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Someone called tim wakes up one saturday mourning and There was no-body in his house. So he went down stairs to find a note It said "Gone to town Be back later, mum". Thinking nothing of it he goes Upstairs. Tim is addictied to certain game and it has been broke for 3 days and it keeps on bugging him.
To get it off his mind He thought he would go down the town himself.
He got on the bus and he saw Someone playing a Gba So he thought about his game again. By the time he got off the bus his mum was on her way home so he didnt have allot of money. In nearly every shop he went in there was something to do about his game. even the sega park reminded him he had to resist as he had hardly any money! Walking down the street he saw a hardware shop and walked in there. he bought a dodgy paint scraper for 50p. So he then payed for it came out the shop and started wondering dowb near a church.
He soon fount himself near a park wre someone asked him if he had the time. He pulled out his phone and he said t o the person "Half-past one". Then the person probably two years older then him asked for his phone and putting out his hand. Tim said "what?!" the person repleid "give me your phone now. You Pr!ck!!" He kindly replied "no". The person kept pushing him and tim was trying to wALK away. Then the person pulled out a knife and put it to his throat. "give me your phonE!!!". He was getting closer and closer to his throat. Tim relised that in his bag Was the paint-scraper. he pulled it out and stabbed him right in the chest.
He phoned an ambulance while panicing. When a the police which he didnt call turned up he ran over and said "Help! theres an injured person over there" They replied "we know". "dont move Put down the weapon adn lay face down" the ran to him and beat his legs with nightsticks. Crying in pain they oulled him in the police car. He begged the police officers it was self defence but they didnt listen.
Unfortunetly Tim At his trial was conveicted of man-slaughter and sentenced to 3 years in a detention center and added to the yong offendors lisdt and Hasnt got a job becoase he cant get one be coase he has a criminal record.
As for the person with the knife he is alive today but has allot of money and is stealing cars and he has also got a three bedroom home. while Tim has a a 1 bedroom flat.
The End
To get it off his mind He thought he would go down the town himself.
He got on the bus and he saw Someone playing a Gba So he thought about his game again. By the time he got off the bus his mum was on her way home so he didnt have allot of money. In nearly every shop he went in there was something to do about his game. even the sega park reminded him he had to resist as he had hardly any money! Walking down the street he saw a hardware shop and walked in there. he bought a dodgy paint scraper for 50p. So he then payed for it came out the shop and started wondering dowb near a church.
He soon fount himself near a park wre someone asked him if he had the time. He pulled out his phone and he said t o the person "Half-past one". Then the person probably two years older then him asked for his phone and putting out his hand. Tim said "what?!" the person repleid "give me your phone now. You Pr!ck!!" He kindly replied "no". The person kept pushing him and tim was trying to wALK away. Then the person pulled out a knife and put it to his throat. "give me your phonE!!!". He was getting closer and closer to his throat. Tim relised that in his bag Was the paint-scraper. he pulled it out and stabbed him right in the chest.
He phoned an ambulance while panicing. When a the police which he didnt call turned up he ran over and said "Help! theres an injured person over there" They replied "we know". "dont move Put down the weapon adn lay face down" the ran to him and beat his legs with nightsticks. Crying in pain they oulled him in the police car. He begged the police officers it was self defence but they didnt listen.
Unfortunetly Tim At his trial was conveicted of man-slaughter and sentenced to 3 years in a detention center and added to the yong offendors lisdt and Hasnt got a job becoase he cant get one be coase he has a criminal record.
As for the person with the knife he is alive today but has allot of money and is stealing cars and he has also got a three bedroom home. while Tim has a a 1 bedroom flat.
The End
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You are filling general chat with substandard stories without giving yourself anytime what so ever to improve. Wait a while and actually try to get better before you produce something like this again because it's not worth the paper it's printed on. *prints off a copy and rips it up* It's tough love.
If you want to enter your story into GAD do you have to put the heading as something like GAD entry.
Cwazy Wabbit™ wrote:
> If you want to enter your story into GAD do you have to put the
> heading as something like GAD entry.
No, just a catchy title.
> If you want to enter your story into GAD do you have to put the
> heading as something like GAD entry.
No, just a catchy title.
No, it is advised not to make it obvious you are running for GAD because those that say they are writing purely for self gain rarely ever win. All posts are considered for GAD although normally they go to great stories, reviews that kind of thing not small threads.
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