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Wed 11/08/04 at 21:35
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"Incomprehendible"
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Hey all. Discodexy asked if someone would start a new one of these competitions, so here goes.

Rules:

-Maximum of, shall we say, 200 words?
-The word to base it around is "pain", you can easily get something out of that.

I'm going on holiday on Sunday but will judge soon after I get back. Shall we say, entries in by 2nd September, and I will judge them and name the top three poems on the 4th September. This gives people plenty of time to get their entries in.

Post your poems in this thread!

Enjoy

RESULTS!

3rd Place goes to Mav for this entry...

Pain.
Makes me feel insane,
It comes and goes
My mind is slain,
Withdrawn, retreated,
A wounded fawn,
Nothing is here for me,
Nothing will help.

It rises up - the pain in me,
Even alone, I feel its grip,
No pressure, no feeling,
Just the horror of it,
I fall, neglected,
A victim, rejected,
My mind is affected
In ways I accept it,
But I can't help but give in,
It overthrows me, commands,
I'm suffocating, holding out my arms,
Grasping for help, but I slip away,
Unnoticed, uncared for, there's no other way,
They don't know about me, neither do you,
I drift through crowds,
Invisible.

Yet my pain remains, I live in vain,
Because I can't.
There's no going forward,
No going back,
To these people I'm a pet,
They call me Jack.


2nd place goes to Grebo, for this entry...

"In mute mental anguish,
We are divided by allegiances,
Our stoppered emotions,
Precipitating smouldering conflagrations,
And explosions of patience,
Whether soul-less happiness,
Or soul-full despair,
Inciting reactions of ineffectuality,
Leading to solitude,
Always looking to reason,
But finding indefatigable naiveté,
Always leading, leading, leading,
Downwards spiralling,
To an ultimate climax,
Rushing, insisting,
and pressing the balance,
Losing our equilibrium,
Leading, leading,
Subconscious observations,
Of intellectual depravations,
And self imposed mental anarchy,
Giving stunning inspirations,
Revelations of reality,
Dawning from obscurity,
Losing, losing,
Humour engulfed,
Mind retreating,
Downwards spiralling,
Self absorbed,
Comatose,
Eventual emotional flat liner."


and the winner is... Azul! For his entry, I've got the Power...

My remorseful soul, a prism of unrest;
Summer rains replenishing and tender
And shadowy clouds ebb and flow with jest;
A ray of gold pierces them with splendour
As light hits my soul and splits into a rainbow.
The valley echoes with my brothers cries
And fields of faith bloom with hope as they grow.
I see my beacon shine through broken skies:

Sapphire birds dance through the eloquent air
And roses sway in the winds of grandeur.
The beauty overwhelms as petals wear,
and hated barbs play a hurtful overture.
The thorns puncture my heart with woeful pain -
I'm smiling; meaningfully going insane

Congratulations Azul, you've won the satisfaction of knowing I thought your poem was better than all the other entries.

Thanks to everyone who entered (especially Mattribute, who put in loads of short, often odd, poems), I just thought these were the best of the lot. Anyone that wants to start the next competition with their own word is free to do so.

Cheers

*HE*
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Thu 12/08/04 at 23:08
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"bit of a brain"
Posts: 18,933
I guess we know what KJs been up to.
Thu 12/08/04 at 23:08
Regular
Posts: 2,849
Tony, I'm hurt. That was from my true, dark history. I feel crushed.
Thu 12/08/04 at 23:07
Regular
Posts: 23,216
50 top male artists on VH1 has finished at last
And now I'm not sure what to watch
But Tony's here
From his strange castle
Where he sometimes leaves
To cut a ribbon and have a photo taken of him
Thu 12/08/04 at 23:06
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"Teal'c"
Posts: 3,617
Tony wrote:
> Please carefully note:
>
> You are not permitted to copy other people's written work into the
> Special Reserve Chat Forums, or anywhere else for that matter.
>
> Also - poems are less likely to be considered for Gameaday prizes if
> they are under 200 words.

:(
Thu 12/08/04 at 23:06
Regular
"Teal'c"
Posts: 3,617
That poem moved me to weep.
Very powerful, powerful.
Thu 12/08/04 at 23:05
Regular
"tokyo police club"
Posts: 12,540
TONY!!
Thu 12/08/04 at 23:05
Staff Moderator
"Must lose weight"
Posts: 5,778
Please carefully note:

You are not permitted to copy other people's written work into the Special Reserve Chat Forums, or anywhere else for that matter.

Also - poems are less likely to be considered for Gameaday prizes if they are under 200 words.
Thu 12/08/04 at 23:04
Regular
Posts: 2,849
OH NO
My porn collection has gone

OH NO
Oh baby it has so gone

IT LOOKS
Like my mummy has taken it away

AH HA
I see a sketchpad

I AM
DrawingthefundamentalfacialandbodystructureofJennaJameson

WHAT.... SHALL... I... DO??

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Mummy, I forgive you so
Thu 12/08/04 at 23:00
Regular
"tokyo police club"
Posts: 12,540
Mother

'Get your hair cut'
No
'GET YOUR HAIR CUT'
Go away
You fat old ho
Thu 12/08/04 at 23:00
Regular
"Which one's pink?"
Posts: 12,152
ya bas

geez yer moneh
ya bas
am gonnae slash ee
ya pr*ck
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