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"The Honest Reflection"

Just wanted to say that this isnt the usual thing that i write, but i thought i would give it ago, see if it helped. Anyway, here it is:

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I stood there yesterday, like normal, looking at him
He was the one I could tell everything
I trusted him with my heart, my soul
He would never leave me
Not like them
He would stick by me
Give me comfort
He was more than a friend to me.

I would spend what seemed like hours just looking into his eyes telling him things that I could not tell anyone else
He would just stand there looking right back
Smiling
Listening
And not judging me at all
He understood me as much as I did me
And I understood him as much as he did
We were like one person
As he looked at me
And I looked at him.

Yesterday I told him what I was feeling, how much things hurt
He didn’t answer
He just listened and smiled back at me
I knew what he was thinking
I knew he was trying to comfort me
And for this short time it was working
He knew what to tell me
He always does.

Today though was different
Again
I stood there looking at him
And he looked right back at me
But he wasn’t smiling
I told him how I felt today, again, like normal
But today I told him something new
Something that I wanted, but was too far away
I cant have her yet, I know that, but I wanted him to tell me different
I couldn’t tell anyone else
They would look at me, judge me, laugh at me
I wanted him to tell me it would work out
I wanted him to tell me to just hang in there
But he didn’t, he just looked right back
My friend, the one who I could trust, depend on to tell me everything is fine
Now stood there, miserable, looking back at me, teary eyed, unhappy
He didn’t look back then
As I walked away from the mirror.

Why, that was excellent!

I didnt know what to think at first and was juggling a few things around in my head as to what the hell you were going on about. I thought you were talking about you and your PS2 for a while aswell. I was urging to just skip the whole thing and read the last paragraph, but no, I read it all. Im still a bit confused as to what you meen by it all but it was good to read. Its not that the thing was bad, but its just me not catching onto these types of things. They usually need explaining to me or a read over again.

For a first go at these types of things, id say that this was brilliant.

Very good Pro, keep it up mate.
:)

Heres a poem I just started to write in word for some reason. And remember I'm only 12 and not really that good at English.

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here i am.
my life has has flashed away
so this is what i pay?
now i realise what i have wasted
all my life i have waited
for everything to come to me
hoping my dreams would come to be.
i can hardly walk
its difficult to talk
not that anyone would want to listen

this is what you could say
this is what you could pay
if all your life you just sit there
comfy in your leather chair
not doing anything
not trying to achieve
just wondering whats for tea this eve

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what does everyone think? Don't laugh please.

It's not a bad way to start posting in here, writing a decent poem.

Thanks for the comments.

And your probably right, this is the first post in this forum. :D

Good poem. So this is your first post in this forum? :D

Yup, cool. Keep writing.

Excellent poem, Evo. And considering it's not your usual style, that's really excellent. Keep writing stuff like this, you have a talent for it.

Great piece of creative writing there Dame, very well written, imaginative writing must be one of the hardest things a person can produce, you have to have the nack for it and you have the potential from reading this. Its interesting how the when you first start describing the situation as if your kinda looking up to a friend or relative and it turns out to be your own reflection on which you base your thinking on. Weldone and great title too, very catchy :D

Just wanted to say that this isnt the usual thing that i write, but i thought i would give it ago, see if it helped. Anyway, here it is:

------------------------------------------------------------

I stood there yesterday, like normal, looking at him
He was the one I could tell everything
I trusted him with my heart, my soul
He would never leave me
Not like them
He would stick by me
Give me comfort
He was more than a friend to me.

I would spend what seemed like hours just looking into his eyes telling him things that I could not tell anyone else
He would just stand there looking right back
Smiling
Listening
And not judging me at all
He understood me as much as I did me
And I understood him as much as he did
We were like one person
As he looked at me
And I looked at him.

Yesterday I told him what I was feeling, how much things hurt
He didn’t answer
He just listened and smiled back at me
I knew what he was thinking
I knew he was trying to comfort me
And for this short time it was working
He knew what to tell me
He always does.

Today though was different
Again
I stood there looking at him
And he looked right back at me
But he wasn’t smiling
I told him how I felt today, again, like normal
But today I told him something new
Something that I wanted, but was too far away
I cant have her yet, I know that, but I wanted him to tell me different
I couldn’t tell anyone else
They would look at me, judge me, laugh at me
I wanted him to tell me it would work out
I wanted him to tell me to just hang in there
But he didn’t, he just looked right back
My friend, the one who I could trust, depend on to tell me everything is fine
Now stood there, miserable, looking back at me, teary eyed, unhappy
He didn’t look back then
As I walked away from the mirror.