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“Ha why did I ever write to be continued” Said Sam as he screwed up to piece of paper with the title Searching the Antarctic on it. Sam had been writing a story about some man in the Antarctic and now he couldn’t be bothered to do it anymore. It wasn’t going to get far and no was going to like it. It was just going to be a load of rubbish at the end so he just stopped.
He heard a knock at the door and ran downstairs thumping as he went. He flung open the door stood there was a little man. “Ermmm Hello and how may I help you” asked Sam politely. “Well Hello I am Edgar and I am here to take you on a magical journey” said the Man in a loud voice. “Oh ok then” answered Sam not really knowing what to say.
“Is that all you can say Sam?” “How the hell do you know my name?” asked Sam. “I’ve been watching you Sam over the months and I think you are a very fascinating boy”. “Me fascinating ha don’t make me laughed” cried Sam. Sam went to close the front door but the little Man put his foot in the way.
“Please Sam don’t close this door the world depends on you” “The world depends on me what the hell are you talking about?” asked Sam very confused. “I must tell you Sam Your Magical”. “Magical no I’m not stop it you stupid Man”.
“Ok I will show you then Sam that you are Magical”. So the little Man took Sam outside and told Sam to think really hard and pick up a stone with his “Magical Powers. Sam thought this was really stupid but he did it he picked up a stone with his mind and fainted. The little Man went and picked up Sam and threw him into the back of his ford fiesta.
One hour later Sam woke with an aching head he put his hand at the back of his head rubbing it. He then felt something wet on his hand he looked at his hand blood was on it, it must have happened when he fainted. He must have cut his head then the pain was throbbing and it hurt him really bad.
“Where the hell are you taking me Edgar?” Sam Questioned. “I told you Sam on a magical Journey”. Sam madly tried to open the car door but no he was locked in. “Unlocked this door now or I will smash the window”. Edgar unlocked the door Sam was little bit puzzled so Sam hit open the door coz it was frozen stuck. He was about to jump when he felt his self freezing over. He quickly slammed the door and told Edgar to lock it.
It was snowing heavily outside Edgar stopped the car and throw a coat and lots of clothing to Sam in the back. Sam put all it on then they got out the car Sam zipped up his coat and put his hood up. Blood was still dripping from his head he pulled his hood back for a minute and blood dripped into the icy snow.
“Is your head ok Sam” asked Edgar he ran to the car and got stitches. As Sam had his throbbing head stitched up tears ran down his face as the pain hurt so much. Edgar put his hand on Sam’s shoulder. “Its going to be ok Sam” “But my family they don’t know where I have gone what’s going to happen when they get home and I’m not there”. “I promise everything will be ok Sam now lets go ok and please stop crying”
To be Continued….
He heard a knock at the door and ran downstairs thumping as he went. He flung open the door stood there was a little man. “Ermmm Hello and how may I help you” asked Sam politely. “Well Hello I am Edgar and I am here to take you on a magical journey” said the Man in a loud voice. “Oh ok then” answered Sam not really knowing what to say.
“Is that all you can say Sam?” “How the hell do you know my name?” asked Sam. “I’ve been watching you Sam over the months and I think you are a very fascinating boy”. “Me fascinating ha don’t make me laughed” cried Sam. Sam went to close the front door but the little Man put his foot in the way.
“Please Sam don’t close this door the world depends on you” “The world depends on me what the hell are you talking about?” asked Sam very confused. “I must tell you Sam Your Magical”. “Magical no I’m not stop it you stupid Man”.
“Ok I will show you then Sam that you are Magical”. So the little Man took Sam outside and told Sam to think really hard and pick up a stone with his “Magical Powers. Sam thought this was really stupid but he did it he picked up a stone with his mind and fainted. The little Man went and picked up Sam and threw him into the back of his ford fiesta.
One hour later Sam woke with an aching head he put his hand at the back of his head rubbing it. He then felt something wet on his hand he looked at his hand blood was on it, it must have happened when he fainted. He must have cut his head then the pain was throbbing and it hurt him really bad.
“Where the hell are you taking me Edgar?” Sam Questioned. “I told you Sam on a magical Journey”. Sam madly tried to open the car door but no he was locked in. “Unlocked this door now or I will smash the window”. Edgar unlocked the door Sam was little bit puzzled so Sam hit open the door coz it was frozen stuck. He was about to jump when he felt his self freezing over. He quickly slammed the door and told Edgar to lock it.
It was snowing heavily outside Edgar stopped the car and throw a coat and lots of clothing to Sam in the back. Sam put all it on then they got out the car Sam zipped up his coat and put his hood up. Blood was still dripping from his head he pulled his hood back for a minute and blood dripped into the icy snow.
“Is your head ok Sam” asked Edgar he ran to the car and got stitches. As Sam had his throbbing head stitched up tears ran down his face as the pain hurt so much. Edgar put his hand on Sam’s shoulder. “Its going to be ok Sam” “But my family they don’t know where I have gone what’s going to happen when they get home and I’m not there”. “I promise everything will be ok Sam now lets go ok and please stop crying”
To be Continued….
Yeah ok I will.
Bob, to be honest starting a fresh would suit you better.
The same format becomes cramped and tired and they're simply not interesting enough to read a fourth part in.
Sorry, but, as SSC32 has ended you can get a new subject matter and put a different slant on it. Planning would be a good idea as well.
The same format becomes cramped and tired and they're simply not interesting enough to read a fourth part in.
Sorry, but, as SSC32 has ended you can get a new subject matter and put a different slant on it. Planning would be a good idea as well.
Yes taking longer means nothing, you can still rush it.
Im going to take longer on part three.
Only read the first 3 paragraphs then I sensed that it was turning into something rushed.
Still your best work though.
Still your best work though.
“Ha why did I ever write to be continued” Said Sam as he screwed up to piece of paper with the title Searching the Antarctic on it. Sam had been writing a story about some man in the Antarctic and now he couldn’t be bothered to do it anymore. It wasn’t going to get far and no was going to like it. It was just going to be a load of rubbish at the end so he just stopped.
He heard a knock at the door and ran downstairs thumping as he went. He flung open the door stood there was a little man. “Ermmm Hello and how may I help you” asked Sam politely. “Well Hello I am Edgar and I am here to take you on a magical journey” said the Man in a loud voice. “Oh ok then” answered Sam not really knowing what to say.
“Is that all you can say Sam?” “How the hell do you know my name?” asked Sam. “I’ve been watching you Sam over the months and I think you are a very fascinating boy”. “Me fascinating ha don’t make me laughed” cried Sam. Sam went to close the front door but the little Man put his foot in the way.
“Please Sam don’t close this door the world depends on you” “The world depends on me what the hell are you talking about?” asked Sam very confused. “I must tell you Sam Your Magical”. “Magical no I’m not stop it you stupid Man”.
“Ok I will show you then Sam that you are Magical”. So the little Man took Sam outside and told Sam to think really hard and pick up a stone with his “Magical Powers. Sam thought this was really stupid but he did it he picked up a stone with his mind and fainted. The little Man went and picked up Sam and threw him into the back of his ford fiesta.
One hour later Sam woke with an aching head he put his hand at the back of his head rubbing it. He then felt something wet on his hand he looked at his hand blood was on it, it must have happened when he fainted. He must have cut his head then the pain was throbbing and it hurt him really bad.
“Where the hell are you taking me Edgar?” Sam Questioned. “I told you Sam on a magical Journey”. Sam madly tried to open the car door but no he was locked in. “Unlocked this door now or I will smash the window”. Edgar unlocked the door Sam was little bit puzzled so Sam hit open the door coz it was frozen stuck. He was about to jump when he felt his self freezing over. He quickly slammed the door and told Edgar to lock it.
It was snowing heavily outside Edgar stopped the car and throw a coat and lots of clothing to Sam in the back. Sam put all it on then they got out the car Sam zipped up his coat and put his hood up. Blood was still dripping from his head he pulled his hood back for a minute and blood dripped into the icy snow.
“Is your head ok Sam” asked Edgar he ran to the car and got stitches. As Sam had his throbbing head stitched up tears ran down his face as the pain hurt so much. Edgar put his hand on Sam’s shoulder. “Its going to be ok Sam” “But my family they don’t know where I have gone what’s going to happen when they get home and I’m not there”. “I promise everything will be ok Sam now lets go ok and please stop crying”
To be Continued….
He heard a knock at the door and ran downstairs thumping as he went. He flung open the door stood there was a little man. “Ermmm Hello and how may I help you” asked Sam politely. “Well Hello I am Edgar and I am here to take you on a magical journey” said the Man in a loud voice. “Oh ok then” answered Sam not really knowing what to say.
“Is that all you can say Sam?” “How the hell do you know my name?” asked Sam. “I’ve been watching you Sam over the months and I think you are a very fascinating boy”. “Me fascinating ha don’t make me laughed” cried Sam. Sam went to close the front door but the little Man put his foot in the way.
“Please Sam don’t close this door the world depends on you” “The world depends on me what the hell are you talking about?” asked Sam very confused. “I must tell you Sam Your Magical”. “Magical no I’m not stop it you stupid Man”.
“Ok I will show you then Sam that you are Magical”. So the little Man took Sam outside and told Sam to think really hard and pick up a stone with his “Magical Powers. Sam thought this was really stupid but he did it he picked up a stone with his mind and fainted. The little Man went and picked up Sam and threw him into the back of his ford fiesta.
One hour later Sam woke with an aching head he put his hand at the back of his head rubbing it. He then felt something wet on his hand he looked at his hand blood was on it, it must have happened when he fainted. He must have cut his head then the pain was throbbing and it hurt him really bad.
“Where the hell are you taking me Edgar?” Sam Questioned. “I told you Sam on a magical Journey”. Sam madly tried to open the car door but no he was locked in. “Unlocked this door now or I will smash the window”. Edgar unlocked the door Sam was little bit puzzled so Sam hit open the door coz it was frozen stuck. He was about to jump when he felt his self freezing over. He quickly slammed the door and told Edgar to lock it.
It was snowing heavily outside Edgar stopped the car and throw a coat and lots of clothing to Sam in the back. Sam put all it on then they got out the car Sam zipped up his coat and put his hood up. Blood was still dripping from his head he pulled his hood back for a minute and blood dripped into the icy snow.
“Is your head ok Sam” asked Edgar he ran to the car and got stitches. As Sam had his throbbing head stitched up tears ran down his face as the pain hurt so much. Edgar put his hand on Sam’s shoulder. “Its going to be ok Sam” “But my family they don’t know where I have gone what’s going to happen when they get home and I’m not there”. “I promise everything will be ok Sam now lets go ok and please stop crying”
To be Continued….