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"Be my bride."

I have written a poem.

Be my bride

A girl with ginger,
HAIR
Incredibly bony
FINGERS
(like her;
brother)

EYE. EYE from the,
girl.

Only one EYE.
Oof!


Thankyou.

you should watch yourself young man, you are already warned. Anymore of this rubbish and i will have to kill you.

gerbil woman is rubbish.
A complete layby.

you are a friendly, trustworthy person?

I thought I would try and use colloquialism in the piece to try and prove to the reader that I was a friendly, and trustworthy person.

"Oof" - line 12, for example.

Pffft, this is enjambment

When I get
hungry, my belly
rumbles, going
rarrr! i want
food! feed me
but i don't
feed it, and
it rumbles
more "i want
food" then I
give it steak
it then fells
nice and stops
rumbling about


RARR

I particularly liked your emphatic use of enjambement, gerbil man, as it really fires across your emotions to the reader.

I hope you haven't made a mess!

The Sword

The blunt sword
MADE
of pork
STABS
me from behind.

I have fallen.

Crumble, are you only a "crumble" because you can't afford any other ingredients?

Rhubarb