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I see the fire in front of my eyes.
Burning,blazing hot.
As the wood burns into crisp in the fire.
We throw in plastic and watch that melt.
As we sit on the grass in the garden I see the fire.
The sparks fly high.
I see the fire and it is hot.
If it was longer and more descriptive it would be - not diabolical. As it is ... edit it and refine it, add more desciption and more advanced vocabulary
*loads shotgun*
I go around primary schools to boost moral.
"What!? You call that an 'K'? *slap* I've seen blind, limbless lemurs form better 'K's! Get out of my sight!"
> I'd suggest never trying to write poetry again.
It's comments like that which lead to children's inadequecy for reading and writing...
;-)