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One day I'm going to burst,
right out of my thick skin.
One day you'll see me standing,
for what really lies within.
One day you'll eat those words,
that flowed right out your mouth.
One day my concience will just snap,
and its hold on me fly south.
You love casting shadows,
It makes you feel so grand.
One day someone will rise right up,
and kill you where you stand.
Don't say I didn't warn you,
One day you'll see I'm right,
One day I'll find a better way,
That day I'll win the fight.
right out of my thick skin.
One day you'll see me standing,
for what really lies within.
One day you'll eat those words,
that flowed right out your mouth.
One day my concience will just snap,
and its hold on me fly south.
You love casting shadows,
It makes you feel so grand.
One day someone will rise right up,
and kill you where you stand.
Don't say I didn't warn you,
One day you'll see I'm right,
One day I'll find a better way,
That day I'll win the fight.
um, thanks. Problem is that now I come to re-read it, I don't like it anymore!!
This was actually written about someone at work who was pretty much being a pain in the ar$e, as they always are, so it's real and pretty much as I felt at the time of writing it.
This was actually written about someone at work who was pretty much being a pain in the ar$e, as they always are, so it's real and pretty much as I felt at the time of writing it.
Strong poem, and definitely has a rythm to it that makes it complete. excellent.
I liked the way the poem uses the word 'One' only 7 times but then reaches closure by using 'day' eight times. Very dramatic and poetically deontological.
Brilliant. It really touched me. :-)
Some good use of rhyming.
Some good use of rhyming.
One day I'm going to burst,
right out of my thick skin.
One day you'll see me standing,
for what really lies within.
One day you'll eat those words,
that flowed right out your mouth.
One day my concience will just snap,
and its hold on me fly south.
You love casting shadows,
It makes you feel so grand.
One day someone will rise right up,
and kill you where you stand.
Don't say I didn't warn you,
One day you'll see I'm right,
One day I'll find a better way,
That day I'll win the fight.
right out of my thick skin.
One day you'll see me standing,
for what really lies within.
One day you'll eat those words,
that flowed right out your mouth.
One day my concience will just snap,
and its hold on me fly south.
You love casting shadows,
It makes you feel so grand.
One day someone will rise right up,
and kill you where you stand.
Don't say I didn't warn you,
One day you'll see I'm right,
One day I'll find a better way,
That day I'll win the fight.