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Quite a short story but so what writing a new one in a minute.
Well it was when she said "Goodbye" I had to cry that day. As she step into her car and drove away I stood there tears running down my face. I then said "Bye forever" after she had already drove half way down the road. He just stood there looking down at the floor he then turned and walked into his house slamming the door behind him he then threw his self down on the hard sofa. He sat there still staring at the floor the phone he jumped up hoping it was her. "HELLO AND YOU'VE JUST WON A HOLIDAY TO HAWAIIA". No it wasn't her he ran to his room layer on his bed and stared at the ceiling he didn't move his eyes away from it.
Visions ran through his mind of her ,her great smile, her lovely face, the things they had done together, their first kiss. But now she had gone and he didn't know what to do. He feel a sleep and didn't want to wake up ever again. Three days later and the phone rang again he hoped it was her this time. "Hello I would just to inform you, you and your family can have a million pound or a trip to America just press six and you can find out how.
He slammed the phone down once again and ran out the front door he went and got in his car. Starting up the engine he sped down the road. He had to get to her house the road was wet and his car kept slipping left and right then it flipped glass smashing everywhere.
Ted woke an hour later on the road he was in lots of pain he could hear sirens but couldn't see the light. He was cold and could feel he was in mud. He then heard voices "There’s no one here come on lets go". Ted tired to shout but no. They didn't hear him he tired to get up but he couldn't he was stuck he heard the ambulance drive away they had gone like she had gone and soon he was going to be gone.
Well it was when she said "Goodbye" I had to cry that day. As she step into her car and drove away I stood there tears running down my face. I then said "Bye forever" after she had already drove half way down the road. He just stood there looking down at the floor he then turned and walked into his house slamming the door behind him he then threw his self down on the hard sofa. He sat there still staring at the floor the phone he jumped up hoping it was her. "HELLO AND YOU'VE JUST WON A HOLIDAY TO HAWAIIA". No it wasn't her he ran to his room layer on his bed and stared at the ceiling he didn't move his eyes away from it.
Visions ran through his mind of her ,her great smile, her lovely face, the things they had done together, their first kiss. But now she had gone and he didn't know what to do. He feel a sleep and didn't want to wake up ever again. Three days later and the phone rang again he hoped it was her this time. "Hello I would just to inform you, you and your family can have a million pound or a trip to America just press six and you can find out how.
He slammed the phone down once again and ran out the front door he went and got in his car. Starting up the engine he sped down the road. He had to get to her house the road was wet and his car kept slipping left and right then it flipped glass smashing everywhere.
Ted woke an hour later on the road he was in lots of pain he could hear sirens but couldn't see the light. He was cold and could feel he was in mud. He then heard voices "There’s no one here come on lets go". Ted tired to shout but no. They didn't hear him he tired to get up but he couldn't he was stuck he heard the ambulance drive away they had gone like she had gone and soon he was going to be gone.
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Quite a short story but so what writing a new one in a minute.
Well it was when she said "Goodbye" I had to cry that day. As she step into her car and drove away I stood there tears running down my face. I then said "Bye forever" after she had already drove half way down the road. He just stood there looking down at the floor he then turned and walked into his house slamming the door behind him he then threw his self down on the hard sofa. He sat there still staring at the floor the phone he jumped up hoping it was her. "HELLO AND YOU'VE JUST WON A HOLIDAY TO HAWAIIA". No it wasn't her he ran to his room layer on his bed and stared at the ceiling he didn't move his eyes away from it.
Visions ran through his mind of her ,her great smile, her lovely face, the things they had done together, their first kiss. But now she had gone and he didn't know what to do. He feel a sleep and didn't want to wake up ever again. Three days later and the phone rang again he hoped it was her this time. "Hello I would just to inform you, you and your family can have a million pound or a trip to America just press six and you can find out how.
He slammed the phone down once again and ran out the front door he went and got in his car. Starting up the engine he sped down the road. He had to get to her house the road was wet and his car kept slipping left and right then it flipped glass smashing everywhere.
Ted woke an hour later on the road he was in lots of pain he could hear sirens but couldn't see the light. He was cold and could feel he was in mud. He then heard voices "There’s no one here come on lets go". Ted tired to shout but no. They didn't hear him he tired to get up but he couldn't he was stuck he heard the ambulance drive away they had gone like she had gone and soon he was going to be gone.
Well it was when she said "Goodbye" I had to cry that day. As she step into her car and drove away I stood there tears running down my face. I then said "Bye forever" after she had already drove half way down the road. He just stood there looking down at the floor he then turned and walked into his house slamming the door behind him he then threw his self down on the hard sofa. He sat there still staring at the floor the phone he jumped up hoping it was her. "HELLO AND YOU'VE JUST WON A HOLIDAY TO HAWAIIA". No it wasn't her he ran to his room layer on his bed and stared at the ceiling he didn't move his eyes away from it.
Visions ran through his mind of her ,her great smile, her lovely face, the things they had done together, their first kiss. But now she had gone and he didn't know what to do. He feel a sleep and didn't want to wake up ever again. Three days later and the phone rang again he hoped it was her this time. "Hello I would just to inform you, you and your family can have a million pound or a trip to America just press six and you can find out how.
He slammed the phone down once again and ran out the front door he went and got in his car. Starting up the engine he sped down the road. He had to get to her house the road was wet and his car kept slipping left and right then it flipped glass smashing everywhere.
Ted woke an hour later on the road he was in lots of pain he could hear sirens but couldn't see the light. He was cold and could feel he was in mud. He then heard voices "There’s no one here come on lets go". Ted tired to shout but no. They didn't hear him he tired to get up but he couldn't he was stuck he heard the ambulance drive away they had gone like she had gone and soon he was going to be gone.
Why does it change from first person to third person for no apparent reason?
Just a tiny bit of him talking then it changes.
Uh Huh. Because the emergency services just give flipped cars a cursory look over before deciding to head off home for the night.....
I was quite surprised that the double glasing firm didn't ring up aswell =)
Pandaemonium wrote:
> Uh Huh. Because the emergency services just give flipped cars a
> cursory look over before deciding to head off home for the night.....
He's woke a hour later they've been looking for a hour!
> Uh Huh. Because the emergency services just give flipped cars a
> cursory look over before deciding to head off home for the night.....
He's woke a hour later they've been looking for a hour!
Pandaemonium wrote:
> Uh Huh. Because the emergency services just give flipped cars a
> cursory look over before deciding to head off home for the night.....
Well, I can only speak for myself, but, my sleep is very important.
> Uh Huh. Because the emergency services just give flipped cars a
> cursory look over before deciding to head off home for the night.....
Well, I can only speak for myself, but, my sleep is very important.
JFH wrote:
> Why does it change from first person to third person for no apparent
> reason?
AHAHAHAH! I missed you when I disappeared from here, JFH.
> Why does it change from first person to third person for no apparent
> reason?
AHAHAHAH! I missed you when I disappeared from here, JFH.
What about ME? :'{
Get on msn, too.
Get on msn, too.
Padraic wrote:
> What about ME? :'{
I'm sure he loves you really.
> What about ME? :'{
I'm sure he loves you really.
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