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I just wanted help on seeing if this was any good for the start of a novel:
The hot noontide sun beat down unmercifully on the empire of Sakanda. It was a record hot summer. Making it difficult for even the hardiest of creatures to venture outside of their doors. Three young elves, apparently oblivious to the heat, strode through Dundain forest chatting amicably. Karn was the oldest and tallest of the trio, he had short dark brown hair and dark eyes. He had a tanned complexion, and carried a beautifully crafted dagger thrust into his belt; the dagger had a gold hilt, with a small crystal set into it, and a steel blade. Miam, the second oldest, was smaller but very catlike in her appearance; she was fair with a pale complexion and her eyes were a vivid shade of blue, she carried a bow and a quiver of arrows over one shoulder. The youngest was Dantrine who had long silky black hair and penetrating hazel eyes. The companions walked at a steady pace through the dense forest until the reached a wooded glade where there was a small lake at the centre. The tall trees around the edge provided suitable shade for any weary traveller while the lake granted refreshment.
The hot noontide sun beat down unmercifully on the empire of Sakanda. It was a record hot summer. Making it difficult for even the hardiest of creatures to venture outside of their doors. Three young elves, apparently oblivious to the heat, strode through Dundain forest chatting amicably. Karn was the oldest and tallest of the trio, he had short dark brown hair and dark eyes. He had a tanned complexion, and carried a beautifully crafted dagger thrust into his belt; the dagger had a gold hilt, with a small crystal set into it, and a steel blade. Miam, the second oldest, was smaller but very catlike in her appearance; she was fair with a pale complexion and her eyes were a vivid shade of blue, she carried a bow and a quiver of arrows over one shoulder. The youngest was Dantrine who had long silky black hair and penetrating hazel eyes. The companions walked at a steady pace through the dense forest until the reached a wooded glade where there was a small lake at the centre. The tall trees around the edge provided suitable shade for any weary traveller while the lake granted refreshment.
Good start, but it just seems Lord of the Ringsy, with elves and the lark. It also depends whether you are going to make the story completely different to other stories that are set in that time. If the story carries on in the mood you have set so far, i can only see it being good. Good names, good desription so i'll just wait 'til it's finished.
I just wanted help on seeing if this was any good for the start of a novel:
The hot noontide sun beat down unmercifully on the empire of Sakanda. It was a record hot summer. Making it difficult for even the hardiest of creatures to venture outside of their doors. Three young elves, apparently oblivious to the heat, strode through Dundain forest chatting amicably. Karn was the oldest and tallest of the trio, he had short dark brown hair and dark eyes. He had a tanned complexion, and carried a beautifully crafted dagger thrust into his belt; the dagger had a gold hilt, with a small crystal set into it, and a steel blade. Miam, the second oldest, was smaller but very catlike in her appearance; she was fair with a pale complexion and her eyes were a vivid shade of blue, she carried a bow and a quiver of arrows over one shoulder. The youngest was Dantrine who had long silky black hair and penetrating hazel eyes. The companions walked at a steady pace through the dense forest until the reached a wooded glade where there was a small lake at the centre. The tall trees around the edge provided suitable shade for any weary traveller while the lake granted refreshment.
The hot noontide sun beat down unmercifully on the empire of Sakanda. It was a record hot summer. Making it difficult for even the hardiest of creatures to venture outside of their doors. Three young elves, apparently oblivious to the heat, strode through Dundain forest chatting amicably. Karn was the oldest and tallest of the trio, he had short dark brown hair and dark eyes. He had a tanned complexion, and carried a beautifully crafted dagger thrust into his belt; the dagger had a gold hilt, with a small crystal set into it, and a steel blade. Miam, the second oldest, was smaller but very catlike in her appearance; she was fair with a pale complexion and her eyes were a vivid shade of blue, she carried a bow and a quiver of arrows over one shoulder. The youngest was Dantrine who had long silky black hair and penetrating hazel eyes. The companions walked at a steady pace through the dense forest until the reached a wooded glade where there was a small lake at the centre. The tall trees around the edge provided suitable shade for any weary traveller while the lake granted refreshment.