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i thougt i write story for you
it was sunny the day i driving the bus the sun it blind me when i driving the bus a cat oh no shouted i when driving the bus to slow too stop but no the cat survive it did it go under the bus i driving then i went on holidays not when i driving the bus it must be noted then i saw cat it speak i say cat you speak it said yes i cat i speak and then from nowhere come a bus but think i oh no i not driving bus how can that be then the cat died it speak no more i go home and driving the bus
it was sunny the day i driving the bus the sun it blind me when i driving the bus a cat oh no shouted i when driving the bus to slow too stop but no the cat survive it did it go under the bus i driving then i went on holidays not when i driving the bus it must be noted then i saw cat it speak i say cat you speak it said yes i cat i speak and then from nowhere come a bus but think i oh no i not driving bus how can that be then the cat died it speak no more i go home and driving the bus
the selective detailing had my on the edge of my seat throughout, and the way you throw random words in really emphasises the panic.
A good read.
A good read.
I loved the way you used imagery to create such an intense level of tension.
How old are you?5?6? Pretty good for your age.
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LMAO!! I dont know why but I found the style funny. lol.
LMAO!! I dont know why but I found the style funny. lol.
i thougt i write story for you
it was sunny the day i driving the bus the sun it blind me when i driving the bus a cat oh no shouted i when driving the bus to slow too stop but no the cat survive it did it go under the bus i driving then i went on holidays not when i driving the bus it must be noted then i saw cat it speak i say cat you speak it said yes i cat i speak and then from nowhere come a bus but think i oh no i not driving bus how can that be then the cat died it speak no more i go home and driving the bus
it was sunny the day i driving the bus the sun it blind me when i driving the bus a cat oh no shouted i when driving the bus to slow too stop but no the cat survive it did it go under the bus i driving then i went on holidays not when i driving the bus it must be noted then i saw cat it speak i say cat you speak it said yes i cat i speak and then from nowhere come a bus but think i oh no i not driving bus how can that be then the cat died it speak no more i go home and driving the bus