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Revelling in blackness, I stop and stick and turn
Swamped knee-deep in misery, for happiness I yearn
Talent voided blankly by a lacklustre lifestyle
Will worthlessly wasted, normality so vile
With force I forge feeling and lose the will to earn
Petrol pouring paradise, the time has come to burn
Possessions perfectly propped into a careful pile
Light a match, see it burn, at last - a heartfelt smile
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It's a little hippyish "like woah maaan, we dont need materiaal stuff, duuude - but I think we are quite a consumer-driven society - whether thats a bad thing or not I'm yet to decide. Anyway, views on the matter, if you fancy.
Swamped knee-deep in misery, for happiness I yearn
Talent voided blankly by a lacklustre lifestyle
Will worthlessly wasted, normality so vile
With force I forge feeling and lose the will to earn
Petrol pouring paradise, the time has come to burn
Possessions perfectly propped into a careful pile
Light a match, see it burn, at last - a heartfelt smile
------ ------ ------ ------ ------ ------ ----- ----- -----
It's a little hippyish "like woah maaan, we dont need materiaal stuff, duuude - but I think we are quite a consumer-driven society - whether thats a bad thing or not I'm yet to decide. Anyway, views on the matter, if you fancy.
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FinalFantasyFanatic wrote:
> Mmmm, rather yummy - flowed well, sounded great.
> Although I wish you wouldn't put those little explainations at the
> end - it ruins the poem.
I wanted a little discussion surrounding it too. And they're also there to stop H20 going "Eh, I dont get it"
> Mmmm, rather yummy - flowed well, sounded great.
> Although I wish you wouldn't put those little explainations at the
> end - it ruins the poem.
I wanted a little discussion surrounding it too. And they're also there to stop H20 going "Eh, I dont get it"
And, you feef, using little ''''''''''''s around your title.
I do that.
ROAR
I do that.
ROAR
Mmmm, rather yummy - flowed well, sounded great.
Although I wish you wouldn't put those little explainations at the end - it ruins the poem.
Although I wish you wouldn't put those little explainations at the end - it ruins the poem.
I have to say that was excellent. Stuctured brilliantly, detailed, yet it flowed as well as anything i've seen. Ranks very highly in the best poems i've read on this forum, very highly indeed.
Revelling in blackness, I stop and stick and turn
Swamped knee-deep in misery, for happiness I yearn
Talent voided blankly by a lacklustre lifestyle
Will worthlessly wasted, normality so vile
With force I forge feeling and lose the will to earn
Petrol pouring paradise, the time has come to burn
Possessions perfectly propped into a careful pile
Light a match, see it burn, at last - a heartfelt smile
------ ------ ------ ------ ------ ------ ----- ----- -----
It's a little hippyish "like woah maaan, we dont need materiaal stuff, duuude - but I think we are quite a consumer-driven society - whether thats a bad thing or not I'm yet to decide. Anyway, views on the matter, if you fancy.
Swamped knee-deep in misery, for happiness I yearn
Talent voided blankly by a lacklustre lifestyle
Will worthlessly wasted, normality so vile
With force I forge feeling and lose the will to earn
Petrol pouring paradise, the time has come to burn
Possessions perfectly propped into a careful pile
Light a match, see it burn, at last - a heartfelt smile
------ ------ ------ ------ ------ ------ ----- ----- -----
It's a little hippyish "like woah maaan, we dont need materiaal stuff, duuude - but I think we are quite a consumer-driven society - whether thats a bad thing or not I'm yet to decide. Anyway, views on the matter, if you fancy.
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