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"When's the next crossbob novel coming out?"

I really liked his stories, all the cliffhangers and stuff. Plus it's nothing but action! There's always people dying and getting chased!

They seem to remind me of that girl on American Pie. "I shot him but he shot me back and we shot together it was really funny I like shooting."

Just added a new story on here called killing the bullies!

Here is a new story thats in the works right now its called "Strange Happenings". Its quite a weird story it is about a Dad and a Son that are on a day out. The Son keeps on saying are we there yet and the Dad gets really stressed and turns round and tells him to shut up but then they go into a field and hit into a cow. But when they get out the car and the cow has gone and they are in a town that is wrecked and filled with weird and horrible things have happen. Then the adventure starts there!

Surrealguy wrote:
> Train 32 has plenty of potential, the storyline isn't even ripped from
> any film I recognise. Full of typos and horrible misuse of grammar
> of course, but I expected nothing better.
>
> You are actually improving crossbob, keep at it. Might I suggest
> that you type your stories out on microsoft word before posting them,
> as the green/red line system may illuminate a few deficiencies in
> your story to you.
>
> I actually enjoyed this story, but I'm not quite sure why...

Yeah I will in the future but I only just got Word yesterday because my sister needed it for coursework and now I have it because I only use to have Wordpad!

Finally got round to reading The Finding.


crossbob wrote:

"The man came out the little room he was in at the end of the room. "shut it kid" thundered out the man. "But I didn't kill him I wasn't even there I just found him,I don't know who killed, so please can you just leave me alone and just untie me!"shouted Jay.

"Ok kid im so sorry I didn't even want to do this I will try and get you out of here"said the man nicely back. The man untied Jay and he got up.

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Great piece there, but you're going to kick yourself for this bit in five years time.

And how could you kill off Henry??? Henry RINGO???

The last line was only an afterthought to show I cared.

Because you edited your last line?

Train 32 has plenty of potential, the storyline isn't even ripped from any film I recognise. Full of typos and horrible misuse of grammar of course, but I expected nothing better.

You are actually improving crossbob, keep at it. Might I suggest that you type your stories out on microsoft word before posting them, as the green/red line system may illuminate a few deficiencies in your story to you.

I actually enjoyed this story, but I'm not quite sure why...

Heres my new story train 32 [URL]http://www.geocities.com/psychostyleworld/Train32.html?1108073275937[/URL] Tell me what you think of it!

Thank you whats your favourite bit yet?

I love it!