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I looked round the room there was nobody there it was empty.What could I do who could I talk to there was a table in the middle of the room the table had a typewriter on it I looked at the typewriter. A piece of paper was in the typewriter and a big pile of pages was beside it they had writing on them I read the writing it was a story a story called Crisp Packets of Death so I decided to take the story and pretend it was my own!
James walked home from school like he did every day along the pavement. He was on his way to the shop first before he went home because he was hungry and wanted a snack before his dinner but on the way some big guys stopped in front of him there were two of them and they were big. "hey kid give me your money" boomed the first big guy "yeh kid we want your dough" thundered the second big guy but then James took his gun out of his pocket that he always brought with him just in case and shot them both in the head! James ran he ran so fast he just wanted to get away there were cars chasing him what had he done he was only protecting himself. James got to the shop he was still hungry so he bought a packet of crisps and just ran out of the shop he didn't pay he just ran. The shopkeeper ran out after him just as James went out the door he screamed madly "come back kid you have to pay" and fired at James with his shotgun.Everything went in slow-mo as James saw the bullet flying towards him but it was tool ate evn with slow-mo and the world spun around them and the bullet hit him and he fell. the crisp packet blew away it was covered in the blood! it was the crisp packet of Death!
James walked home from school like he did every day along the pavement. He was on his way to the shop first before he went home because he was hungry and wanted a snack before his dinner but on the way some big guys stopped in front of him there were two of them and they were big. "hey kid give me your money" boomed the first big guy "yeh kid we want your dough" thundered the second big guy but then James took his gun out of his pocket that he always brought with him just in case and shot them both in the head! James ran he ran so fast he just wanted to get away there were cars chasing him what had he done he was only protecting himself. James got to the shop he was still hungry so he bought a packet of crisps and just ran out of the shop he didn't pay he just ran. The shopkeeper ran out after him just as James went out the door he screamed madly "come back kid you have to pay" and fired at James with his shotgun.Everything went in slow-mo as James saw the bullet flying towards him but it was tool ate evn with slow-mo and the world spun around them and the bullet hit him and he fell. the crisp packet blew away it was covered in the blood! it was the crisp packet of Death!
Aheh. Poor Mermo.
SUCH IS THE WAY OF LIFE!
But I do apologise.
SUCH IS THE WAY OF LIFE!
But I do apologise.
And I get no recognition at all :' {
I can see those tutoring sessions you gave FFF have finally got through, crossbob.
Stop taking the Pea!
Cracked me up :-D
Wow, 3 reads within 15 minutes.
It's a new record for me.
It's a new record for me.
I couldn't read that sorry. I got half way through and got bored.
Go read some of Crossbob's stuff, he really knows how to carry a tale, you could learn something from him.
Go read some of Crossbob's stuff, he really knows how to carry a tale, you could learn something from him.
One of your better pieces
The slow-mo was exquisite.
The slow-mo was exquisite.
inspirational.
I looked round the room there was nobody there it was empty.What could I do who could I talk to there was a table in the middle of the room the table had a typewriter on it I looked at the typewriter. A piece of paper was in the typewriter and a big pile of pages was beside it they had writing on them I read the writing it was a story a story called Crisp Packets of Death so I decided to take the story and pretend it was my own!
James walked home from school like he did every day along the pavement. He was on his way to the shop first before he went home because he was hungry and wanted a snack before his dinner but on the way some big guys stopped in front of him there were two of them and they were big. "hey kid give me your money" boomed the first big guy "yeh kid we want your dough" thundered the second big guy but then James took his gun out of his pocket that he always brought with him just in case and shot them both in the head! James ran he ran so fast he just wanted to get away there were cars chasing him what had he done he was only protecting himself. James got to the shop he was still hungry so he bought a packet of crisps and just ran out of the shop he didn't pay he just ran. The shopkeeper ran out after him just as James went out the door he screamed madly "come back kid you have to pay" and fired at James with his shotgun.Everything went in slow-mo as James saw the bullet flying towards him but it was tool ate evn with slow-mo and the world spun around them and the bullet hit him and he fell. the crisp packet blew away it was covered in the blood! it was the crisp packet of Death!
James walked home from school like he did every day along the pavement. He was on his way to the shop first before he went home because he was hungry and wanted a snack before his dinner but on the way some big guys stopped in front of him there were two of them and they were big. "hey kid give me your money" boomed the first big guy "yeh kid we want your dough" thundered the second big guy but then James took his gun out of his pocket that he always brought with him just in case and shot them both in the head! James ran he ran so fast he just wanted to get away there were cars chasing him what had he done he was only protecting himself. James got to the shop he was still hungry so he bought a packet of crisps and just ran out of the shop he didn't pay he just ran. The shopkeeper ran out after him just as James went out the door he screamed madly "come back kid you have to pay" and fired at James with his shotgun.Everything went in slow-mo as James saw the bullet flying towards him but it was tool ate evn with slow-mo and the world spun around them and the bullet hit him and he fell. the crisp packet blew away it was covered in the blood! it was the crisp packet of Death!