A loud knock at the door was a surprising wake up call
So he went to answer it, holding back his emotional haul.
At the door were the police who didn’t say a sound
They didn’t need to, as he knew Ali’s body had been found

Tony I’m afraid we have some bad news
Tony tried to remain calm, he had everything to loose
For what they said next would ruin his life
And that of his daughter and his beautiful wife
We’re sorry but your friend Ali’s has been found dead
We found him in a ditch with his eyes dislodged from his head

The police left as Tony was in a terrible state
He had to confess he couldn’t wait
But that meant a minimum of seven years in jail
He’d never see light again; his Lawyer would fail
His whole world had been turned upside down
And there was nothing he could do just sit there and frown

He had enough he knew what he had to do
He would die, but first he’d kill all his crew
The whole SR team would be dead by the end of the day
And Tony realised this was good to say
He went to the HQ with a 20” knife
And started by murdering his wife

He went on a rampage killing everyone in sight
Stabbing them so quickly they couldn’t put up a fight
Suddenly all the surrounding lights went from bright to dim
Making him notice the blood trail following him
He had now wiped out more half the team
By removing their stomachs, livers and their spleens

Walking to his office he noticed the light was on
And the stereo was playing his favourite song
So he stepped in the office and got a freight
To see Ali was there standing by the light
But how? Tony said out loud
Laughter came throughout the crowd

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It was a birthday present Tony
It’s all just phoney
But he’d just stabbed 30 people until they died
Tony ran he had to hide
He’d killed all those innocent children and men
He couldn’t take it so stabbed himself in the neck with his pen

He was buried a week later under his favourite tree
For all those who loved him, to be able to see
He had led a great life
With a caring daughter and a loving wife
But now he must go to a better place
But the people of SR will always remember his face

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Now the thing I couldn't decide was the ending so please tell me which one you thought was better. Her is the alternative. Thanks

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"It was a practical joke Tony,
The whole thing was a phony!"
'But I just stabbed 30 people they are all dead!'
The sweat dripped from Tony's head
But Ali said not to worry
The knife was just a dummy

'But what about the blood?'
"Don't worry!" Said Ali "that was just a dud,
The staff used a red liquid, it fooled you well!"
'So how did you know about the rampage, how could you tell?'
"Your wife told us so; she'd already swapped the knives"
'Well, this proves everything, we have nine lives!'

So after all my hard efforts, did this turn out to be any good. Please go easy on my it was a first attempt. Oh and remember to say which ending was better.

Thanks for reading

The Dogfather

the kids greatest 100 shows is over now + I have a driving lesson early tomorrow, NO WORK! hope everyone enjoyed their bank holiday.
see ya dogfather.

LOL, all of this is good anyways as it's helping me become a regular, so keep up the replies as I'm on til 3am

I can't do that, it's your own style.
*Fogmaster turns away wiping the sweat from his brow, hoping he doesn't have to give an answer.

Ok, give me a topic and I'll try and turn it into a poem. Just a short one for fun, not rude though.

lol, not a nice way to go?
if you keep popping this topic up a notable will read it and you'll get more hits, + keep writing your poems.

Some response, yeah from you, Shock and Seifer. Big whoopetedo. But it is better than none. And you said when there ready, well after no one replies to a chat room topic in a while it goes to the bottom of the list unseen. Alone with me, but I'm going to drown myself and fall to the bottom of the ocean and no one would miss me or even know I'm gone.

The Dogfather wrote:
> As nobody really seems to be replying, can someone just answer me
> this. Is it because you come in the room, see a long topic and
> can't be bothered to read it?

probably, it's a great poem though, you already had some response, the people will come when they're ready.

*Starts talking to himself and going insane as a direct reuslt of no-one replying*

As nobody really seems to be replying, can someone just answer me this. Is it because you come in the room, see a long topic and can't be bothered to read it?

Thanks Shock it's nice to see a postive inmpression among all of you. Thanks.