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I've been waiting for good news at dinner time, from my wife but no nothing. I sit there at the table. Slowly chomping on some bread, then a note is bought to me. I take it and looked at it, it said in big letters,” WE’RE OVER MIKE". I ripped the note up and throw the bits to the floor. I just had to go and have a little bit of time to clear my head. I ran out the restaurant kicking a chair over on my way out. AHHHHHH what the hell had I done, I thought, I had done nothing. We were going to get married and have kids she said she waited to grow old together. But what was the good news she had to tell me. I had to find out.
I run but then stop what am I thinking, she won't take me back. I scream out in rage I’m so angry and depressed. There’s a shop a little way in front of me, with a big glass window. I run jumping forwards about to smash through the glass window. But NO I stop and just lay on the floor. As it starts to rain, I start to cry cold tears run down my face. I jump up and run through the rain, back to the restaurant. I need something to eat.
I walk into the restaurant with rain dripping off my hair, I think about her the way she walked, the way she moved, the way she looked, the way she talked, so real, and I couldn't go on with out her. I sit down in a chair at a table. I put up my hand and call the waiter, a waiter comes over to me "Yes sir what do you want for your dinner" "ERRRM some fish with pea's please" "Certainly sir" "Thank you". I wanted a fish something with bones in so I might choke on them. I hadn't to wait for a little while, so in the meantime I sat there thinking, about things and what had gone wrong.
Well nothing had gone wrong really I hadn't done anything bad, why did she just say its over? This fish was bought over to me and I looked down at it. It looked like it had a frown on its face; it looked like it was angry with me and didn't want me to eat it. Yeah well course it didn't want me to eat it but it did. With out looking for bones and it happened I started choking. Everyone in the restaurant looked at me. Someone ran over to me and went he’s choking. Yeah course I’m bloody choking, I felt like say but I couldn't because I was choking.
"He's going purple" someone screamed. Then I stopped and blacked out. Clouds everywhere I was in heaven and I had died on my sad night with no-one. I walked on the clouds and looked forwards it was her now I knew why it was over. Because she was going to die and she wanted me to join her.
I run but then stop what am I thinking, she won't take me back. I scream out in rage I’m so angry and depressed. There’s a shop a little way in front of me, with a big glass window. I run jumping forwards about to smash through the glass window. But NO I stop and just lay on the floor. As it starts to rain, I start to cry cold tears run down my face. I jump up and run through the rain, back to the restaurant. I need something to eat.
I walk into the restaurant with rain dripping off my hair, I think about her the way she walked, the way she moved, the way she looked, the way she talked, so real, and I couldn't go on with out her. I sit down in a chair at a table. I put up my hand and call the waiter, a waiter comes over to me "Yes sir what do you want for your dinner" "ERRRM some fish with pea's please" "Certainly sir" "Thank you". I wanted a fish something with bones in so I might choke on them. I hadn't to wait for a little while, so in the meantime I sat there thinking, about things and what had gone wrong.
Well nothing had gone wrong really I hadn't done anything bad, why did she just say its over? This fish was bought over to me and I looked down at it. It looked like it had a frown on its face; it looked like it was angry with me and didn't want me to eat it. Yeah well course it didn't want me to eat it but it did. With out looking for bones and it happened I started choking. Everyone in the restaurant looked at me. Someone ran over to me and went he’s choking. Yeah course I’m bloody choking, I felt like say but I couldn't because I was choking.
"He's going purple" someone screamed. Then I stopped and blacked out. Clouds everywhere I was in heaven and I had died on my sad night with no-one. I walked on the clouds and looked forwards it was her now I knew why it was over. Because she was going to die and she wanted me to join her.
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C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> Really?
Yup.
> Really?
Yup.
Oriental Rib wrote:
> Did you watch Nip/Tuk yesterday Crossbob?
Yeah did you?
> Did you watch Nip/Tuk yesterday Crossbob?
Yeah did you?
Ant wrote:
> C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> As it starts to rain, I start to cry cold tears run down my face. I
> >jump up and run through the rain, back to the restaurant. I need
> >something to eat.
>
> "Yes sir what do you want for your dinner" "ERRRM some
> fish with pea's >please"
>
> Someone ran over to me and went he’s choking. Yeah course I’m bloody
> >choking, I felt like say but I couldn't because I was choking.
>
> Every single one of the above made me laugh out loud, awesome stuff
> Crossbob. :D
>
> And I am totally, 100% serious when I say I liked the ending. It made
> me feel...happy.
Really?
> C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> As it starts to rain, I start to cry cold tears run down my face. I
> >jump up and run through the rain, back to the restaurant. I need
> >something to eat.
>
> "Yes sir what do you want for your dinner" "ERRRM some
> fish with pea's >please"
>
> Someone ran over to me and went he’s choking. Yeah course I’m bloody
> >choking, I felt like say but I couldn't because I was choking.
>
> Every single one of the above made me laugh out loud, awesome stuff
> Crossbob. :D
>
> And I am totally, 100% serious when I say I liked the ending. It made
> me feel...happy.
Really?
Did you watch Nip/Tuk yesterday Crossbob?
C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> As it starts to rain, I start to cry cold tears run down my face. I >jump up and run through the rain, back to the restaurant. I need >something to eat.
> "Yes sir what do you want for your dinner" "ERRRM some fish with pea's >please"
> Someone ran over to me and went he’s choking. Yeah course I’m bloody >choking, I felt like say but I couldn't because I was choking.
Every single one of the above made me laugh out loud, awesome stuff Crossbob. :D
And I am totally, 100% serious when I say I liked the ending. It made me feel...happy.
> As it starts to rain, I start to cry cold tears run down my face. I >jump up and run through the rain, back to the restaurant. I need >something to eat.
> "Yes sir what do you want for your dinner" "ERRRM some fish with pea's >please"
> Someone ran over to me and went he’s choking. Yeah course I’m bloody >choking, I felt like say but I couldn't because I was choking.
Every single one of the above made me laugh out loud, awesome stuff Crossbob. :D
And I am totally, 100% serious when I say I liked the ending. It made me feel...happy.
I've been waiting for good news at dinner time, from my wife but no nothing. I sit there at the table. Slowly chomping on some bread, then a note is bought to me. I take it and looked at it, it said in big letters,” WE’RE OVER MIKE". I ripped the note up and throw the bits to the floor. I just had to go and have a little bit of time to clear my head. I ran out the restaurant kicking a chair over on my way out. AHHHHHH what the hell had I done, I thought, I had done nothing. We were going to get married and have kids she said she waited to grow old together. But what was the good news she had to tell me. I had to find out.
I run but then stop what am I thinking, she won't take me back. I scream out in rage I’m so angry and depressed. There’s a shop a little way in front of me, with a big glass window. I run jumping forwards about to smash through the glass window. But NO I stop and just lay on the floor. As it starts to rain, I start to cry cold tears run down my face. I jump up and run through the rain, back to the restaurant. I need something to eat.
I walk into the restaurant with rain dripping off my hair, I think about her the way she walked, the way she moved, the way she looked, the way she talked, so real, and I couldn't go on with out her. I sit down in a chair at a table. I put up my hand and call the waiter, a waiter comes over to me "Yes sir what do you want for your dinner" "ERRRM some fish with pea's please" "Certainly sir" "Thank you". I wanted a fish something with bones in so I might choke on them. I hadn't to wait for a little while, so in the meantime I sat there thinking, about things and what had gone wrong.
Well nothing had gone wrong really I hadn't done anything bad, why did she just say its over? This fish was bought over to me and I looked down at it. It looked like it had a frown on its face; it looked like it was angry with me and didn't want me to eat it. Yeah well course it didn't want me to eat it but it did. With out looking for bones and it happened I started choking. Everyone in the restaurant looked at me. Someone ran over to me and went he’s choking. Yeah course I’m bloody choking, I felt like say but I couldn't because I was choking.
"He's going purple" someone screamed. Then I stopped and blacked out. Clouds everywhere I was in heaven and I had died on my sad night with no-one. I walked on the clouds and looked forwards it was her now I knew why it was over. Because she was going to die and she wanted me to join her.
I run but then stop what am I thinking, she won't take me back. I scream out in rage I’m so angry and depressed. There’s a shop a little way in front of me, with a big glass window. I run jumping forwards about to smash through the glass window. But NO I stop and just lay on the floor. As it starts to rain, I start to cry cold tears run down my face. I jump up and run through the rain, back to the restaurant. I need something to eat.
I walk into the restaurant with rain dripping off my hair, I think about her the way she walked, the way she moved, the way she looked, the way she talked, so real, and I couldn't go on with out her. I sit down in a chair at a table. I put up my hand and call the waiter, a waiter comes over to me "Yes sir what do you want for your dinner" "ERRRM some fish with pea's please" "Certainly sir" "Thank you". I wanted a fish something with bones in so I might choke on them. I hadn't to wait for a little while, so in the meantime I sat there thinking, about things and what had gone wrong.
Well nothing had gone wrong really I hadn't done anything bad, why did she just say its over? This fish was bought over to me and I looked down at it. It looked like it had a frown on its face; it looked like it was angry with me and didn't want me to eat it. Yeah well course it didn't want me to eat it but it did. With out looking for bones and it happened I started choking. Everyone in the restaurant looked at me. Someone ran over to me and went he’s choking. Yeah course I’m bloody choking, I felt like say but I couldn't because I was choking.
"He's going purple" someone screamed. Then I stopped and blacked out. Clouds everywhere I was in heaven and I had died on my sad night with no-one. I walked on the clouds and looked forwards it was her now I knew why it was over. Because she was going to die and she wanted me to join her.
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