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Tears of death- A poem by Luke Poulton!
I stand here crying tears dripping making tracks down my cheeks.
I stand in the graveyard I feel so sad.
I stand standing over dads grave.
The tomb stone cold and covered with mud.
This is the first time I have visted him in ten years.
I love him.
I cared for him.
He was the greatest Dad of all.
The tears drip on to his grave.
Cold and fool of fear.
These tears are bad they are the tears of death!
I stand here crying tears dripping making tracks down my cheeks.
I stand in the graveyard I feel so sad.
I stand standing over dads grave.
The tomb stone cold and covered with mud.
This is the first time I have visted him in ten years.
I love him.
I cared for him.
He was the greatest Dad of all.
The tears drip on to his grave.
Cold and fool of fear.
These tears are bad they are the tears of death!
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Why you being unkind to me when you talk to me on MSN?
Memorandum! wrote:
> But you should change.
>
>
>
> Because you suck.
indeed. Face it crossbob it has gone on long enough you: Bite, suck, don't rule, are a lamer, shudn't be allowed to ever write again....ever.
Thank you annd good night.
> But you should change.
>
>
>
> Because you suck.
indeed. Face it crossbob it has gone on long enough you: Bite, suck, don't rule, are a lamer, shudn't be allowed to ever write again....ever.
Thank you annd good night.
C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> What you mean?
I'M NOT DEFENDING YOU. Is it easier to read when I put it in capitals?
> What you mean?
I'M NOT DEFENDING YOU. Is it easier to read when I put it in capitals?
What you mean?
C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> Yeah don't try and change me!!
I'm not defending you, quite the opposite.
> Yeah don't try and change me!!
I'm not defending you, quite the opposite.
But you should change.
Because you suck.
Because you suck.
Yeah don't try and change me!!
Memorandum! wrote:
> C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> I stand here crying tears dripping making tracks down my cheeks.
>
> Punctuate this line.
>
> I stand in the graveyard I feel so stand.
>
> "I feel so stand". Indeed. wtf?
>
> I stand standing over dads grave.
>
> "I stand standing".
> Think about that one. And punctuation.
>
> The tomb stone cold and covered with mud.
> This is the first time I have visted him in ten years.
>
> 'Visited'. Proof reading.
>
> I love him.
> I cared for him.
> He was the greatest Dad of all.
> The tears drip on to his grave.
> Cold and fool of fear.
>
> "fool of fear"
> Agahahagahahaha
>
> These tears are bad they are the tears of death!
>
> Get rid of that exclamation mark.
> That last line is awful.
> AWFUL.
>
> In fact, it's all awful. Terrible.
> Poets write poems because something has inspired them to consider a
> subject, or because they're writing from experience. You're just
> going "hey I'll write a poem, what could it be about?"
> which comes across quite blatantly.
>
> You have no literary talent whatsoever.
> Give up.
Hate to say it but it's you who should give up... don't think you'll change Crossbob that easily.
> C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> I stand here crying tears dripping making tracks down my cheeks.
>
> Punctuate this line.
>
> I stand in the graveyard I feel so stand.
>
> "I feel so stand". Indeed. wtf?
>
> I stand standing over dads grave.
>
> "I stand standing".
> Think about that one. And punctuation.
>
> The tomb stone cold and covered with mud.
> This is the first time I have visted him in ten years.
>
> 'Visited'. Proof reading.
>
> I love him.
> I cared for him.
> He was the greatest Dad of all.
> The tears drip on to his grave.
> Cold and fool of fear.
>
> "fool of fear"
> Agahahagahahaha
>
> These tears are bad they are the tears of death!
>
> Get rid of that exclamation mark.
> That last line is awful.
> AWFUL.
>
> In fact, it's all awful. Terrible.
> Poets write poems because something has inspired them to consider a
> subject, or because they're writing from experience. You're just
> going "hey I'll write a poem, what could it be about?"
> which comes across quite blatantly.
>
> You have no literary talent whatsoever.
> Give up.
Hate to say it but it's you who should give up... don't think you'll change Crossbob that easily.
C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> I stand here crying tears dripping making tracks down my cheeks.
Punctuate this line.
> I stand in the graveyard I feel so stand.
"I feel so stand". Indeed. wtf?
> I stand standing over dads grave.
"I stand standing".
Think about that one. And punctuation.
> The tomb stone cold and covered with mud.
> This is the first time I have visted him in ten years.
'Visited'. Proof reading.
> I love him.
> I cared for him.
> He was the greatest Dad of all.
> The tears drip on to his grave.
> Cold and fool of fear.
"fool of fear"
Agahahagahahaha
> These tears are bad they are the tears of death!
Get rid of that exclamation mark.
That last line is awful.
AWFUL.
In fact, it's all awful. Terrible.
Poets write poems because something has inspired them to consider a subject, or because they're writing from experience. You're just going "hey I'll write a poem, what could it be about?" which comes across quite blatantly.
You have no literary talent whatsoever.
Give up.
> I stand here crying tears dripping making tracks down my cheeks.
Punctuate this line.
> I stand in the graveyard I feel so stand.
"I feel so stand". Indeed. wtf?
> I stand standing over dads grave.
"I stand standing".
Think about that one. And punctuation.
> The tomb stone cold and covered with mud.
> This is the first time I have visted him in ten years.
'Visited'. Proof reading.
> I love him.
> I cared for him.
> He was the greatest Dad of all.
> The tears drip on to his grave.
> Cold and fool of fear.
"fool of fear"
Agahahagahahaha
> These tears are bad they are the tears of death!
Get rid of that exclamation mark.
That last line is awful.
AWFUL.
In fact, it's all awful. Terrible.
Poets write poems because something has inspired them to consider a subject, or because they're writing from experience. You're just going "hey I'll write a poem, what could it be about?" which comes across quite blatantly.
You have no literary talent whatsoever.
Give up.
Yes it does LOL!
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