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"A life...."

This is about a person called john he is a kind man from Pitsea in Essex all around him there are people up to no good. Even as a child there was a bad influence. John’s dad left him when he was only 3. While he was at nursery He used to wait by the exit all day until the end.

When he was at primary school he didn’t want to go by the rules but he didn’t get into fights or bully people as he would usually get bullied. When he was in class he did muck about and was completely honest when it came to making decisions. He learnt that he had I condition called asbergers syndrome but only a small case of it.

By the time he was in secondary school he had learnt to go by his own rules and that nobody owned him. He never wanted to be in a grudge with anyone. He’d lived on a dodgy bad estate were gangs and that lived. He didn’t like it there because he had people after him. It would have been easy for him to have gone bad as there was so much influence around him. His mum had tried for nearly eight years to get off the estate. On the estate that he lived on there were plenty of people to get him and beat him up but for no reason at all!

2 months before this very day john moved into a new home in the same town but at the other side of it. Because he didn’t know anyone around him at the new house he decided to stay in and think about his life. He never really had any of the stuff that his friends had because simply his mum couldn’t afford it. So he made do with what he had he never stole because he knew it was wrong. This sort of makes him a nice person.

Sadly the people around him do still do horrible things to this date. But he remembers one thing: it might be bad today but there is a tomorrow.

The End

Did you like this story?

it dint ryme

Paradox: wrote:
> As a factual account of your life then it's fine, but as a story it's
> not acceptable for anyone over 7.

Thats why i asked his age.

Your writing style isn't very advanced mate. The comment at the end "did you like this story" makes it seem as if you've tried to make it entertaining, which it really wasnt. Informative perhaps but not a fun read.

He did this, he did that. It's not exactly author quality is it?

As a factual account of your life then it's fine, but as a story it's not acceptable for anyone over 7.

You're not a bad person at all

Whats awful

My life?

I was jokingly telling you it's awful. Sorry, I'm a bad person.

REally
or are you just joking

Very good Buck *gives him gold star* Tomorrow your assignment is to write 300 words on a book of your choice and you can't choose "My first ABC".

Yes i know

It wasn't a story. It was a "this is your [rather crappy] life" for a 13/14 year old.