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"SSC25:Lost in a dream"

I wake with the sound of a knocking,a police man is knocking on my car window. A touch light shines in my eyes blinding me,it's like a giant sun. "Yes Officer what is it what have I done?" I asked with the torch still blinding me. "Are you ok sir" asked the police officer still blinding me. I look up the front of my car has smoke coming out of it,like a chimmney.


I had crashed,"How did you crash sir?" asked the police officer. "I don't know officer must of dozed off but where am I?" "Well sir you are on the main road smashed into a lamp post,and I think I should take you to the station sir" "Ok then officer". I sat up and opened my car door,but when I got out I dropped to the floor and blacked out. I woke in a room it was cold,I could hear rain falling,it hadn't rained for age's. Why was it raining the rain sounded like it was fallling down so hard. Like bombs dropping thats what the rain sounded like. I stood up I was in a prison cell. A strange creature walked past my cell. I looked at it,it had red eyes. "What the hell are you" I asked puzzled.

He just ignored me and walked off. I layed down on my bed and looked up at the ceiling,it has cracks in it and water has started to drip through. A drip falls on my head and I jumped up. "WHY THE HELL AM I IN THIS PLACE?"I scream out. But then im standing in the middle of a field where was I this,was like my last dream when I woke in the woods,then this woman had a orgasm,what the hell was happening. Then gun shots,tears running down my face,I could hear gun shots,ringing in my ears. But I was still in the field. My ears were bleeding,Then I woke but I was stil in a dream and I was lost in it and was about to be killed by a giant spider......

FinalFantasyFanatic wrote:
> I think he said something like "wow, thats relly long! il read it
> tomorrrwo!1" in one of mine.
>
> Then never did.

I did read it but I think I forgot about it sorry.

FinalFantasyFanatic wrote:
> And someone called Marler 'Fingers' Clich, who is ... let's see ... a
> weapons expert, cynical, wise-cracking black man with a shiny head.

Ok then I will!

Meka Dragon wrote:
> CrossBob, I hardly ever see you comment on other people's stories, yet
> you always receive plenty of comments yourself. Don't you think you
> should repay those that take the time and effort to read and comment
> on your stories in an effort to improve your writing by reading the
> others? You might learn something from the style of other pieces too,
> so that would be of benefit to you. I'm sure we'd all like to read
> what you have to say about our work.

Yes I will from now on!

I think he said something like "wow, thats relly long! il read it tomorrrwo!1" in one of mine.

Then never did.

Meka Dragon wrote:
> CrossBob, I hardly ever see you comment on other people's stories

Ooooo he did in one of mine, t'was ages ago now though :)

* polishes fingernails on lapel *

Good thinking!

And someone called Marler 'Fingers' Clich, who is ... let's see ... a weapons expert, cynical, wise-cracking black man with a shiny head.

I don't know exactly. Put him in an action story, against an evil foe. And let Jody be Alex North's sidekick, but still put Jody in it a lot. My character and your character in a story.

CrossBob, I hardly ever see you comment on other people's stories, yet you always receive plenty of comments yourself. Don't you think you should repay those that take the time and effort to read and comment on your stories in an effort to improve your writing by reading the others? You might learn something from the style of other pieces too, so that would be of benefit to you. I'm sure we'd all like to read what you have to say about our work.

What will Jody Adams do?