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I tried a new technique with this poem that makes it rather weird and unusual and on face value it is pretty bizarre but if you look deeper it has some significance. It is nowhere near as good as my politics poem and I wrote this almost off the top of my head, so we shall soon see what you think of it.
The missed is a must
In a tryst based on trust
An abundance of lies
Followed by thunderous cries
The sordid secret endeavours
precious as sequin trimmed feathers
On the bed made with silk
Where we laid feeling no guilt
Two combined bodies entwined
After refined sips of wine
But the missed is a must
In a tryst based on lust
The missed is a must
In a tryst based on trust
An abundance of lies
Followed by thunderous cries
The sordid secret endeavours
precious as sequin trimmed feathers
On the bed made with silk
Where we laid feeling no guilt
Two combined bodies entwined
After refined sips of wine
But the missed is a must
In a tryst based on lust
'The missed' Refers to all those things you wish you had done when something is over. Eg in an important meeting you think afterwards "Ah, I wish I had said X instead", only it refers to the things missed in the relationship.
'A Must' is something you feel obliged to do or basically really want to do. So in the context of the poem, although it suggests the relationship has ended and is in the past - there is still a degree of wanting to pick it up.
Hope you followed that!
'A Must' is something you feel obliged to do or basically really want to do. So in the context of the poem, although it suggests the relationship has ended and is in the past - there is still a degree of wanting to pick it up.
Hope you followed that!
Heh, that must be it. "The missed is a must" lines confuse me a bit. I'm still not sure what that is exactly referring to. I like the wording and the way it finishes.
The constant theme of sex, perhaps?
There's something about this one which I like.
Good. The only reason I didn't get it at the start was I misread the "lust" on the last line, thinking it was trust.
I tried a new technique with this poem that makes it rather weird and unusual and on face value it is pretty bizarre but if you look deeper it has some significance. It is nowhere near as good as my politics poem and I wrote this almost off the top of my head, so we shall soon see what you think of it.
The missed is a must
In a tryst based on trust
An abundance of lies
Followed by thunderous cries
The sordid secret endeavours
precious as sequin trimmed feathers
On the bed made with silk
Where we laid feeling no guilt
Two combined bodies entwined
After refined sips of wine
But the missed is a must
In a tryst based on lust
The missed is a must
In a tryst based on trust
An abundance of lies
Followed by thunderous cries
The sordid secret endeavours
precious as sequin trimmed feathers
On the bed made with silk
Where we laid feeling no guilt
Two combined bodies entwined
After refined sips of wine
But the missed is a must
In a tryst based on lust