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Its from a place like this that your watch.
The beast is from the ground.
Switch your eye away.
I said switch your eye away.
Its what you need this medicine is keane.
Its always been from heam.
That you have never gone,I always sing your song.
Listen through your ears gone from inside deers.
Slit from the throat.
He watched her walk away.
Blue,green how was I mean.
Go, go with me.
We can always switch.
Switch,break gone day.
Make this please now.
Its what I need.
The beast is from the ground.
Switch your eye away.
I said switch your eye away.
Its what you need this medicine is keane.
Its always been from heam.
That you have never gone,I always sing your song.
Listen through your ears gone from inside deers.
Slit from the throat.
He watched her walk away.
Blue,green how was I mean.
Go, go with me.
We can always switch.
Switch,break gone day.
Make this please now.
Its what I need.
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Oriental Rib wrote:
> Stick to story writing.
>
> Absolutely dire.
Yeah I will from now on my poem writing can't be the greatest.
> Stick to story writing.
>
> Absolutely dire.
Yeah I will from now on my poem writing can't be the greatest.
Well if that was your only goal, then you past with flying colours Crossbob!
Was just trying to make this strange.
You tried to get some depth and rythm by jumbling random sequences together, so it sounded quite disjointed.
There was literally no redeeming features, apart from the fact that it seemed to be about a beast, which was an interesting concept.
The strangest bit was:
"Its what you need this medicine is keane.
Its always been from heam."
Eh?
There was literally no redeeming features, apart from the fact that it seemed to be about a beast, which was an interesting concept.
The strangest bit was:
"Its what you need this medicine is keane.
Its always been from heam."
Eh?
It's probably even worse because I can see what you were trying to do.
Cycloon wrote:
> Scream half of it, put some 'BRRRZZZZ-silence-BRRZZZZZ'guitar
> distortion in, and have a semi punky beat and voila, nu-metal!
More like 'Nu-Mental' in Crossbob's case =)
> Scream half of it, put some 'BRRRZZZZ-silence-BRRZZZZZ'guitar
> distortion in, and have a semi punky beat and voila, nu-metal!
More like 'Nu-Mental' in Crossbob's case =)
Scream half of it, put some 'BRRRZZZZ-silence-BRRZZZZZ'guitar distortion in, and have a semi punky beat and voila, nu-metal!
Urrrgh
Stop disgracing the 14 year olds.
Oriental Rib wrote:
> Stick to story writing.
>
> Absolutely dire.
I would have to agree.
> Stick to story writing.
>
> Absolutely dire.
I would have to agree.
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