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Haunting memories
As I walked through the town,I wondered what life would be like after i did.....this.What would happen to everyone I knew?As I neared the cliff,something made me stop,and I flashed back......

Everything was kind of blurry,but i could hear fairly well.I saw everyone running.and looking around,saw my son,standing,pointingat the huge wave hurtling towards the shore.I ran,oh how I ran,but I knew it was hopeless.
"Paul get out of the way"!I cried but to no avail.
My words were whipped away.As I ran,something hit me in the back.It was a man."You crazy"? he asked"You'll get yourself killed"The man was too strong.I just slumped down on the sand,a quivering heap.

Then,as suddenly as the first time,I came back to see a man standing in front of me.The man."Your really sad about this,arent you"?he said."Guess"I growled back,bitterly."No need to be like that"he said
"Now I give you a chance"There was another jolt and I was back to ten minutes before the wave,as I saw on my watch.

"Use them"a voice said.
So following suit,I said to my wife I was hungry and we went to a restaurant.
I felt another jolt and found myself floating over my body,then was back to the cliff.

I was shocked to see no town there.
"W,w,w,what"?I said
"This is what happens when you change the past"he supplied
But I did'nt hear him,because I was hurtling down the side of the cliff.

Snake10

Haunting memories
As I walked through the town,I wondered what life would be like after i did.....this.What would happen to everyone I knew?As I neared the cliff,something made me stop,and I flashed back......

Everything was kind of blurry,but i could hear fairly well.I saw everyone running.and looking around,saw my son,standing,pointingat the huge wave hurtling towards the shore.I ran,oh how I ran,but I knew it was hopeless.
"Paul get out of the way"!I cried but to no avail.
My words were whipped away.As I ran,something hit me in the back.It was a man."You crazy"? he asked"You'll get yourself killed"The man was too strong.I just slumped down on the sand,a quivering heap.

Then,as suddenly as the first time,I came back to see a man standing in front of me.The man."Your really sad about this,arent you"?he said."Guess"I growled back,bitterly."No need to be like that"he said
"Now I give you a chance"There was another jolt and I was back to ten minutes before the wave,as I saw on my watch.

"Use them"a voice said.
So following suit,I said to my wife I was hungry and we went to a restaurant.
I felt another jolt and found myself floating over my body,then was back to the cliff.

I was shocked to see no town there.
"W,w,w,what"?I said
"This is what happens when you change the past"he supplied
But I did'nt hear him,because I was hurtling down the side of the cliff.

Snake10

I know its more of a short short story,but will you post your views?

It was a bit confusing - with the shifts in time, which just seemed to happen for no apparent reason. They need to be explained more for the story to work better. The end was quite good.

Very cunfussing, i didnt get most of it, but the start was very good!

Rating out of ten?

Black Glove wrote:
> It was a bit confusing - with the shifts in time, which just seemed to
> happen for no apparent reason.
Well,I sort of did that on purpose,the first one wasn't a shift in time,but that second was,and your supposed to be fairly confused about the shifts.

I mean the man is confused at the end.
What happened after he left the restaurant is up to the readers imagination....

I dont like giving ratings for writing or art, its degrading. But since your insisting we give one ill give 7.5.

First story,7.5 good enough for me.
What if I told you I was 11,hmmm?

Are you really 11?

Yup.
I read too much though,if that answers a question.