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The title is 'should corporal punishment be reintroduced?'
Its a piece of english coursework which i have rewritten 3 times. Although it isn't finished yet, I could still use some feedback on it.
People are killed everyday. Its a fact of life. There are always people who will bring harm to others. The world isn't perfect. But what would happen if some form of execution was reintroduced in Britain? Would this make the world a safer place? By deterring evil people, by threat of death? I think it would. Their are lots of benefits to executing a murderer, before they kill you. I will start by saying that some people cannot be helped. They are born evil and no push in the right direction can change that. But why should we constantly have to look over our shoulders in a dark alley? Or think twice about walking past nasty looking people? Everything would be so much better, if the electrice chair was warmed up once more.
A sick minded murderer would never have the opportunity to kill again.If corporal punishment was reintroduced. They would be sent to prison for whatever malicious crime and never be given another chance. This is why execution would be such a good idea. Suppose this; A madman hacks somebody up and goes to prison for just 8 years. Then he is release and wants to kill again. And he does, thanks to our corrupt useless justice system. Alot of suffering and sadness could have been avoided if this man had been executed for his first crime. Not just, pathetically being made to site in a room behind bars, for several years and get released by looking sorry in an appeal.
Any lunatic wouldn't contemplate murder if the consequences were harsher. Execution would probably act as a good repellant. People would eventually learn that murder was wrong and im sure this would make our prisons alot more spacious. Even people from unscrupulous, broken backgrounds wouldn't have the desire to kill, through fear of being killed themselves. Now matter how they are raised, no one wants to die, do they? Prison could be promoted. Things like television and magaazine advertisments could be implemented to warn people what would happen if they murdered anyone. I think corporal punishment would change the world for the better.
Their you have it. Please dont be to nasty about it. Say something nice or dont say anything at all. Although im welcome to constructive criticism.
Its a piece of english coursework which i have rewritten 3 times. Although it isn't finished yet, I could still use some feedback on it.
People are killed everyday. Its a fact of life. There are always people who will bring harm to others. The world isn't perfect. But what would happen if some form of execution was reintroduced in Britain? Would this make the world a safer place? By deterring evil people, by threat of death? I think it would. Their are lots of benefits to executing a murderer, before they kill you. I will start by saying that some people cannot be helped. They are born evil and no push in the right direction can change that. But why should we constantly have to look over our shoulders in a dark alley? Or think twice about walking past nasty looking people? Everything would be so much better, if the electrice chair was warmed up once more.
A sick minded murderer would never have the opportunity to kill again.If corporal punishment was reintroduced. They would be sent to prison for whatever malicious crime and never be given another chance. This is why execution would be such a good idea. Suppose this; A madman hacks somebody up and goes to prison for just 8 years. Then he is release and wants to kill again. And he does, thanks to our corrupt useless justice system. Alot of suffering and sadness could have been avoided if this man had been executed for his first crime. Not just, pathetically being made to site in a room behind bars, for several years and get released by looking sorry in an appeal.
Any lunatic wouldn't contemplate murder if the consequences were harsher. Execution would probably act as a good repellant. People would eventually learn that murder was wrong and im sure this would make our prisons alot more spacious. Even people from unscrupulous, broken backgrounds wouldn't have the desire to kill, through fear of being killed themselves. Now matter how they are raised, no one wants to die, do they? Prison could be promoted. Things like television and magaazine advertisments could be implemented to warn people what would happen if they murdered anyone. I think corporal punishment would change the world for the better.
Their you have it. Please dont be to nasty about it. Say something nice or dont say anything at all. Although im welcome to constructive criticism.
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HA!
He didn't even go to school as a student!
He didn't even go to school as a student!
thanks alot paradox. your feedback and tips were very useful to me. are you a teacher?
Writing is a niche market. If only 2 or 3 people on this forum like your ideas and writing then chances are, there will be loads more people in the world who will like 'em!
Wakka wrote:
> I would love to, but most people, like Azul and Ashman, will sl@g me
> off even if I write a good story.
If you do anything creative then you'll get people like that.
Get used to it.
Ignore it and don't let people hold you back.
If you interest just a few people with your writing, who cares what a bunch of people who don't like you think. :-)
> I would love to, but most people, like Azul and Ashman, will sl@g me
> off even if I write a good story.
If you do anything creative then you'll get people like that.
Get used to it.
Ignore it and don't let people hold you back.
If you interest just a few people with your writing, who cares what a bunch of people who don't like you think. :-)
Wakka wrote:
> I would love to, but most people, like Azul and Ashman, will sl@g me
> off even if I write a good story.
Not true at all.
If you were to produce anything near decent, I've it credit where it's due.
But at the moment, you're about the length of Australia off.
> I would love to, but most people, like Azul and Ashman, will sl@g me
> off even if I write a good story.
Not true at all.
If you were to produce anything near decent, I've it credit where it's due.
But at the moment, you're about the length of Australia off.
I thought it was an essay originally, I think it is actually just notes with topic headings.
Paradox, why do your paragraphs have titles?
Wakka wrote:
> Do you honestly think that I would waste my time coming up with a
> good story for people I have never even seen before?
Wakka wrote:
> Memorandum! wrote:
>
> So you were good pals with the judges of those story writing
> contests
> then?
>
> No.
So then you DO waste your time coming up with "good" stories for people you don't know. Stop contradicting yourself, lovey. Lalalala.
> Do you honestly think that I would waste my time coming up with a
> good story for people I have never even seen before?
Wakka wrote:
> Memorandum! wrote:
>
> So you were good pals with the judges of those story writing
> contests
> then?
>
> No.
So then you DO waste your time coming up with "good" stories for people you don't know. Stop contradicting yourself, lovey. Lalalala.
Memorandum! wrote:
> So you were good pals with the judges of those story writing contests
> then?
No.
> So you were good pals with the judges of those story writing contests
> then?
No.
Paradox: wrote:
> If you're this uber-writer you claim to be, why do you have no
> interest in 'showing off' your skills to likeminded people?
I would love to, but most people, like Azul and Ashman, will sl@g me off even if I write a good story.
> If you're this uber-writer you claim to be, why do you have no
> interest in 'showing off' your skills to likeminded people?
I would love to, but most people, like Azul and Ashman, will sl@g me off even if I write a good story.
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