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I really don’t know why we don’t have one of these in the Life forum, so this is why I’ve decided to create one. For a while now, I’ve being following the SSC and I was hoping to have a go myself – but when I tried to put my thoughts on paper I wasn’t going to happen. Then I decided to make a poem – something I really enjoy, and something that I excelled at in my scholar youth. So hopefully, those creative people who write SSC may want to have a pop at the new and exciting SPC too.
We can use similar rules to the SSC; the winner gets to pick a subject, a closing date and gets to judge the entries – as well as adding their own personals rule, if applicable.
I think 300 words would be enough to compose a decent poem – my Tramp poem may look long, but in actual fact its only about 230 words. But we will have to see about the word limit, expectations may be made. And remember, its not quantity – its quality !
I will try and organize some sort of SPC website – or I’ll talk to Ashman about the situation, seem as he has made a good job of the SSC site – but we will have to see if this takes off first.
So then, onto the Poem!
This Poems topic should be based around a Horse it doesn’t sound like anything exciting, but rest assured if you think about it you could come up with some interesting things – make your own title and post it in this thread. The closing date will be two weeks from Today – The 7th of august giving most people a good chance to get their entries in.
I really do hope that this can catch on, but if it doesn’t then no hard feelings – its just something that I’ve had on my mind for some time. Please give the Short Poem Competition a chance!
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We have a winner!
I read through them all last night, I couldn’t really decide – because most of them were quite good. Although I think that Paradoxes poem took the biscuit. It wasn’t really about a horse – but he mentioned the word hoarse, I didn’t say it had to be about a horse.
I really liked his rhyming style – although it was short it was defiantly sweet. Like a small chocolate killer cake from Thornton’s. I’d rather have a small cake from there, than a big cake from somewhere like Tesco. Enough of my cake fantasies though.
So I here by crown Paradox the winner, for bringing a smile to my face with his unique poem. If you would, please start a new topic ; Short Poem Competition 2 and explain your set of rules – a closing date – and the topic… And please, try to choose a better topic than I did!
Ok, well I have to go – thanks to everybody who entered. And sorry I’m sorry that judged late ; I hope you can find it in your hoarse heart to forgive me.
We can use similar rules to the SSC; the winner gets to pick a subject, a closing date and gets to judge the entries – as well as adding their own personals rule, if applicable.
I think 300 words would be enough to compose a decent poem – my Tramp poem may look long, but in actual fact its only about 230 words. But we will have to see about the word limit, expectations may be made. And remember, its not quantity – its quality !
I will try and organize some sort of SPC website – or I’ll talk to Ashman about the situation, seem as he has made a good job of the SSC site – but we will have to see if this takes off first.
So then, onto the Poem!
This Poems topic should be based around a Horse it doesn’t sound like anything exciting, but rest assured if you think about it you could come up with some interesting things – make your own title and post it in this thread. The closing date will be two weeks from Today – The 7th of august giving most people a good chance to get their entries in.
I really do hope that this can catch on, but if it doesn’t then no hard feelings – its just something that I’ve had on my mind for some time. Please give the Short Poem Competition a chance!
===================================================
We have a winner!
I read through them all last night, I couldn’t really decide – because most of them were quite good. Although I think that Paradoxes poem took the biscuit. It wasn’t really about a horse – but he mentioned the word hoarse, I didn’t say it had to be about a horse.
I really liked his rhyming style – although it was short it was defiantly sweet. Like a small chocolate killer cake from Thornton’s. I’d rather have a small cake from there, than a big cake from somewhere like Tesco. Enough of my cake fantasies though.
So I here by crown Paradox the winner, for bringing a smile to my face with his unique poem. If you would, please start a new topic ; Short Poem Competition 2 and explain your set of rules – a closing date – and the topic… And please, try to choose a better topic than I did!
Ok, well I have to go – thanks to everybody who entered. And sorry I’m sorry that judged late ; I hope you can find it in your hoarse heart to forgive me.
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There was an old woman who swallowed a horse,
She swallowed a horse?
She's dead of course.
She swallowed a horse?
She's dead of course.
I Can't speak
A dry, alkaline gullet
Choking, coughing, rasping.
Pleas for help unspoken
Suffocation stopped by gasping
Air so dry and desiccant
Water could save my cause
Tissue burns and rots to bone
My throat's so bloody hoarse
A dry, alkaline gullet
Choking, coughing, rasping.
Pleas for help unspoken
Suffocation stopped by gasping
Air so dry and desiccant
Water could save my cause
Tissue burns and rots to bone
My throat's so bloody hoarse
I think it's pretty safe to say that the winner = me.
I'd be happy to give my opinion on each poem. I guess you could call me independent because I don't know any of you. You could even call me a crit because I do this sort of thing for the BBC on a regular basis.
If you'd like me to get involved please bear in mind that I'm used to critting some of the best new poetry in the country/world so I may be a little bit harsh (but fair). Also I hate poems about horses becuase they tend to be horribly per se and unpublishable. I'm a dreadful snob sometimes and slightly elitist.
KJ
If you'd like me to get involved please bear in mind that I'm used to critting some of the best new poetry in the country/world so I may be a little bit harsh (but fair). Also I hate poems about horses becuase they tend to be horribly per se and unpublishable. I'm a dreadful snob sometimes and slightly elitist.
KJ
Judgement day today!
Wakka wrote:
> Not one bit of it wasn't like yours.
> Not one bit of it wasn't like yours.
the sun rises, the chickens moan.
the sun sinks, the cows moan.
Goddamm it stop moaning wife..
(just a joke)
the sun sinks, the cows moan.
Goddamm it stop moaning wife..
(just a joke)
Forest Fan wrote:
> Yes, but it's the moral behind it - which prompted me to a good
> ignoring of Wakka.
Not one bit of it was like yours.
> Yes, but it's the moral behind it - which prompted me to a good
> ignoring of Wakka.
Not one bit of it was like yours.
I thought this ignore malarky was purely to counter those weekend idiots.
Yes, but it's the moral behind it - which prompted me to a good ignoring of Wakka.
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