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My daily traits; routine. A normality now so familiar that anything other than its presence leaves ruptured thoughts; fractured senses.
Unclasp eyes, train, work, train, home, and re-clasp eyes.
Rinse and repeat.
That was, until I saw her. A walking, talking, ticking time bomb; encased with a shell so irresistible one glance was all it took to know I had to have her.
Unclasp eyes, die inside, and re-clasp eyes.
Rinse and repeat.
I can’t have her, so neither can anyone else. I’m not a sadistic man. I’m a passionate man. I can’t survive with the harsh, punishing reality of somebody superior having this perfect example of a human being.
Why was I designed a fool?
I stab her down; watch her bleed, crimson stained hands, so full of greed.
One deteriorating corpse rotting on my carpet, robbed of its former beauty.
Oh crap.
Unclasp eyes, realise what I’ve done, freak out, and re-clasp eyes.
Forever.
Unclasp eyes, train, work, train, home, and re-clasp eyes.
Rinse and repeat.
That was, until I saw her. A walking, talking, ticking time bomb; encased with a shell so irresistible one glance was all it took to know I had to have her.
Unclasp eyes, die inside, and re-clasp eyes.
Rinse and repeat.
I can’t have her, so neither can anyone else. I’m not a sadistic man. I’m a passionate man. I can’t survive with the harsh, punishing reality of somebody superior having this perfect example of a human being.
Why was I designed a fool?
I stab her down; watch her bleed, crimson stained hands, so full of greed.
One deteriorating corpse rotting on my carpet, robbed of its former beauty.
Oh crap.
Unclasp eyes, realise what I’ve done, freak out, and re-clasp eyes.
Forever.
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Deal.
Dont use the word love, please.
Ahahaha, Black Glove. I adore you.
And everyone else, I thank your words.
And everyone else, I thank your words.
[so not a joke]
Yus, nice. Snappy, yus.
Yus, nice. Snappy, yus.
Does Chapter Two feature necrophilia?
[joke]
[joke]
Reminded me of a Busted song. Don't know why. Very nice. Short and snappy, like one of those yappy dog/hamster things.
Yus, wonderful. :-)
The build up was tumulous and pretty resounding, but the ending with words like "stab" and "deteriorate" seemed a little tacky. Find some new synonyms and replace them. and get rid of "crap" please, it doesnt fit.
Very nice, though.
What Flock said.
Very nice, though.
What Flock said.
at least he didnt crack one out..
Ineedsleep wrote:
> I'm sorry but I cracked out laughing at 'freak out' :D
Heh, at least you did something.
:^)
> I'm sorry but I cracked out laughing at 'freak out' :D
Heh, at least you did something.
:^)
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