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Thought I'd ask the experts...
My father served as a carrier pilot during the 2nd World War, seeing action in the North Atlantic and the Pacific. During this time, he maintained a daily diary detailing all the usual stuff. This diary was written for my mother and as such also includes other intimate comments! Now at the grand age of 84, he is insistant that it be published! I have recently 'picked up' the task of re-writing and proofing the final copy.
The problem now is the title. A former shipmate, who has had two factual books published about the same events, has read the draft and suggested...
'Dearest Dorothy ...the intimate diary of a young 'just married' man while he was a RN carrier pilot in WW2'
To me, I'm not sure - it seems as long as the book! Any advice or suggestions would be most gratefully accepted. Thanks...
My father served as a carrier pilot during the 2nd World War, seeing action in the North Atlantic and the Pacific. During this time, he maintained a daily diary detailing all the usual stuff. This diary was written for my mother and as such also includes other intimate comments! Now at the grand age of 84, he is insistant that it be published! I have recently 'picked up' the task of re-writing and proofing the final copy.
The problem now is the title. A former shipmate, who has had two factual books published about the same events, has read the draft and suggested...
'Dearest Dorothy ...the intimate diary of a young 'just married' man while he was a RN carrier pilot in WW2'
To me, I'm not sure - it seems as long as the book! Any advice or suggestions would be most gratefully accepted. Thanks...
I like the "Dearest Dorothy" in the title. I'd buy it for my library :)
Garin wrote:
> Not sure about too long, especially if you consider the
> descriptive part a sub-title. The english is a bit awkward for a
> title though, maybe something along the lines of
> "Dearest Dorothy - the intimate WW2 diaries of a newly wed
> RN carrier pilot" or some close variation.
Thanks for your thoughts Garin, much appreciated - a far better idea - we shall try and work around your suggestion. Thanks again:)
> Not sure about too long, especially if you consider the
> descriptive part a sub-title. The english is a bit awkward for a
> title though, maybe something along the lines of
> "Dearest Dorothy - the intimate WW2 diaries of a newly wed
> RN carrier pilot" or some close variation.
Thanks for your thoughts Garin, much appreciated - a far better idea - we shall try and work around your suggestion. Thanks again:)
Not sure about too long, especially if you consider the descriptive part a sub-title. The english is a bit awkward for a title though, maybe something along the lines of
"Dearest Dorothy - the intimate WW2 diaries of a newly wed RN carrier pilot" or some close variation.
"Dearest Dorothy - the intimate WW2 diaries of a newly wed RN carrier pilot" or some close variation.
Thought I'd ask the experts...
My father served as a carrier pilot during the 2nd World War, seeing action in the North Atlantic and the Pacific. During this time, he maintained a daily diary detailing all the usual stuff. This diary was written for my mother and as such also includes other intimate comments! Now at the grand age of 84, he is insistant that it be published! I have recently 'picked up' the task of re-writing and proofing the final copy.
The problem now is the title. A former shipmate, who has had two factual books published about the same events, has read the draft and suggested...
'Dearest Dorothy ...the intimate diary of a young 'just married' man while he was a RN carrier pilot in WW2'
To me, I'm not sure - it seems as long as the book! Any advice or suggestions would be most gratefully accepted. Thanks...
My father served as a carrier pilot during the 2nd World War, seeing action in the North Atlantic and the Pacific. During this time, he maintained a daily diary detailing all the usual stuff. This diary was written for my mother and as such also includes other intimate comments! Now at the grand age of 84, he is insistant that it be published! I have recently 'picked up' the task of re-writing and proofing the final copy.
The problem now is the title. A former shipmate, who has had two factual books published about the same events, has read the draft and suggested...
'Dearest Dorothy ...the intimate diary of a young 'just married' man while he was a RN carrier pilot in WW2'
To me, I'm not sure - it seems as long as the book! Any advice or suggestions would be most gratefully accepted. Thanks...