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Sat 22/05/04 at 17:52
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The title is 'should corporal punishment be reintroduced?'
Its a piece of english coursework which i have rewritten 3 times. Although it isn't finished yet, I could still use some feedback on it.

People are killed everyday. Its a fact of life. There are always people who will bring harm to others. The world isn't perfect. But what would happen if some form of execution was reintroduced in Britain? Would this make the world a safer place? By deterring evil people, by threat of death? I think it would. Their are lots of benefits to executing a murderer, before they kill you. I will start by saying that some people cannot be helped. They are born evil and no push in the right direction can change that. But why should we constantly have to look over our shoulders in a dark alley? Or think twice about walking past nasty looking people? Everything would be so much better, if the electrice chair was warmed up once more.
A sick minded murderer would never have the opportunity to kill again.If corporal punishment was reintroduced. They would be sent to prison for whatever malicious crime and never be given another chance. This is why execution would be such a good idea. Suppose this; A madman hacks somebody up and goes to prison for just 8 years. Then he is release and wants to kill again. And he does, thanks to our corrupt useless justice system. Alot of suffering and sadness could have been avoided if this man had been executed for his first crime. Not just, pathetically being made to site in a room behind bars, for several years and get released by looking sorry in an appeal.
Any lunatic wouldn't contemplate murder if the consequences were harsher. Execution would probably act as a good repellant. People would eventually learn that murder was wrong and im sure this would make our prisons alot more spacious. Even people from unscrupulous, broken backgrounds wouldn't have the desire to kill, through fear of being killed themselves. Now matter how they are raised, no one wants to die, do they? Prison could be promoted. Things like television and magaazine advertisments could be implemented to warn people what would happen if they murdered anyone. I think corporal punishment would change the world for the better.

Their you have it. Please dont be to nasty about it. Say something nice or dont say anything at all. Although im welcome to constructive criticism.
Sun 23/05/04 at 14:51
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Wakka wrote:
> Do you honestly think that I would waste my time coming up with a
> good story for people I have never even seen before?

Possibly the most retarded comment ever.
I swear to God.

Para already covered half of it, but why write then? 99.9% of writer's write because they enjoy writing. Because they want to show off their work. Because they want to improve.

Ahhh, and you wonder why I mock your idiocy.
Hmm.
Sun 23/05/04 at 13:07
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Wakka wrote:
> Well actually, I have won two story writing competitions.
>
> Do you honestly think that I would waste my time coming up with a
> good story for people I have never even seen before?

So you were good pals with the judges of those story writing contests then?
Sun 23/05/04 at 11:50
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No, but some of the people in the life forum are semi-professional writers.

ie Meka, pb, Black Glove and now and again Rickoss.

Edit: Absolutely NOT FFF

If you're this uber-writer you claim to be, why do you have no interest in 'showing off' your skills to likeminded people?
Sun 23/05/04 at 11:45
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Yeah, but you're not exactly publishers, are you?
Sun 23/05/04 at 09:31
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Mostly yes.

When you send a script off to a publisher you dont think "I'll do a half assed job because they're not my mate"
Sat 22/05/04 at 22:42
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Memorandum! wrote:
> And I'm sure you're a fantastic essay-writer yourself.
> I'm not being sarcastic.

Well actually, I have won two story writing competitions.

> I've seen your stories and if those are anything to go by, your essays must seriously rock. Really.

Do you honestly think that I would waste my time coming up with a good story for people I have never even seen before?
Sat 22/05/04 at 21:53
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Well, i'll not comment on the style of the essay or anything as i've yet to get it right.

But i'd just like to comment on the question its about, should we re-introduce capital punishment?

I say no. It doesn't really work. I point at places like Texas, they have it, and it doesn't deter people, at least not enough to make a difference. Even in Saudi Arabia, where the death is especially brutal, and it still doesn't deter people.
Also, what would be bad enough to justify it, murder? Well, i think its about 70% of murders are crimes of necessity, e.g. battered wifes etc...
Plus, if a person is sentanced to death, and its carried out, but then new evidence is found, well, its just too late, not to mention the law system is far from perfect.

There are other reasons, but i can't be bothered to put them, but all in all i say no.
Sat 22/05/04 at 21:43
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Sarcasm, the tool of the embittered and witty :-D
Sat 22/05/04 at 21:38
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Wakka wrote:
> *looks at Green Ferocity's essay*
>
> Hmm, quite good.
>
> *looks at Para's essay*
>
> Wow!
>
> *looks back at Green Ferocity's entry*
>
> *sniggers*

And I'm sure you're a fantastic essay-writer yourself.
I'm not being sarcastic. I've seen your stories and if those are anything to go by, your essays must seriously rock. Really.
Sat 22/05/04 at 21:35
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I thought those single sentances were written for effect, to sort of drill it in.

I thought it was well written as it expressed your view, even though I'd disagree with it. If you're looking for more topic to fill up another 300 words then you could go for the flaws of capitcal punishment, take a look at the other side of the story.

This would suggest that you've put real thought into the pros and cons of both sides, rather than just thinking down one line.

But either way. :-)

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