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One day a man by the nickname of Discodexy went to war with the everyday world. Discodexy was one day typing a way on his computer when he got a telephone call. “Hello?” someone replied “hello. Ive heard a lot about you Discodexy you will save the day wont you?
“Who is this?” “Beep-Beep-Beep”
Thinking nothing of it. He turned back round and posted a reply to Der Nazi on the *the person below is…* thread. He heard people screaming outside. He ran to the front door to see what had happened. Everyone was running around and screaming out a load of gibberish a bit like JAT’s. When he would try asking what was happening they all said the same thing “run there after us!”
As he had the computer on upstairs and the telephone was dead he posted online Asking if the same thing had happened. When he noticed Most of the people on there was all right and nobody he saw in real-life was ok. He got replies from allot of people saying “Stop posting spam” When some other people started posting the same stuff that Discodexy was going on about.
HE said what's going on when the phone rang again. “Hello?” the person replied “Go to the Source!” “What?”. He turned round only to find a Powerful laptop with satellite and wireless technology. He had also fount a map and a Magnum .44. He picked up all the items. He posted on the internet “where is First Data?” some other people started posting the same stuff that Discodexy was going on about.
He had explained what had happened so far. Then Cwazy Wabbit™ had posted a link to an on-line map. Discodexy discovered that the First data building was nearly a mile away.
A note was at the bottom of the laptop it said. “Shut down the transmitter” He posted where he was going and would keep in touch. He followed the directions in his car it took him no longer then a minute or two. HE saw there were gates that were security card locked. He posted on-line what had happened and he soon got a post from Paradox: Saying “you have a gun Blow the doors off!” His id and it worked a treat. He got inside and there was a bare hall with computer in it. The door was locked by the computer. He posted on-line “how do I hack a computer” There was a reply from Buck1 It told him how he could get it to do what he wanted it to. He tried it again, again then suddenly there doors opened really quickly
There was camera up looking at the door in the other room. He posted a new thread on-line asking how he could get past them.
Lan Di “Quickly replied Jump underneath it really quickly”
When there was a reply From Azul telling him that it can only be can only be turned of by a switch. So then after a few more cameras’ there was a switch put it wouldn’t budge it was attached to a big computer.
He posted on-line how to get the switch to move. Edgy posted Search the web and Discodexy noticed one led had light up but went out after a second. He made a new thread saying “post now here all of you” Amazingly Everyone posted No one argued why they just did. English_bloke Edgy Paradox Azul ßora† SagdiyeV Belldandy Everybody then the led Went to the top.
There was a countdown on his laptop and the building was crumbling as he got out the building went down to the ground and the screaming that everybody done stopped. He went back home only to have one a GAD for saving the world with the help of the General chat
“Who is this?” “Beep-Beep-Beep”
Thinking nothing of it. He turned back round and posted a reply to Der Nazi on the *the person below is…* thread. He heard people screaming outside. He ran to the front door to see what had happened. Everyone was running around and screaming out a load of gibberish a bit like JAT’s. When he would try asking what was happening they all said the same thing “run there after us!”
As he had the computer on upstairs and the telephone was dead he posted online Asking if the same thing had happened. When he noticed Most of the people on there was all right and nobody he saw in real-life was ok. He got replies from allot of people saying “Stop posting spam” When some other people started posting the same stuff that Discodexy was going on about.
HE said what's going on when the phone rang again. “Hello?” the person replied “Go to the Source!” “What?”. He turned round only to find a Powerful laptop with satellite and wireless technology. He had also fount a map and a Magnum .44. He picked up all the items. He posted on the internet “where is First Data?” some other people started posting the same stuff that Discodexy was going on about.
He had explained what had happened so far. Then Cwazy Wabbit™ had posted a link to an on-line map. Discodexy discovered that the First data building was nearly a mile away.
A note was at the bottom of the laptop it said. “Shut down the transmitter” He posted where he was going and would keep in touch. He followed the directions in his car it took him no longer then a minute or two. HE saw there were gates that were security card locked. He posted on-line what had happened and he soon got a post from Paradox: Saying “you have a gun Blow the doors off!” His id and it worked a treat. He got inside and there was a bare hall with computer in it. The door was locked by the computer. He posted on-line “how do I hack a computer” There was a reply from Buck1 It told him how he could get it to do what he wanted it to. He tried it again, again then suddenly there doors opened really quickly
There was camera up looking at the door in the other room. He posted a new thread on-line asking how he could get past them.
Lan Di “Quickly replied Jump underneath it really quickly”
When there was a reply From Azul telling him that it can only be can only be turned of by a switch. So then after a few more cameras’ there was a switch put it wouldn’t budge it was attached to a big computer.
He posted on-line how to get the switch to move. Edgy posted Search the web and Discodexy noticed one led had light up but went out after a second. He made a new thread saying “post now here all of you” Amazingly Everyone posted No one argued why they just did. English_bloke Edgy Paradox Azul ßora† SagdiyeV Belldandy Everybody then the led Went to the top.
There was a countdown on his laptop and the building was crumbling as he got out the building went down to the ground and the screaming that everybody done stopped. He went back home only to have one a GAD for saving the world with the help of the General chat
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Try again yes, don't just write it and post it. Write it go over it and then post it, if you feel it's good enough.
Leave room for improvment yes and use the next couple of days to think of a story not make one up in an hour.
OK i will try another time in a Couple of days maybe?
Hmmm it was alright for a story but the story was a bit crape and it was to predictable with all the Edgy said this EB said that still nice try im in the middle of one now.
This took me ages.
Can you tell me what i could do to make it better
Can you tell me what i could do to make it better
Buck1 wrote:
> ReALly really bad
Paradox Goodness |----------------------0| Games Girl mental capabilities
> ReALly really bad
Paradox Goodness |----------------------0| Games Girl mental capabilities
Littlest Brother wrote:
> DiscoDexy, it was awful, how can you feel proud to be involved?
Any involvement is proud-worthey
> DiscoDexy, it was awful, how can you feel proud to be involved?
Any involvement is proud-worthey
ReALly really bad
AAArgh...too much salad not enought meat!!
DiscoDexy wrote:
> Lan di's in this story too.
> He helps me save the world.
> Superb.
Oh im gonna read it now.
> Lan di's in this story too.
> He helps me save the world.
> Superb.
Oh im gonna read it now.
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