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Where do they go after they have flown away?
Into the sky but where after that?
No one ever knows where.
Where do they go after they walk away?
Where do we go after we die?
Look sideways to a lock on the front door.
Lost in a blue background surrounded by a ghost.
If the whirl flys then everything goes by its words.
You look back you go down. Drowning under the water.
Grab my wrist pull you back up but you slip from my wrist.
Drown in the emotion go down to the bottom.
But after that where do you go?
How will we know?
Into the sky but where after that?
No one ever knows where.
Where do they go after they walk away?
Where do we go after we die?
Look sideways to a lock on the front door.
Lost in a blue background surrounded by a ghost.
If the whirl flys then everything goes by its words.
You look back you go down. Drowning under the water.
Grab my wrist pull you back up but you slip from my wrist.
Drown in the emotion go down to the bottom.
But after that where do you go?
How will we know?
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Well might try another poem like this the other one I tried ahhh that was bad.
I didn't understand that but good.
Sounds like a "non-religious" primary school song.
what are you people on? This is godawful.
I don't know just want to see the feedback!
But if you admit that your other stuff is crap, then why the hell do you post it?
Thanks this is something that actually went well.
S'alright. Some nice imagery, but a little Emo. (Someone already said that.)
Thanks im going to do another one now.
Nice.
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