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Revelling in blackness, I stop and stick and turn
Swamped knee-deep in misery, for happiness I yearn
Talent voided blankly by a lacklustre lifestyle
Will worthlessly wasted, normality so vile
With force I forge feeling and lose the will to earn
Petrol pouring paradise, the time has come to burn
Possessions perfectly propped into a careful pile
Light a match, see it burn, at last - a heartfelt smile
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It's a little hippyish "like woah maaan, we dont need materiaal stuff, duuude - but I think we are quite a consumer-driven society - whether thats a bad thing or not I'm yet to decide. Anyway, views on the matter, if you fancy.
Swamped knee-deep in misery, for happiness I yearn
Talent voided blankly by a lacklustre lifestyle
Will worthlessly wasted, normality so vile
With force I forge feeling and lose the will to earn
Petrol pouring paradise, the time has come to burn
Possessions perfectly propped into a careful pile
Light a match, see it burn, at last - a heartfelt smile
------ ------ ------ ------ ------ ------ ----- ----- -----
It's a little hippyish "like woah maaan, we dont need materiaal stuff, duuude - but I think we are quite a consumer-driven society - whether thats a bad thing or not I'm yet to decide. Anyway, views on the matter, if you fancy.
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Paradox: wrote:
> Full stops aren't a required part of poetry though.
>
> It's creative writing so you dont have to conform to and codes or
> conventions of other types of writing!
Like swearing in a poem? Eh? EHHHH?!
Moo!
> Full stops aren't a required part of poetry though.
>
> It's creative writing so you dont have to conform to and codes or
> conventions of other types of writing!
Like swearing in a poem? Eh? EHHHH?!
Moo!
I liked that 'zul
Reflects well on you as a person.
Reflects well on you as a person.
Paradox: wrote:
> It's creative writing so you dont have to conform to and codes or
> conventions of other types of writing!
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wibble.
There. I call it, "The Grand Duchess of Safe"
> It's creative writing so you dont have to conform to and codes or
> conventions of other types of writing!
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wevroiewrv
verwevorwoevm
wevrwioejrniwvjer
wevrojmwe
aisodmcid
wibble.
There. I call it, "The Grand Duchess of Safe"
Full stops aren't a required part of poetry though.
It's creative writing so you dont have to conform to and codes or conventions of other types of writing!
It's creative writing so you dont have to conform to and codes or conventions of other types of writing!
No full stops, at all.
it's broken up with commas and the end of lines. If thats what he's talking about then he doesn't know how to read poems! JEEEESSSSUSSSSS!
I think Edgy is talking about putting commas and full stops at the end of each line. Or some sort of punctuation marks to break up the text. Am I right Edge?
Edgy wrote:
> Just a note - poetry still has punctuation - it makes it a lot easier
> to read.
I'm not too sure what you mean mate, can you point the 'mistakes' out please?
> Just a note - poetry still has punctuation - it makes it a lot easier
> to read.
I'm not too sure what you mean mate, can you point the 'mistakes' out please?
I liked it - some of the groupings of the words slowed the poem down a bit - but overall that was very good. :D
Just a note - poetry still has punctuation - it makes it a lot easier to read.
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