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I ran into a shopping center then I jumped back on my board and sped off though the shopping center. I heard screams of guards they were coming to get me I jumped over a ledge down on to a little water. I kick-flipped off of it. I heard a guard behind me I zoomed off not letting him grab me.
I smashed though the back doors of the building on to the road. I scarped on the front of a car and dropped to the road. A car drove in front of me I grabbed the back of it and it dragged me along on my skateboard. I was coming towards a road. But then by mistake I slipped from my skateboard it flew under the wheels crushing it instanly. I tried to move but my body was dragged under the wheels too squashing me. Killing me straight away with my crushed up skateboard making me lose my style.
I was dead but at least maybe I could skateboard in the heavens now and my wings would make me get higher on my skateboard.
I think the story got weaker though, it would be better (next time) to add more sophisticated words to the story and make it a little more attention grabbing. After that it felt a little basic with no real detail
Not too bad at all, you're genuinely improving
What, exactly, was meant by those first sentences?
> Today will be today,tomorrow will be tomorrow. But the Skateboarding
> will be tomorrow,today and yesterday. The skateboarding will never
> stop.
C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> I just do im great!
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> C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> Mike Swade wrote:
> How do you get such great and imaginative ideas Crossbob?
>
> I just do im great!
>
> You crack me up crossbob, you really do.
Thank you!!!!