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Davy the music Slayer was in a bar when he got a call on his mobile. “Hello this Davy speaking”.
“Davy this is your partner Fido the fearless. I just got word that Britney Spears has just been captured bye unknown forces”.
“Ok Fido I will be on my way”
Mean while …
Mr Snuggly was putting on his makeup ready for work “oh this makeup takes ages to put on but then no one must know I am really a vampire slayer”.
So Off Mr Snuggly goes little be knowing he would become a hero to the music world.
Back at his office
Davy walks in the door “Ok Fido what have we got on this Britney case then”?
“Well there isn’t much to go on so far except she was taken at night from her hotel room”.
“Hmm” Davy said “it sounds like we are dealing with the shadows “
“You mean those nasty vicious Vampires”? Asked Fido
“Yes but the question is what do they want with Britney Spears? This is all very strange but there is one man that can help us”.
Davy picks up the phone and dials “Hello is that the SR offices”
“Yes Snuggly Speaking”
“Ah just the man, this is Davy the Music Slayer. Are you busy because we need you on an urgent job?”
“Well what has happened?” Snuggly asks
“Well someone has kidnapped Britney Spears and we think the vicious Vampire group the Shadows have got her.
They were suddenly a voice from what seemed like all the radios “We are the Shadows and we have kidnapped Britney Spears. We kidnapped her because we want this world to be a miserable place. Without Britney’s singing the happy world will become a much sadder place. Do not come looking for us because you will never find us”.
“So that’s there game is it” Davy mutters under his breath.
“Let us hope we won’t be too late to save her Davy” Fido says
At that moment Mr Snuggly arrives in his Snug mobile and screeches to a halt. He slams the Snug mobiles door and runs up the steps into the office.
“Hello I’m Snuggly hope I’m not too late”
“No” Davy says “did you hear the Shadows on the radio”?
“Yes I did and I think I know a way to find them. They will be hidden in a dark secret place where they think they won’t be found”
“You mean”?
“Yes the basement of channel5”
“How can you be so sure”? Asks Fido
“I just know” Snuggly replies
So off they all went in Snuggle’s Snug mobile to the channel5 basement as fast as the snug mobile will go.
Grinding to a halt they all get out and run to the channel5 offices.
Out of breath Davy says to the receptionist”Hello I am Davy and this is Fido my partner and Snuggly”
The receptionist asks “How may I help”?
“Did you here that Britney Spears has been kidnapped bye The Shadows on Radio”?
“Yes sir I did”
“Well” Davy starts “it is Snuggle’s belief that they have her held here in the channel5 basement”,”may we go take a look”?
“Yes but I will give you two security guards to go with you to show you the way”
So as they wait two big burly security guards come up and escort them down into the basement
Davy looking at Snuggly realises something is missing” Um Snuggly where is your vampire slaying stuff? You know holy water, wooden stake, and crucifix“?
Snuggly looks at Davy “Don’t you know anything? Those are old hack, watch listen and learn”
As they make there way down to the basement Fido gets a sudden eerie feeling that they as being watched.
“I don’t like this you two I think we are not alone”
Davy and Snuggly just nod
Without warning there was a sudden hissing laugh, Snuggly had heard it before but the others hadn’t.
“What was that”? Said Fido in a startled fashion
Snuggly whispers “It’s the shadow Vampires they are toying with us”
Davy looking at the two guards sees they faces go white, they eyes contorted with fear “Its ok you two guards you may stay here if you wish we shall take it from here”
The two guards just nodded and stood they frozen on the spot
The three intrepid hero’s carry on there quest and walk down into the basement.
Suddenly without warning two vampire leap out in front of them
“That’s as far as you go” hisses one
“You won’t get past us” hisses the other
With lightening reflexes Snuggly moves behind the vampires and gooses one of them.
They all watch in horror as the vampire lets out a screech and crumbles to dust.
Snuggly laughs “Want a bet”?
Fido seeing what happened gets the idea and with her fearless attitude, while the vampire’s attention is on Snuggly she grabs the other vampire’s bottom and gooses him.
They watch in fascination as the other vampire turns to dust.
Snuggly ^5s Fido “Good going”
“Yeah we make a great team” Fido replies
“We are not out of the woods yet” Davy reminds them
As they walk into the basement to there horror they see a whole horde of vampires at least ten of them.
The vampires all turn to look at them. The intrepid three feel the fear welling up inside them but they know they must go on to save Britney Spears.
From behind them they hear a voice with horror Mr Snuggly recognises”So you think you can save Britney do you”?
“Is that Tony The owner of SR”?
“Oh no, I am not Tony but Antonio the Evil, leader of the Shadows I am 250 years old” with a hiss he turns to his minions “Get them my brothers they must not get Britney Spears”
As they all rush into action Mr Snuggly moves like a cat and gooses one and then another.
Fido joins in and kicks one and as he bends she gooses him.
One bye one Antonio sees his brothers getting slaughtered.
“Stop!” he screeches “If you kill any more of my brothers I will destroy Britney Spears”.
Davy looks in horror but then has an idea”Can you two hold off these vampires while I rescue Britney”?
“It will be a pleasure “gins Snuggly
So while Fido and Snuggly distract the vampires, Davy rushes past them to where Antonio is hiding in a side room.
Davy leaps at Antonio, but Antonio is to smart at that game and dodges past “You will have to do better then that” Antonio hisses
Davy seeing Britney Spears all tied up suddenly finds a new resolve and leaps behind Antonio and gooses him. Antonio just lets out a hissing laugh and dodges to the left, but Davy wasn’t going to give up, flips to the left then back and gooses both Antonio’s butt cheeks.
Antonio lets out a high piercing shriek “No!” and with this he fades his skin turns to rugs and all that’s left is a skeleton.
Britney lets out a “mmm” Davy grabs a knife and cuts her free “thank you she replies I though I was a gonna”
“We are not out the woods yet you stay here”
Britney just nods weakly
Davy goes back in the main room to help the other two and sees they have got most of the vampires. He leaps up to one and gooses her, a female vampire”thought you two might need a hand here”
“Thanks Davy but we were doing fine” Fido says “right Snuggly”?
Snuggly Grins”That is right”
Davy watches as Fido gets the last of the vampires.
Davy goes back to Britney “are you ok”?
“I am rather shaken but otherwise I am ok” with this Britney kisses Davy”that was for saving my life thank you”
Davy blushes slightly”think nothing of it”
Together with the other two heroes they walk up back to main reception knowing they job is now done.
“How can I repay you three for saving my life”? “I know ill sing a song” “Oh baby baby”
“The three heroes shout as one “No“! They cover there ears and run as fast as they possibly can.
THE END
“Davy this is your partner Fido the fearless. I just got word that Britney Spears has just been captured bye unknown forces”.
“Ok Fido I will be on my way”
Mean while …
Mr Snuggly was putting on his makeup ready for work “oh this makeup takes ages to put on but then no one must know I am really a vampire slayer”.
So Off Mr Snuggly goes little be knowing he would become a hero to the music world.
Back at his office
Davy walks in the door “Ok Fido what have we got on this Britney case then”?
“Well there isn’t much to go on so far except she was taken at night from her hotel room”.
“Hmm” Davy said “it sounds like we are dealing with the shadows “
“You mean those nasty vicious Vampires”? Asked Fido
“Yes but the question is what do they want with Britney Spears? This is all very strange but there is one man that can help us”.
Davy picks up the phone and dials “Hello is that the SR offices”
“Yes Snuggly Speaking”
“Ah just the man, this is Davy the Music Slayer. Are you busy because we need you on an urgent job?”
“Well what has happened?” Snuggly asks
“Well someone has kidnapped Britney Spears and we think the vicious Vampire group the Shadows have got her.
They were suddenly a voice from what seemed like all the radios “We are the Shadows and we have kidnapped Britney Spears. We kidnapped her because we want this world to be a miserable place. Without Britney’s singing the happy world will become a much sadder place. Do not come looking for us because you will never find us”.
“So that’s there game is it” Davy mutters under his breath.
“Let us hope we won’t be too late to save her Davy” Fido says
At that moment Mr Snuggly arrives in his Snug mobile and screeches to a halt. He slams the Snug mobiles door and runs up the steps into the office.
“Hello I’m Snuggly hope I’m not too late”
“No” Davy says “did you hear the Shadows on the radio”?
“Yes I did and I think I know a way to find them. They will be hidden in a dark secret place where they think they won’t be found”
“You mean”?
“Yes the basement of channel5”
“How can you be so sure”? Asks Fido
“I just know” Snuggly replies
So off they all went in Snuggle’s Snug mobile to the channel5 basement as fast as the snug mobile will go.
Grinding to a halt they all get out and run to the channel5 offices.
Out of breath Davy says to the receptionist”Hello I am Davy and this is Fido my partner and Snuggly”
The receptionist asks “How may I help”?
“Did you here that Britney Spears has been kidnapped bye The Shadows on Radio”?
“Yes sir I did”
“Well” Davy starts “it is Snuggle’s belief that they have her held here in the channel5 basement”,”may we go take a look”?
“Yes but I will give you two security guards to go with you to show you the way”
So as they wait two big burly security guards come up and escort them down into the basement
Davy looking at Snuggly realises something is missing” Um Snuggly where is your vampire slaying stuff? You know holy water, wooden stake, and crucifix“?
Snuggly looks at Davy “Don’t you know anything? Those are old hack, watch listen and learn”
As they make there way down to the basement Fido gets a sudden eerie feeling that they as being watched.
“I don’t like this you two I think we are not alone”
Davy and Snuggly just nod
Without warning there was a sudden hissing laugh, Snuggly had heard it before but the others hadn’t.
“What was that”? Said Fido in a startled fashion
Snuggly whispers “It’s the shadow Vampires they are toying with us”
Davy looking at the two guards sees they faces go white, they eyes contorted with fear “Its ok you two guards you may stay here if you wish we shall take it from here”
The two guards just nodded and stood they frozen on the spot
The three intrepid hero’s carry on there quest and walk down into the basement.
Suddenly without warning two vampire leap out in front of them
“That’s as far as you go” hisses one
“You won’t get past us” hisses the other
With lightening reflexes Snuggly moves behind the vampires and gooses one of them.
They all watch in horror as the vampire lets out a screech and crumbles to dust.
Snuggly laughs “Want a bet”?
Fido seeing what happened gets the idea and with her fearless attitude, while the vampire’s attention is on Snuggly she grabs the other vampire’s bottom and gooses him.
They watch in fascination as the other vampire turns to dust.
Snuggly ^5s Fido “Good going”
“Yeah we make a great team” Fido replies
“We are not out of the woods yet” Davy reminds them
As they walk into the basement to there horror they see a whole horde of vampires at least ten of them.
The vampires all turn to look at them. The intrepid three feel the fear welling up inside them but they know they must go on to save Britney Spears.
From behind them they hear a voice with horror Mr Snuggly recognises”So you think you can save Britney do you”?
“Is that Tony The owner of SR”?
“Oh no, I am not Tony but Antonio the Evil, leader of the Shadows I am 250 years old” with a hiss he turns to his minions “Get them my brothers they must not get Britney Spears”
As they all rush into action Mr Snuggly moves like a cat and gooses one and then another.
Fido joins in and kicks one and as he bends she gooses him.
One bye one Antonio sees his brothers getting slaughtered.
“Stop!” he screeches “If you kill any more of my brothers I will destroy Britney Spears”.
Davy looks in horror but then has an idea”Can you two hold off these vampires while I rescue Britney”?
“It will be a pleasure “gins Snuggly
So while Fido and Snuggly distract the vampires, Davy rushes past them to where Antonio is hiding in a side room.
Davy leaps at Antonio, but Antonio is to smart at that game and dodges past “You will have to do better then that” Antonio hisses
Davy seeing Britney Spears all tied up suddenly finds a new resolve and leaps behind Antonio and gooses him. Antonio just lets out a hissing laugh and dodges to the left, but Davy wasn’t going to give up, flips to the left then back and gooses both Antonio’s butt cheeks.
Antonio lets out a high piercing shriek “No!” and with this he fades his skin turns to rugs and all that’s left is a skeleton.
Britney lets out a “mmm” Davy grabs a knife and cuts her free “thank you she replies I though I was a gonna”
“We are not out the woods yet you stay here”
Britney just nods weakly
Davy goes back in the main room to help the other two and sees they have got most of the vampires. He leaps up to one and gooses her, a female vampire”thought you two might need a hand here”
“Thanks Davy but we were doing fine” Fido says “right Snuggly”?
Snuggly Grins”That is right”
Davy watches as Fido gets the last of the vampires.
Davy goes back to Britney “are you ok”?
“I am rather shaken but otherwise I am ok” with this Britney kisses Davy”that was for saving my life thank you”
Davy blushes slightly”think nothing of it”
Together with the other two heroes they walk up back to main reception knowing they job is now done.
“How can I repay you three for saving my life”? “I know ill sing a song” “Oh baby baby”
“The three heroes shout as one “No“! They cover there ears and run as fast as they possibly can.
THE END
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I think i know why now about the puntuation its to do with the fact that this site wont tab a guess it was to complicated to put a tab command in, so it does make the post look untidier then it acually is. It is rather anoying though speciallly when you work hard on a post like i did with that one.
You may want to investigate your use of punctuation, as when improved it would help the feel of the story a lot.
Oh well, worth a try.
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