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Polly was a parrot. She ae creckers, and never left the comfurt of her own lunge. One day a cat named Leee kncoke on door with hammer. Polly went to door but bannana skin on carpet. Polly crawl but no one hear. Cat walkaway but polly yelp for hlp. Do people say she haven’t got no more. Polly climb on to the wheel of whell chair. Scar on left beak. She put hand on it and blood dribbles doen. She looked hary. He cmae im and started a program on tv. Tv was gooood in tem dys. Dog eye glooed on screen. Eastender nevr show omnibose to dogges. I never interested in JAG. Knight boas was on nxt. I never seen premere of tis film. Was exstatic coz I was old enough no going to bd for me at nigt.
I personally enjoyed your deft and imaginative development of the character of Polly, as well as the experienced techniques you used to create a sense of tension and an unpredictable atmosphere. Your exploration of a child's psychology was masterfully done with the final line and the running satirical view on modern society was simply brilliant.
Sadly, it was a little short and there were a few grammatical and spelling errors here and there - some paragraphing also wouldn't go amiss. But tidy it up and I'm sure it'll be a fantastic piece.
Nice work! I'll be sure to keep a firm look out for Volume 2.
Sadly, it was a little short and there were a few grammatical and spelling errors here and there - some paragraphing also wouldn't go amiss. But tidy it up and I'm sure it'll be a fantastic piece.
Nice work! I'll be sure to keep a firm look out for Volume 2.
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Polly was a parrot. She ae creckers, and never left the comfurt of her own lunge. One day a cat named Leee kncoke on door with hammer. Polly went to door but bannana skin on carpet. Polly crawl but no one hear. Cat walkaway but polly yelp for hlp. Do people say she haven’t got no more. Polly climb on to the wheel of whell chair. Scar on left beak. She put hand on it and blood dribbles doen. She looked hary. He cmae im and started a program on tv. Tv was gooood in tem dys. Dog eye glooed on screen. Eastender nevr show omnibose to dogges. I never interested in JAG. Knight boas was on nxt. I never seen premere of tis film. Was exstatic coz I was old enough no going to bd for me at nigt.