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Well another try of a poem for me.
She combs it all back across her face.
Hiding her eyes,so no one can see the tears.
You stand under the spot light.
Please leave me,I have been gone.
You never knew,it could be great.
Spit through the air,blood falls from your chin.
Splat, splat, splat it falls to the ground.
Metal pipe see the eyes ripped the paper from books.
You pull string madly it stops.
Points out every line.
Sand drops in a pot.
The tangled weeds.
A bang of metal.
A hit to the head.
Oh god your dead.
She combs it all back across her face.
Hiding her eyes,so no one can see the tears.
You stand under the spot light.
Please leave me,I have been gone.
You never knew,it could be great.
Spit through the air,blood falls from your chin.
Splat, splat, splat it falls to the ground.
Metal pipe see the eyes ripped the paper from books.
You pull string madly it stops.
Points out every line.
Sand drops in a pot.
The tangled weeds.
A bang of metal.
A hit to the head.
Oh god your dead.
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Hurrah, text from my jeyboard has been violently mutated into put downs and death threat. I feel like i'm in a comic book.
Wow I wonder what it would be like to be in a comic book *Looks in air in amazment and goes hmmmmmm*.
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