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Gazing into the amber of my fire I eventually see you, clothed in rags, stumbling along a narrow, flambeau-lit passage. I focus in on your tortured brow and peer deep into your muddled eyes … I see fragments, vague visions of what has transpired since you left Tulipsa’s phantom shores. I see misty details of your missing days.
There was an albino beast, and a young female clad in fur. Nmin – (was that her name?) Over time dark designs grew in your mind: festering, polluting, poisonous ideas. I see you tethering the white creature to a pillar. I see you kicking it. It yelps, squeals. You abandoned it. Then, near the tickling waters of a fountain, I see the loom of your crooked silhouette rapt in salacious intent, bent on assaulting the Amazonian girl. She resists. She is stronger than you expect. You fought her. She had strange powers. Varicolor’d light mantled her body as she called exotic names. But you conquer’d, loved her in selfish lust, then slay’d her broken shell with your corkscrew spear, and you roasted her copse using that spear as if on a spit, and you feasted upon her tender flesh. You were famished, and the quarry was ripe.
In the sparks of my magical blaze I see an old dusty book: The Wishwill of Zaladin the Bloodfree. You found it in a concealed vault behind a black wall adorn’d with golden crescents and a cyclopean eye. Twas pen’d by the hand of a madman, a freak. It told of countless darkling delights: torture, cannibalism, erotic murder. How you loved that book. You read it over and over. You absorb’d its muscular style in a state of blithe euphoria. It spoke to you. You adored it. The cinnabar tome became your guide in the shadows of U-grilla’s treacherous web: an imaginary friend, your only friend, your last friend.
Yet two adventurers came your way, bedeck’d in lavish raiment: they were cordial, noble, their faces tattoo’d with Mehndi patterns: they travel’d beside you. One of them saved your life when a boggard sprung from a hidden fissure. But Parsalane, you betrayed them. You lured them into a devious trap. You maim’d them with your helical spear. You tortured them with various Zaladinian devices. And when they could fight your sadism no more, you consumed their flesh like a ravenous wolf. Raw.
And I see a large wooden door, circular and heavy. It opens, introducing a deep pit. I see you descending into a frosty murk. A veil attempts to blindfold my seeing, but the vision of a hooded foe comes through: a form with guile and skill superior to yours. In the frantic melee the acrobatic stranger severs your hands with a fanning blade and spews venom into your eyes. (O the howls of pain!) It leaves you for dead, taking with it your precious spear. But you survived Parsalane, you lived.
And so to now, and there you are, struggling along that narrow tunnel: no fingers to feel your way: your eyes seeing void . . . Parsalane de Prey, the man with the unmistakable name, hopelessly lost in U-grilla’s maze, clothed in the doom rags of a damn’d fate. The shadows are closing in. Nightmare creatures lurk ahead, coil’d, hungry, primed for the pounce. As I see your tragic form in the amber flames, I know you end is near.
Prey.
> Ineedsleep wrote:
> Wonderously dark yet flows like liquid gold - as always :)
>
> I could retire on that comment.
Please don't.
Wonderfully disturbing as always.
It was written so well that I could picture every scene in my mind, despite the innovative ideas of the piece, and despite the fact you told a story based over many years in the space of a few paragraphs. Hard-hitting, but I think it needed to be.
Tres bien.
> Wonderously dark yet flows like liquid gold - as always :)
I could retire on that comment.
Gazing into the amber of my fire I eventually see you, clothed in rags, stumbling along a narrow, flambeau-lit passage. I focus in on your tortured brow and peer deep into your muddled eyes … I see fragments, vague visions of what has transpired since you left Tulipsa’s phantom shores. I see misty details of your missing days.
There was an albino beast, and a young female clad in fur. Nmin – (was that her name?) Over time dark designs grew in your mind: festering, polluting, poisonous ideas. I see you tethering the white creature to a pillar. I see you kicking it. It yelps, squeals. You abandoned it. Then, near the tickling waters of a fountain, I see the loom of your crooked silhouette rapt in salacious intent, bent on assaulting the Amazonian girl. She resists. She is stronger than you expect. You fought her. She had strange powers. Varicolor’d light mantled her body as she called exotic names. But you conquer’d, loved her in selfish lust, then slay’d her broken shell with your corkscrew spear, and you roasted her copse using that spear as if on a spit, and you feasted upon her tender flesh. You were famished, and the quarry was ripe.
In the sparks of my magical blaze I see an old dusty book: The Wishwill of Zaladin the Bloodfree. You found it in a concealed vault behind a black wall adorn’d with golden crescents and a cyclopean eye. Twas pen’d by the hand of a madman, a freak. It told of countless darkling delights: torture, cannibalism, erotic murder. How you loved that book. You read it over and over. You absorb’d its muscular style in a state of blithe euphoria. It spoke to you. You adored it. The cinnabar tome became your guide in the shadows of U-grilla’s treacherous web: an imaginary friend, your only friend, your last friend.
Yet two adventurers came your way, bedeck’d in lavish raiment: they were cordial, noble, their faces tattoo’d with Mehndi patterns: they travel’d beside you. One of them saved your life when a boggard sprung from a hidden fissure. But Parsalane, you betrayed them. You lured them into a devious trap. You maim’d them with your helical spear. You tortured them with various Zaladinian devices. And when they could fight your sadism no more, you consumed their flesh like a ravenous wolf. Raw.
And I see a large wooden door, circular and heavy. It opens, introducing a deep pit. I see you descending into a frosty murk. A veil attempts to blindfold my seeing, but the vision of a hooded foe comes through: a form with guile and skill superior to yours. In the frantic melee the acrobatic stranger severs your hands with a fanning blade and spews venom into your eyes. (O the howls of pain!) It leaves you for dead, taking with it your precious spear. But you survived Parsalane, you lived.
And so to now, and there you are, struggling along that narrow tunnel: no fingers to feel your way: your eyes seeing void . . . Parsalane de Prey, the man with the unmistakable name, hopelessly lost in U-grilla’s maze, clothed in the doom rags of a damn’d fate. The shadows are closing in. Nightmare creatures lurk ahead, coil’d, hungry, primed for the pounce. As I see your tragic form in the amber flames, I know you end is near.
Prey.