The "Creative Writing" forum, which includes Retro Game Reviews, has been archived and is now read-only. You cannot post here or create a new thread or review on this forum.
The peoples were out, and about. Monty walked into the shop and found a gun in the sweets. Monty picked the gun up and took it to the counter. He shot the person at the counter. Monty jumped over the counter and hit the register. Money flooded out. Monty grabbed all the moneys and ran out of the shop. Monty put all the money in his bag and held the gun up. Monty walked toward a house. He saw the door was open and walked in.
Monty walked upstairs and saw a lot of doorways. He picked the first one on the right and walked in. He shot the gun at the window. The window smashed. Come out if you are in here Monty said. Monty knew that someone was around here, and he knew he could kill them now he had a gun!
He walked around the bed and shot at the first Monty saw. It was a bunny rabbit toy. The toy shot up when the bullet hit it and Monty punched it back towards the ground. Thats what you get for jumping up when your not spoken to Monty thought.
Monty stepped out of the room and into the next one. He still had his gun. And was ready for danger of all kinds. Monty walked around the bed and knew what he had to do. He pulled open the drawer and found nothing. He turned around and shot his gun. The bear fell to the floor. It was Grizzly.
Finally Monty walked into the last room and found darkness. The door shut behind him. Monty could now hear circus music. Monty then saw lights come on and a man taped to the wall. He had his mouth tapped and his hands tyed with rope. Dad Monty said.
Monty had to get his dad out of this palace and untied him. But his dad said not a chance and pulled out a knife. His dad stabbed Monty. Monty lay on the floor blood pouring from his pupills in his eyes.
Monty walked upstairs and saw a lot of doorways. He picked the first one on the right and walked in. He shot the gun at the window. The window smashed. Come out if you are in here Monty said. Monty knew that someone was around here, and he knew he could kill them now he had a gun!
He walked around the bed and shot at the first Monty saw. It was a bunny rabbit toy. The toy shot up when the bullet hit it and Monty punched it back towards the ground. Thats what you get for jumping up when your not spoken to Monty thought.
Monty stepped out of the room and into the next one. He still had his gun. And was ready for danger of all kinds. Monty walked around the bed and knew what he had to do. He pulled open the drawer and found nothing. He turned around and shot his gun. The bear fell to the floor. It was Grizzly.
Finally Monty walked into the last room and found darkness. The door shut behind him. Monty could now hear circus music. Monty then saw lights come on and a man taped to the wall. He had his mouth tapped and his hands tyed with rope. Dad Monty said.
Monty had to get his dad out of this palace and untied him. But his dad said not a chance and pulled out a knife. His dad stabbed Monty. Monty lay on the floor blood pouring from his pupills in his eyes.
The peoples were out, and about. Monty walked into the shop and found a gun in the sweets. Monty picked the gun up and took it to the counter. He shot the person at the counter. Monty jumped over the counter and hit the register. Money flooded out. Monty grabbed all the moneys and ran out of the shop. Monty put all the money in his bag and held the gun up. Monty walked toward a house. He saw the door was open and walked in.
Monty walked upstairs and saw a lot of doorways. He picked the first one on the right and walked in. He shot the gun at the window. The window smashed. Come out if you are in here Monty said. Monty knew that someone was around here, and he knew he could kill them now he had a gun!
He walked around the bed and shot at the first Monty saw. It was a bunny rabbit toy. The toy shot up when the bullet hit it and Monty punched it back towards the ground. Thats what you get for jumping up when your not spoken to Monty thought.
Monty stepped out of the room and into the next one. He still had his gun. And was ready for danger of all kinds. Monty walked around the bed and knew what he had to do. He pulled open the drawer and found nothing. He turned around and shot his gun. The bear fell to the floor. It was Grizzly.
Finally Monty walked into the last room and found darkness. The door shut behind him. Monty could now hear circus music. Monty then saw lights come on and a man taped to the wall. He had his mouth tapped and his hands tyed with rope. Dad Monty said.
Monty had to get his dad out of this palace and untied him. But his dad said not a chance and pulled out a knife. His dad stabbed Monty. Monty lay on the floor blood pouring from his pupills in his eyes.
Monty walked upstairs and saw a lot of doorways. He picked the first one on the right and walked in. He shot the gun at the window. The window smashed. Come out if you are in here Monty said. Monty knew that someone was around here, and he knew he could kill them now he had a gun!
He walked around the bed and shot at the first Monty saw. It was a bunny rabbit toy. The toy shot up when the bullet hit it and Monty punched it back towards the ground. Thats what you get for jumping up when your not spoken to Monty thought.
Monty stepped out of the room and into the next one. He still had his gun. And was ready for danger of all kinds. Monty walked around the bed and knew what he had to do. He pulled open the drawer and found nothing. He turned around and shot his gun. The bear fell to the floor. It was Grizzly.
Finally Monty walked into the last room and found darkness. The door shut behind him. Monty could now hear circus music. Monty then saw lights come on and a man taped to the wall. He had his mouth tapped and his hands tyed with rope. Dad Monty said.
Monty had to get his dad out of this palace and untied him. But his dad said not a chance and pulled out a knife. His dad stabbed Monty. Monty lay on the floor blood pouring from his pupills in his eyes.
What do you all think of my master piece.
Why would he find a gun in sweets?
When crossbob points out the logical flaws in your story, it's time to stop.
Good work, bob.
Good work, bob.
Thanks
Ahh my brain hurts the peoples this is so mucked up. I wasn't even this rubbish at first.