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Oh God. Yep, they’re at it again. Again with the shouting. Him shouting at her. Her shouting at him. If they’re not shouting then one of their seemingly endless supply of devil spawn children are. They do little else then shout, that family. The shouting seems to lead them one of two ways, both of which create even more noise. They either shout and shout until someone in the neighbourhood calls the police to come and briefly shut them up, or they rut each other silly in an attempt to widen the tear in the nations wallet that their family is.
I worked for 40 years. 40 years of hard graft to earn my part of this building. They’ve never worked a day in their lethargic lives and yet rent the larger half for a pittance.
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I tried to write, but just got really stuck. Then I read back what I’d written, and that just made me want to hit myself repeatedly.
While it’s true that I’ve only ever written one serious piece, I thought I was better then that. Can’t be assed to continue it. I may try again.
I’d have thought the domestic violence would have just flowed out of my hands…let me rephrase that. Actually, I can’t be assed. I suck.
I worked for 40 years. 40 years of hard graft to earn my part of this building. They’ve never worked a day in their lethargic lives and yet rent the larger half for a pittance.
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I tried to write, but just got really stuck. Then I read back what I’d written, and that just made me want to hit myself repeatedly.
While it’s true that I’ve only ever written one serious piece, I thought I was better then that. Can’t be assed to continue it. I may try again.
I’d have thought the domestic violence would have just flowed out of my hands…let me rephrase that. Actually, I can’t be assed. I suck.
I'm sorry - I made you shout :(
Hey, I tried, I sat for ages staring at that stupid screen. I TRIED, WOMAN!
Thought it was time I read some of these stories and *gasp* finds one from EB. You could have tried a little harder.
English_Bloke wrote:
> Actually, I can’t be assed. I suck.
Interesting. I may just keep your number for myself :D
English_Bloke wrote:
> Actually, I can’t be assed. I suck.
Interesting. I may just keep your number for myself :D
Heh, at least the ideas are brewing, because the actual concept you have there is a good 'un.
Ashman wrote:
> I thought perhaps
> the story could have been told from both sides, one on one side of
> the house, one on the other. With tales that possibly intertwine to
> some extent.
I was going down that route.
The old guy was complaining about the family, and then the adult male from the family was going to complain about the old guy.
I also thought about then ending involving one final argument that the old guy hears, and then he hears nothing. So he wonders just what has happened.
I thought about the old guy becoming the bad guy by doing little things to wind the family up.
Then I thought. I suck.
> I thought perhaps
> the story could have been told from both sides, one on one side of
> the house, one on the other. With tales that possibly intertwine to
> some extent.
I was going down that route.
The old guy was complaining about the family, and then the adult male from the family was going to complain about the old guy.
I also thought about then ending involving one final argument that the old guy hears, and then he hears nothing. So he wonders just what has happened.
I thought about the old guy becoming the bad guy by doing little things to wind the family up.
Then I thought. I suck.
Ah well, no harm done in trying though, eh?
"I worked for 40 years. 40 years of hard graft to earn my part of this building. They’ve never worked a day in their lethargic lives and yet
rent the larger half for a pittance."
This part, for me, was brilliant. Really involves the reader, makes them feel sympathy towards this hard-working guy. I thought perhaps the story could have been told from both sides, one on one side of the house, one on the other. With tales that possibly intertwine to some extent.
I suggest, if you want to get back into the habit or creatively writing, to read around a couple of the other stories, then go back to the drawing board. Things may seem a lot easier from there.
"I worked for 40 years. 40 years of hard graft to earn my part of this building. They’ve never worked a day in their lethargic lives and yet
rent the larger half for a pittance."
This part, for me, was brilliant. Really involves the reader, makes them feel sympathy towards this hard-working guy. I thought perhaps the story could have been told from both sides, one on one side of the house, one on the other. With tales that possibly intertwine to some extent.
I suggest, if you want to get back into the habit or creatively writing, to read around a couple of the other stories, then go back to the drawing board. Things may seem a lot easier from there.
Hmm, oh right. Well, try again next time.
Oh God. Yep, they’re at it again. Again with the shouting. Him shouting at her. Her shouting at him. If they’re not shouting then one of their seemingly endless supply of devil spawn children are. They do little else then shout, that family. The shouting seems to lead them one of two ways, both of which create even more noise. They either shout and shout until someone in the neighbourhood calls the police to come and briefly shut them up, or they rut each other silly in an attempt to widen the tear in the nations wallet that their family is.
I worked for 40 years. 40 years of hard graft to earn my part of this building. They’ve never worked a day in their lethargic lives and yet rent the larger half for a pittance.
**********************************
I tried to write, but just got really stuck. Then I read back what I’d written, and that just made me want to hit myself repeatedly.
While it’s true that I’ve only ever written one serious piece, I thought I was better then that. Can’t be assed to continue it. I may try again.
I’d have thought the domestic violence would have just flowed out of my hands…let me rephrase that. Actually, I can’t be assed. I suck.
I worked for 40 years. 40 years of hard graft to earn my part of this building. They’ve never worked a day in their lethargic lives and yet rent the larger half for a pittance.
**********************************
I tried to write, but just got really stuck. Then I read back what I’d written, and that just made me want to hit myself repeatedly.
While it’s true that I’ve only ever written one serious piece, I thought I was better then that. Can’t be assed to continue it. I may try again.
I’d have thought the domestic violence would have just flowed out of my hands…let me rephrase that. Actually, I can’t be assed. I suck.