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Rey Mysterio is greeted by a full crowded, Madison Square Garden. He makes his way down the ramp high-fiving many of the fans. He gets to the ring and applaudes on all four corner posts and then is interrupted by a ........"Its time to play the game" Triple H wastes no time and attacks the rey Mysterio who is talking to the referee.
After jumping Rey into the corner he starts stomping away, wearing down the helpless Rey Mysterio. Allowing time for Rey to get to his feet, the ref. seperates the too desperate athletes. Triple H does not approve and starts bad-mouthing the ref.. At this time Rey gets to his feet and starts climbing the turnbuckle. He is put to a halt after Triple H spots him and delivers a cheap shot. Triple H starts climbing too and takes Rey down with a devestating Superplex.
Both Superstars are down and the referee is starting his count ....1.....2.....3.......4.......5........6..... Triple H is the first up and sets Rey up for a powerbomb but is reversed into a hurricanrana. Rey takes advantage and goes for a pin ...1...2... oh, so close Triple H kicks out with authority, gets up and knocks Rey down with a powerful clothesline.
Instead of going for a pin, Triple H has spotted a steel chair and heads for it. He picks it up and rolls into the ring. The ref. stops Triple H. and gives the chair back to someone at ringside.
As Rey gets up, he dropkicks Triple H who has his back turned. Triple H falls onto the second rope and recieves a "619" followed by a "West Coast Pop" ......1......2.......3... ding,ding,ding
"here is your winner,- Rey Mysterio"
Rey immediately rolls out of the ring and heads backstage. Triple H is very Angry and pedigrees the ref. A group of officials run down with a stretcher and help him.
After jumping Rey into the corner he starts stomping away, wearing down the helpless Rey Mysterio. Allowing time for Rey to get to his feet, the ref. seperates the too desperate athletes. Triple H does not approve and starts bad-mouthing the ref.. At this time Rey gets to his feet and starts climbing the turnbuckle. He is put to a halt after Triple H spots him and delivers a cheap shot. Triple H starts climbing too and takes Rey down with a devestating Superplex.
Both Superstars are down and the referee is starting his count ....1.....2.....3.......4.......5........6..... Triple H is the first up and sets Rey up for a powerbomb but is reversed into a hurricanrana. Rey takes advantage and goes for a pin ...1...2... oh, so close Triple H kicks out with authority, gets up and knocks Rey down with a powerful clothesline.
Instead of going for a pin, Triple H has spotted a steel chair and heads for it. He picks it up and rolls into the ring. The ref. stops Triple H. and gives the chair back to someone at ringside.
As Rey gets up, he dropkicks Triple H who has his back turned. Triple H falls onto the second rope and recieves a "619" followed by a "West Coast Pop" ......1......2.......3... ding,ding,ding
"here is your winner,- Rey Mysterio"
Rey immediately rolls out of the ring and heads backstage. Triple H is very Angry and pedigrees the ref. A group of officials run down with a stretcher and help him.
Okay, if you do what you've done, but double the size, then you'll have a good match on your hands.
Here's a tip: Write it on Microsoft Word first, and use spell and grammar check. This will improve presentation, because apart from that and length, it's pretty good. You've added some nice little details, and my only other advice would be to add more exclamation marks to make moves sound better. You seem to know your stuff, so there's no problem with the actual wrestling action.
So overall: Double the length, use spell checker on Word and use more exclamation marks. Could you write me a second match at some point, doesn't matter when though.
Good start, Si Mysterio.
Here's a tip: Write it on Microsoft Word first, and use spell and grammar check. This will improve presentation, because apart from that and length, it's pretty good. You've added some nice little details, and my only other advice would be to add more exclamation marks to make moves sound better. You seem to know your stuff, so there's no problem with the actual wrestling action.
So overall: Double the length, use spell checker on Word and use more exclamation marks. Could you write me a second match at some point, doesn't matter when though.
Good start, Si Mysterio.
Si Mysterio wrote:
rey Mysterio who is talking to the referee.
Heh, that actually made me laugh! :cD
Not bad, not bad. Maybe look back through some other matches, and try and follow their styles a bit more. Other then that, not bad.
rey Mysterio who is talking to the referee.
Heh, that actually made me laugh! :cD
Not bad, not bad. Maybe look back through some other matches, and try and follow their styles a bit more. Other then that, not bad.
Heh. Not bad.
I see you want to be a writer for SRW now, is that right? :-)
Well, if you are able to write, try and make the matches quite a bit longer, with fewer paragraphs, and try to describe the action a little better. Not too bad at all though, which is good.
I'll see what the other members of the forum have to say. :-)
I see you want to be a writer for SRW now, is that right? :-)
Well, if you are able to write, try and make the matches quite a bit longer, with fewer paragraphs, and try to describe the action a little better. Not too bad at all though, which is good.
I'll see what the other members of the forum have to say. :-)
Rey Mysterio is greeted by a full crowded, Madison Square Garden. He makes his way down the ramp high-fiving many of the fans. He gets to the ring and applaudes on all four corner posts and then is interrupted by a ........"Its time to play the game" Triple H wastes no time and attacks the rey Mysterio who is talking to the referee.
After jumping Rey into the corner he starts stomping away, wearing down the helpless Rey Mysterio. Allowing time for Rey to get to his feet, the ref. seperates the too desperate athletes. Triple H does not approve and starts bad-mouthing the ref.. At this time Rey gets to his feet and starts climbing the turnbuckle. He is put to a halt after Triple H spots him and delivers a cheap shot. Triple H starts climbing too and takes Rey down with a devestating Superplex.
Both Superstars are down and the referee is starting his count ....1.....2.....3.......4.......5........6..... Triple H is the first up and sets Rey up for a powerbomb but is reversed into a hurricanrana. Rey takes advantage and goes for a pin ...1...2... oh, so close Triple H kicks out with authority, gets up and knocks Rey down with a powerful clothesline.
Instead of going for a pin, Triple H has spotted a steel chair and heads for it. He picks it up and rolls into the ring. The ref. stops Triple H. and gives the chair back to someone at ringside.
As Rey gets up, he dropkicks Triple H who has his back turned. Triple H falls onto the second rope and recieves a "619" followed by a "West Coast Pop" ......1......2.......3... ding,ding,ding
"here is your winner,- Rey Mysterio"
Rey immediately rolls out of the ring and heads backstage. Triple H is very Angry and pedigrees the ref. A group of officials run down with a stretcher and help him.
After jumping Rey into the corner he starts stomping away, wearing down the helpless Rey Mysterio. Allowing time for Rey to get to his feet, the ref. seperates the too desperate athletes. Triple H does not approve and starts bad-mouthing the ref.. At this time Rey gets to his feet and starts climbing the turnbuckle. He is put to a halt after Triple H spots him and delivers a cheap shot. Triple H starts climbing too and takes Rey down with a devestating Superplex.
Both Superstars are down and the referee is starting his count ....1.....2.....3.......4.......5........6..... Triple H is the first up and sets Rey up for a powerbomb but is reversed into a hurricanrana. Rey takes advantage and goes for a pin ...1...2... oh, so close Triple H kicks out with authority, gets up and knocks Rey down with a powerful clothesline.
Instead of going for a pin, Triple H has spotted a steel chair and heads for it. He picks it up and rolls into the ring. The ref. stops Triple H. and gives the chair back to someone at ringside.
As Rey gets up, he dropkicks Triple H who has his back turned. Triple H falls onto the second rope and recieves a "619" followed by a "West Coast Pop" ......1......2.......3... ding,ding,ding
"here is your winner,- Rey Mysterio"
Rey immediately rolls out of the ring and heads backstage. Triple H is very Angry and pedigrees the ref. A group of officials run down with a stretcher and help him.