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I used to be a normal guy. In a normal town. With normal friends. But that all soon changed.
"What is your name?" I looked into the face you the proposer of the question. "M-M-M-My name is M-M-Marink." I stuttered. I wasn't talking to just anybody. Oh no- this wasn't just anybody- I was talking to... a cat! That's right, you heard correctly. A cat! I couldn't believe my ears. Nor my eyes when I noticed it sit down in the seat in front of me. "M-M-Marink? Oh, what a strange name name. Do you like it?" I stared at him strangely. Of course I like my own name! "Yeah, I think it's cool!" I remarked.
I stared out the window of the steady train, trying to forget the fact that Rover was a cat. Yep, Rover is supposedly his name. A strange name for a cat I might add. "Where are you going?" he wondered. Many people fear the name of the town I was headed to. It is called Doom Town. Yes- DOOM Town. Well, actually it isn't. In reality, it's real name is non-existant. That's right, it has no name. I didn't believe it at first either, but it's true. People just call it Doom Town to keep hawkers away. Doom for short. Anyway, I guess I'd better reply. Who knows what a talking animal that walks on two legs would do to a man. "I'm going to Doom."
BEG YOUR PARDON?" Rover was shocked. "You see, it's short for Doom Town..." I explained. "Oooooooh, gosh, I forgot. I know a friend over there. Why are you going there?" he Ooooooohed, stated and asked. "Well," I looked down slightly, "I have a friend over there too. Actually, he's a friend of a friend. He's also a friend of a friend of a friend. I don't want to get into too much detail though. Let's just say he's a friend. I haven't got a house over there yet, though." Rover's eyes lit up. "I know just the guy!"
"Welcome to Doom..."
"AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!" I screamed. It wasn't that fact that he said "Welcome to Doom...". The reason I screamed was because I was greeted by... A MONKEY?!?!?!?!! There was also a racoon waiting for me. "There are three available houses for you to choose between. You can have any one of them." The thing that comforted me was that I saw my friend's friend's... you know who standing in front of the remaining taken house. He waved at me, and I waved back. I ran up to him "How can you stand these freaks? They're..." "Animals? Don't worry, you'll get used to them." I smiled nervously.
"Welcome to Doom..."
"AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!" screamed a hawker, before diving face first back into the train. My friend laughs, "Works all the time!" I stared back at him worryingly, "You've changed." He looked back at me and laughed some more, "That'll teach those hawkers with their not-so-fair trade, second-rate merchandise. I mean, who would want a Luigi trophy?" I suppose I did see the funny side of it, though. I laughed along with him.
Once I chose a house and introduced myself to the other townsfolk who- yep, you guessed it- were animals, I knew my life would never be the same again.
"What is your name?" I looked into the face you the proposer of the question. "M-M-M-My name is M-M-Marink." I stuttered. I wasn't talking to just anybody. Oh no- this wasn't just anybody- I was talking to... a cat! That's right, you heard correctly. A cat! I couldn't believe my ears. Nor my eyes when I noticed it sit down in the seat in front of me. "M-M-Marink? Oh, what a strange name name. Do you like it?" I stared at him strangely. Of course I like my own name! "Yeah, I think it's cool!" I remarked.
I stared out the window of the steady train, trying to forget the fact that Rover was a cat. Yep, Rover is supposedly his name. A strange name for a cat I might add. "Where are you going?" he wondered. Many people fear the name of the town I was headed to. It is called Doom Town. Yes- DOOM Town. Well, actually it isn't. In reality, it's real name is non-existant. That's right, it has no name. I didn't believe it at first either, but it's true. People just call it Doom Town to keep hawkers away. Doom for short. Anyway, I guess I'd better reply. Who knows what a talking animal that walks on two legs would do to a man. "I'm going to Doom."
BEG YOUR PARDON?" Rover was shocked. "You see, it's short for Doom Town..." I explained. "Oooooooh, gosh, I forgot. I know a friend over there. Why are you going there?" he Ooooooohed, stated and asked. "Well," I looked down slightly, "I have a friend over there too. Actually, he's a friend of a friend. He's also a friend of a friend of a friend. I don't want to get into too much detail though. Let's just say he's a friend. I haven't got a house over there yet, though." Rover's eyes lit up. "I know just the guy!"
"Welcome to Doom..."
"AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!" I screamed. It wasn't that fact that he said "Welcome to Doom...". The reason I screamed was because I was greeted by... A MONKEY?!?!?!?!! There was also a racoon waiting for me. "There are three available houses for you to choose between. You can have any one of them." The thing that comforted me was that I saw my friend's friend's... you know who standing in front of the remaining taken house. He waved at me, and I waved back. I ran up to him "How can you stand these freaks? They're..." "Animals? Don't worry, you'll get used to them." I smiled nervously.
"Welcome to Doom..."
"AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!" screamed a hawker, before diving face first back into the train. My friend laughs, "Works all the time!" I stared back at him worryingly, "You've changed." He looked back at me and laughed some more, "That'll teach those hawkers with their not-so-fair trade, second-rate merchandise. I mean, who would want a Luigi trophy?" I suppose I did see the funny side of it, though. I laughed along with him.
Once I chose a house and introduced myself to the other townsfolk who- yep, you guessed it- were animals, I knew my life would never be the same again.
Haha, I liked that. :)
A few errors here and there though, and the dialogue was awfully wooden. But maybe that was the point...
A few errors here and there though, and the dialogue was awfully wooden. But maybe that was the point...
Mine's better.
Meka Dragon wrote:
> Ha, this made me chuckle. About half way through the conversation with
> Rover I picked up the Animal Crossing connection. Cleverly done.
Thanks. Thanks to all of you :).
> Ha, this made me chuckle. About half way through the conversation with
> Rover I picked up the Animal Crossing connection. Cleverly done.
Thanks. Thanks to all of you :).
Ha, this made me chuckle. About half way through the conversation with Rover I picked up the Animal Crossing connection. Cleverly done.
for a minute there i thought u had copied the redemption of althalus.its a book and if uv red it ull know
That was quite good.
I used to be a normal guy. In a normal town. With normal friends. But that all soon changed.
"What is your name?" I looked into the face you the proposer of the question. "M-M-M-My name is M-M-Marink." I stuttered. I wasn't talking to just anybody. Oh no- this wasn't just anybody- I was talking to... a cat! That's right, you heard correctly. A cat! I couldn't believe my ears. Nor my eyes when I noticed it sit down in the seat in front of me. "M-M-Marink? Oh, what a strange name name. Do you like it?" I stared at him strangely. Of course I like my own name! "Yeah, I think it's cool!" I remarked.
I stared out the window of the steady train, trying to forget the fact that Rover was a cat. Yep, Rover is supposedly his name. A strange name for a cat I might add. "Where are you going?" he wondered. Many people fear the name of the town I was headed to. It is called Doom Town. Yes- DOOM Town. Well, actually it isn't. In reality, it's real name is non-existant. That's right, it has no name. I didn't believe it at first either, but it's true. People just call it Doom Town to keep hawkers away. Doom for short. Anyway, I guess I'd better reply. Who knows what a talking animal that walks on two legs would do to a man. "I'm going to Doom."
BEG YOUR PARDON?" Rover was shocked. "You see, it's short for Doom Town..." I explained. "Oooooooh, gosh, I forgot. I know a friend over there. Why are you going there?" he Ooooooohed, stated and asked. "Well," I looked down slightly, "I have a friend over there too. Actually, he's a friend of a friend. He's also a friend of a friend of a friend. I don't want to get into too much detail though. Let's just say he's a friend. I haven't got a house over there yet, though." Rover's eyes lit up. "I know just the guy!"
"Welcome to Doom..."
"AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!" I screamed. It wasn't that fact that he said "Welcome to Doom...". The reason I screamed was because I was greeted by... A MONKEY?!?!?!?!! There was also a racoon waiting for me. "There are three available houses for you to choose between. You can have any one of them." The thing that comforted me was that I saw my friend's friend's... you know who standing in front of the remaining taken house. He waved at me, and I waved back. I ran up to him "How can you stand these freaks? They're..." "Animals? Don't worry, you'll get used to them." I smiled nervously.
"Welcome to Doom..."
"AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!" screamed a hawker, before diving face first back into the train. My friend laughs, "Works all the time!" I stared back at him worryingly, "You've changed." He looked back at me and laughed some more, "That'll teach those hawkers with their not-so-fair trade, second-rate merchandise. I mean, who would want a Luigi trophy?" I suppose I did see the funny side of it, though. I laughed along with him.
Once I chose a house and introduced myself to the other townsfolk who- yep, you guessed it- were animals, I knew my life would never be the same again.
"What is your name?" I looked into the face you the proposer of the question. "M-M-M-My name is M-M-Marink." I stuttered. I wasn't talking to just anybody. Oh no- this wasn't just anybody- I was talking to... a cat! That's right, you heard correctly. A cat! I couldn't believe my ears. Nor my eyes when I noticed it sit down in the seat in front of me. "M-M-Marink? Oh, what a strange name name. Do you like it?" I stared at him strangely. Of course I like my own name! "Yeah, I think it's cool!" I remarked.
I stared out the window of the steady train, trying to forget the fact that Rover was a cat. Yep, Rover is supposedly his name. A strange name for a cat I might add. "Where are you going?" he wondered. Many people fear the name of the town I was headed to. It is called Doom Town. Yes- DOOM Town. Well, actually it isn't. In reality, it's real name is non-existant. That's right, it has no name. I didn't believe it at first either, but it's true. People just call it Doom Town to keep hawkers away. Doom for short. Anyway, I guess I'd better reply. Who knows what a talking animal that walks on two legs would do to a man. "I'm going to Doom."
BEG YOUR PARDON?" Rover was shocked. "You see, it's short for Doom Town..." I explained. "Oooooooh, gosh, I forgot. I know a friend over there. Why are you going there?" he Ooooooohed, stated and asked. "Well," I looked down slightly, "I have a friend over there too. Actually, he's a friend of a friend. He's also a friend of a friend of a friend. I don't want to get into too much detail though. Let's just say he's a friend. I haven't got a house over there yet, though." Rover's eyes lit up. "I know just the guy!"
"Welcome to Doom..."
"AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!" I screamed. It wasn't that fact that he said "Welcome to Doom...". The reason I screamed was because I was greeted by... A MONKEY?!?!?!?!! There was also a racoon waiting for me. "There are three available houses for you to choose between. You can have any one of them." The thing that comforted me was that I saw my friend's friend's... you know who standing in front of the remaining taken house. He waved at me, and I waved back. I ran up to him "How can you stand these freaks? They're..." "Animals? Don't worry, you'll get used to them." I smiled nervously.
"Welcome to Doom..."
"AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!" screamed a hawker, before diving face first back into the train. My friend laughs, "Works all the time!" I stared back at him worryingly, "You've changed." He looked back at me and laughed some more, "That'll teach those hawkers with their not-so-fair trade, second-rate merchandise. I mean, who would want a Luigi trophy?" I suppose I did see the funny side of it, though. I laughed along with him.
Once I chose a house and introduced myself to the other townsfolk who- yep, you guessed it- were animals, I knew my life would never be the same again.