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"non title match:kane vs test"

BANG!!kane's music hits, and out comes the big red machine (rawisandy)!he slowly strolles down to the ring,then roles into the ring,he raises both his hands then,BANG!! again and the red fire comes out of the turnbuckles!
then,"TEST TEST THIS IS THE TEST!" then test (longly) runs out to begin the match with kane!
Both men are in the ring pounding on each other, then kane scores with a hard right hand and test backs into the corner kane charges at him but test gets his boot up at kicks kane in the face.kane turns holding his face,test runs and hits kane with with a face crusher,kane makes his way to his feet slowly, test bouces off the ropes he goes to hit kane but kane reverses and catches him then hits test with a sidewalk slam.kane goes for cover,
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2...
test just gets his shoulder up before the count of three!
while test is getting to his feet kane climbs up top test turns,and kane flys!! but test gets his boot up and knocks kane backwards on to his back.test goes for the cover!
1...
2...
its over!
BUT KANE KICKS OUT!
no one can believe it! test is so frustaited,he punches the mat.kane gets up before test.test gets up,turns around and slap! kanes hane great hand grabs the neck of test! test is raised into the air,kane slams him down but test reverses it in to a ddt! but he cant go for the cover,kane roles out the ring.kane goes to get the a chair,he brings it into the ring hes about to hit test as he is getting up.but the ref stops him but kane doesnt let go of the chair,kane hits the ref!! theres no ref,and kane takes full advantage and hits test! but now theres no ref to count!
but,stone cold is running out with a steel chair! he roles into the ring and hits kane from bihind with the steel chair!then stone cold roles out of the ring test pins kane.and another ref runs out to count!
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2...
KICK OUT BY KANE!! its unbelieveble!!
stone cold cant believe it!
niether can test!
kane sits up the stands up he picks up test,test takes a blow to the mid section and bends over,kane gets him in the power bomb position,he then flips test on to his shoulders and........slam!!test hits the mat very very hard! kane goes for the cover1
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2...
3!!
and kane is the winner! but he is celebrating stone cols sneaks up behind kane,he waits for kane to turn and then hits him with a stunner!! stone colds music hits!he stands on the second rope with his arms raised,but kane sits up!and quickly makes it to his feet stone cold hops down and turn around,where kane is waiting.stone cold cant believe it.kane grabs his neck and scores with a chokeslam!! kane flips over the ropes leaving test and stone cold lying in the ring!
kane music hit once more as he laeves the ring


well.....that was my first match,what does everybody think of it? can you give me any tips? :D

The only thing wrong was punctuation-we need much more of it.

Spaces after commas, capital letters and a bigger space between paragraphs. Good first try though...I take it this is BRM??

still it was good for a first go

You need bigger spaces between paragraphs, capital letters, and thats about it.

who is he?

Good match Squashy Sasquatch.

Nice match Matt!

BANG!!kane's music hits, and out comes the big red machine (rawisandy)!he slowly strolles down to the ring,then roles into the ring,he raises both his hands then,BANG!! again and the red fire comes out of the turnbuckles!
then,"TEST TEST THIS IS THE TEST!" then test (longly) runs out to begin the match with kane!
Both men are in the ring pounding on each other, then kane scores with a hard right hand and test backs into the corner kane charges at him but test gets his boot up at kicks kane in the face.kane turns holding his face,test runs and hits kane with with a face crusher,kane makes his way to his feet slowly, test bouces off the ropes he goes to hit kane but kane reverses and catches him then hits test with a sidewalk slam.kane goes for cover,
1...
2...
test just gets his shoulder up before the count of three!
while test is getting to his feet kane climbs up top test turns,and kane flys!! but test gets his boot up and knocks kane backwards on to his back.test goes for the cover!
1...
2...
its over!
BUT KANE KICKS OUT!
no one can believe it! test is so frustaited,he punches the mat.kane gets up before test.test gets up,turns around and slap! kanes hane great hand grabs the neck of test! test is raised into the air,kane slams him down but test reverses it in to a ddt! but he cant go for the cover,kane roles out the ring.kane goes to get the a chair,he brings it into the ring hes about to hit test as he is getting up.but the ref stops him but kane doesnt let go of the chair,kane hits the ref!! theres no ref,and kane takes full advantage and hits test! but now theres no ref to count!
but,stone cold is running out with a steel chair! he roles into the ring and hits kane from bihind with the steel chair!then stone cold roles out of the ring test pins kane.and another ref runs out to count!
1...
2...
KICK OUT BY KANE!! its unbelieveble!!
stone cold cant believe it!
niether can test!
kane sits up the stands up he picks up test,test takes a blow to the mid section and bends over,kane gets him in the power bomb position,he then flips test on to his shoulders and........slam!!test hits the mat very very hard! kane goes for the cover1
1...
2...
3!!
and kane is the winner! but he is celebrating stone cols sneaks up behind kane,he waits for kane to turn and then hits him with a stunner!! stone colds music hits!he stands on the second rope with his arms raised,but kane sits up!and quickly makes it to his feet stone cold hops down and turn around,where kane is waiting.stone cold cant believe it.kane grabs his neck and scores with a chokeslam!! kane flips over the ropes leaving test and stone cold lying in the ring!
kane music hit once more as he laeves the ring


well.....that was my first match,what does everybody think of it? can you give me any tips? :D