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Haunting memories
As I walked through the town,I wondered what life would be like after i did.....this.What would happen to everyone I knew?As I neared the cliff,something made me stop,and I flashed back......
Everything was kind of blurry,but i could hear fairly well.I saw everyone running.and looking around,saw my son,standing,pointingat the huge wave hurtling towards the shore.I ran,oh how I ran,but I knew it was hopeless.
"Paul get out of the way"!I cried but to no avail.
My words were whipped away.As I ran,something hit me in the back.It was a man."You crazy"? he asked"You'll get yourself killed"The man was too strong.I just slumped down on the sand,a quivering heap.
Then,as suddenly as the first time,I came back to see a man standing in front of me.The man."Your really sad about this,arent you"?he said."Guess"I growled back,bitterly."No need to be like that"he said
"Now I give you a chance"There was another jolt and I was back to ten minutes before the wave,as I saw on my watch.
"Use them"a voice said.
So following suit,I said to my wife I was hungry and we went to a restaurant.
I felt another jolt and found myself floating over my body,then was back to the cliff.
I was shocked to see no town there.
"W,w,w,what"?I said
"This is what happens when you change the past"he supplied
But I did'nt hear him,because I was hurtling down the side of the cliff.
Snake10
As I walked through the town,I wondered what life would be like after i did.....this.What would happen to everyone I knew?As I neared the cliff,something made me stop,and I flashed back......
Everything was kind of blurry,but i could hear fairly well.I saw everyone running.and looking around,saw my son,standing,pointingat the huge wave hurtling towards the shore.I ran,oh how I ran,but I knew it was hopeless.
"Paul get out of the way"!I cried but to no avail.
My words were whipped away.As I ran,something hit me in the back.It was a man."You crazy"? he asked"You'll get yourself killed"The man was too strong.I just slumped down on the sand,a quivering heap.
Then,as suddenly as the first time,I came back to see a man standing in front of me.The man."Your really sad about this,arent you"?he said."Guess"I growled back,bitterly."No need to be like that"he said
"Now I give you a chance"There was another jolt and I was back to ten minutes before the wave,as I saw on my watch.
"Use them"a voice said.
So following suit,I said to my wife I was hungry and we went to a restaurant.
I felt another jolt and found myself floating over my body,then was back to the cliff.
I was shocked to see no town there.
"W,w,w,what"?I said
"This is what happens when you change the past"he supplied
But I did'nt hear him,because I was hurtling down the side of the cliff.
Snake10
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Nah.
I came here a year ago and I won't bother to.
Snake10 is who I am,see?:)
And what do you mean bumping the thread?
I came here a year ago and I won't bother to.
Snake10 is who I am,see?:)
And what do you mean bumping the thread?
I'd change your name to Snake11.
And stop bumping the thread and gaymo.
And stop bumping the thread and gaymo.
One more....please.
C®ø§$ Bób wrote:
> Yeah but good story. But a bit confusing.
Exactly.supposed to confuse the reader.
What age did you think I was?
> Yeah but good story. But a bit confusing.
Exactly.supposed to confuse the reader.
What age did you think I was?
Yeah but good story. But a bit confusing.
Yup.
I read too much though,if that answers a question.
I read too much though,if that answers a question.
Are you really 11?
First story,7.5 good enough for me.
What if I told you I was 11,hmmm?
What if I told you I was 11,hmmm?
I dont like giving ratings for writing or art, its degrading. But since your insisting we give one ill give 7.5.
Black Glove wrote:
> It was a bit confusing - with the shifts in time, which just seemed to
> happen for no apparent reason.
Well,I sort of did that on purpose,the first one wasn't a shift in time,but that second was,and your supposed to be fairly confused about the shifts.
I mean the man is confused at the end.
What happened after he left the restaurant is up to the readers imagination....
> It was a bit confusing - with the shifts in time, which just seemed to
> happen for no apparent reason.
Well,I sort of did that on purpose,the first one wasn't a shift in time,but that second was,and your supposed to be fairly confused about the shifts.
I mean the man is confused at the end.
What happened after he left the restaurant is up to the readers imagination....
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