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"Child Abuse (Poem)"

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Mon 23/04/07 at 17:28
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Posts: 285
Its dark in here,
Im all alone.
What are they planning,
In this horrible home?

I hear noises,
Which I am not meant to hear.
These are the moments,
Of which I tremble in fear.

Will the door open,
To this room of which im locked in?
To let the slightest
Of light seep in?

As I look up and down,
Then around and around,
Nothing can stop,
That frightening sound.

If only someone knew
That I was in here.
Maybe they could save me,
And get rid of this tear.

The huge lock,
At which I stare,
Begins to move
And thickens the air.

The door is open,
In floods the fresh air.
Its times like these,
When I need my teddy bear.

As they grab me by the wrist.
My body begins to shake,
Placing the dark bag over my head,
If only my world was fake.

I am tied up and thrown outside,
Where my face and floor meet.
The noise is horrific,
Yet to the outside world it is so discrete.

Please people,
Its up to you.
Please get together,
And be my saving crew.

The outside world,
Is oblivious to me,
This plain grey room,
Is all I will ever see.

I am hurt and bruised,
Crying in pain.
Blood runs down my wrist,
Away from the vein.

Starving, bleeding and mentally scarred.
I donít know how much longer I can last.
Now its just a matter of time,
Please take the time, to contrast.
Wed 26/09/07 at 20:40
Regular
Posts: 285
Was just reading a few of my older posts. I didnt realise there were people who actually read it =) Thanks for the compliments and I didnt write this poem from experience. It was all out of my head.
Sat 07/07/07 at 18:58
Regular
"Why do peole b****"
Posts: 303
i wrote a story about child abuse at skl it was so gd i had 2 read it 2 the english department!
Wed 04/07/07 at 06:56
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Posts: 938
Is that you? Are you writing from experience or are you just imagining what it is like?

You do a fine job with the words taking the reader there, but I can't feel it. Perhaps it's because you're speaking from the numb. It seems you're more narrating the visual.

It's a good peice. Writing it out more will help draw the emotion out. Sometimes it's the hardest part to deal with, writing of these topics, but it can be cathartic and healing. Hardship in a neat box isn't as appealing and compelling as a screaming scratched-up rough draft. Just quoting FrouFrou, "there's beauty in the breakdown."
Sat 30/06/07 at 19:50
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"Why do peole b****"
Posts: 303
Thats a good poem.
Very inspirational. Well done
Very sad too
Mon 23/04/07 at 17:28
Regular
Posts: 285
Its dark in here,
Im all alone.
What are they planning,
In this horrible home?

I hear noises,
Which I am not meant to hear.
These are the moments,
Of which I tremble in fear.

Will the door open,
To this room of which im locked in?
To let the slightest
Of light seep in?

As I look up and down,
Then around and around,
Nothing can stop,
That frightening sound.

If only someone knew
That I was in here.
Maybe they could save me,
And get rid of this tear.

The huge lock,
At which I stare,
Begins to move
And thickens the air.

The door is open,
In floods the fresh air.
Its times like these,
When I need my teddy bear.

As they grab me by the wrist.
My body begins to shake,
Placing the dark bag over my head,
If only my world was fake.

I am tied up and thrown outside,
Where my face and floor meet.
The noise is horrific,
Yet to the outside world it is so discrete.

Please people,
Its up to you.
Please get together,
And be my saving crew.

The outside world,
Is oblivious to me,
This plain grey room,
Is all I will ever see.

I am hurt and bruised,
Crying in pain.
Blood runs down my wrist,
Away from the vein.

Starving, bleeding and mentally scarred.
I donít know how much longer I can last.
Now its just a matter of time,
Please take the time, to contrast.

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