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So like you all say I must change my stories well here one for I will change and make you all happy well heres a change right now!
The warriors stand in the woods with their heads up high, with there bow and arrows,ready to kill the beast in the woods. As throwdough walks into the woods everyone follows him. Then they see it the beast with his teeth sharp red eyes and as big as a tower. Throwdough gets ready he jumps off a tree and fires a arrow, and it hits the beast and stabs though him. But the beast is still strong he pulls out the arrow. Everyone shoots and the world revolves around them, as arrows fly at the monster but he is strong the monsters runs towards them they must run and get away! As they ran though the woods the beast followed. His calws sharp and ready to grabbed everyone. Throwdough was miles ahead of everybody. Sharpeye was coming to but the beast was getting closer and closer but they were getting away now!
As everyone turned round the corner they stopped the beast had gone but they didn't know where. They look behind them but the beast had gone. They started running again but then they heard a scream. A woman came running towards them and the beast was following with his eyes staring and blood dripping from his mouth. It jumped and the woman and ripped her up. Everyone started running again. They jumped up on to a roof and climbed a ladder to the top. The beast couldn't get up now Firestarted pulled out his lighter and lit the end of his arrow. He then fired it at the beast the beast set on fire. It went running around trying to stop the fire. Everyone lit their arrows and fired them at the beast, the beast dropped to the floor and turned to crisp!
The beast was now dead everyone got off the roof and jumped to the floor.
So what do you think I will add more after you say what you think!
The warriors stand in the woods with their heads up high, with there bow and arrows,ready to kill the beast in the woods. As throwdough walks into the woods everyone follows him. Then they see it the beast with his teeth sharp red eyes and as big as a tower. Throwdough gets ready he jumps off a tree and fires a arrow, and it hits the beast and stabs though him. But the beast is still strong he pulls out the arrow. Everyone shoots and the world revolves around them, as arrows fly at the monster but he is strong the monsters runs towards them they must run and get away! As they ran though the woods the beast followed. His calws sharp and ready to grabbed everyone. Throwdough was miles ahead of everybody. Sharpeye was coming to but the beast was getting closer and closer but they were getting away now!
As everyone turned round the corner they stopped the beast had gone but they didn't know where. They look behind them but the beast had gone. They started running again but then they heard a scream. A woman came running towards them and the beast was following with his eyes staring and blood dripping from his mouth. It jumped and the woman and ripped her up. Everyone started running again. They jumped up on to a roof and climbed a ladder to the top. The beast couldn't get up now Firestarted pulled out his lighter and lit the end of his arrow. He then fired it at the beast the beast set on fire. It went running around trying to stop the fire. Everyone lit their arrows and fired them at the beast, the beast dropped to the floor and turned to crisp!
The beast was now dead everyone got off the roof and jumped to the floor.
So what do you think I will add more after you say what you think!
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Sounds like a 'movie pitch'.
I like it.
I like it.
What you mean what do you still want me to do that Romance then?
Where is this change?
This is the complete opposite to what anyone has said.
Woops let me just change it a sec no fall stops or gasps!
Why you saying that?
I think my brain just leaked out of my ears :)
So like you all say I must change my stories well here one for I will change and make you all happy well heres a change right now!
The warriors stand in the woods with their heads up high, with there bow and arrows,ready to kill the beast in the woods. As throwdough walks into the woods everyone follows him. Then they see it the beast with his teeth sharp red eyes and as big as a tower. Throwdough gets ready he jumps off a tree and fires a arrow, and it hits the beast and stabs though him. But the beast is still strong he pulls out the arrow. Everyone shoots and the world revolves around them, as arrows fly at the monster but he is strong the monsters runs towards them they must run and get away! As they ran though the woods the beast followed. His calws sharp and ready to grabbed everyone. Throwdough was miles ahead of everybody. Sharpeye was coming to but the beast was getting closer and closer but they were getting away now!
As everyone turned round the corner they stopped the beast had gone but they didn't know where. They look behind them but the beast had gone. They started running again but then they heard a scream. A woman came running towards them and the beast was following with his eyes staring and blood dripping from his mouth. It jumped and the woman and ripped her up. Everyone started running again. They jumped up on to a roof and climbed a ladder to the top. The beast couldn't get up now Firestarted pulled out his lighter and lit the end of his arrow. He then fired it at the beast the beast set on fire. It went running around trying to stop the fire. Everyone lit their arrows and fired them at the beast, the beast dropped to the floor and turned to crisp!
The beast was now dead everyone got off the roof and jumped to the floor.
So what do you think I will add more after you say what you think!
The warriors stand in the woods with their heads up high, with there bow and arrows,ready to kill the beast in the woods. As throwdough walks into the woods everyone follows him. Then they see it the beast with his teeth sharp red eyes and as big as a tower. Throwdough gets ready he jumps off a tree and fires a arrow, and it hits the beast and stabs though him. But the beast is still strong he pulls out the arrow. Everyone shoots and the world revolves around them, as arrows fly at the monster but he is strong the monsters runs towards them they must run and get away! As they ran though the woods the beast followed. His calws sharp and ready to grabbed everyone. Throwdough was miles ahead of everybody. Sharpeye was coming to but the beast was getting closer and closer but they were getting away now!
As everyone turned round the corner they stopped the beast had gone but they didn't know where. They look behind them but the beast had gone. They started running again but then they heard a scream. A woman came running towards them and the beast was following with his eyes staring and blood dripping from his mouth. It jumped and the woman and ripped her up. Everyone started running again. They jumped up on to a roof and climbed a ladder to the top. The beast couldn't get up now Firestarted pulled out his lighter and lit the end of his arrow. He then fired it at the beast the beast set on fire. It went running around trying to stop the fire. Everyone lit their arrows and fired them at the beast, the beast dropped to the floor and turned to crisp!
The beast was now dead everyone got off the roof and jumped to the floor.
So what do you think I will add more after you say what you think!
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