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Ok, so I did another one. But this is not for the competition, ok? Oh, and it's adults only.
The Fanatic
What a great feeling, pleasure and pain all in one creature. I lie here watching her watching over me. She stands in her own state of ecstasy and I am in mine, this palace of pleasure trembles as I lay here.
These parasite creatures writhe on my skin, they engorge themselves on the blood that rushes around my veins. I watch them rise as they fill with blood, their bodies becoming taut as they grow ever larger. Her skin is marked with small beads of perspiration as she watches these creatures in their dance of inflammation. Her eyes are wide, then close as hands move down, sliding towards her pulsing thighs.
She moves to join me, a magnetic attraction that cannot be broken now. Her skin touches the dark throbbing creatures as she moves against me. They fill from me as I too fill and grow, gaining identical animal pleasure in our joint rapture. Still they rise and swell, their bodies filling to completeness as I feel their tight hold against my flowing veins.
And then, release. Their bodies satisfied, they liberate the bloodline as they fall away, pleasure fulfilled. The blood is spent, the body filled, a wave of relaxation sweeps over all.
The Fanatic
What a great feeling, pleasure and pain all in one creature. I lie here watching her watching over me. She stands in her own state of ecstasy and I am in mine, this palace of pleasure trembles as I lay here.
These parasite creatures writhe on my skin, they engorge themselves on the blood that rushes around my veins. I watch them rise as they fill with blood, their bodies becoming taut as they grow ever larger. Her skin is marked with small beads of perspiration as she watches these creatures in their dance of inflammation. Her eyes are wide, then close as hands move down, sliding towards her pulsing thighs.
She moves to join me, a magnetic attraction that cannot be broken now. Her skin touches the dark throbbing creatures as she moves against me. They fill from me as I too fill and grow, gaining identical animal pleasure in our joint rapture. Still they rise and swell, their bodies filling to completeness as I feel their tight hold against my flowing veins.
And then, release. Their bodies satisfied, they liberate the bloodline as they fall away, pleasure fulfilled. The blood is spent, the body filled, a wave of relaxation sweeps over all.
Just to reiterate my love for this short piece, I must say that if you entered it into SSC8 it would have certainly been a contender for the top 3.
Yes...
Yes...
{reads comments and does happy dance}
* Shock. I think I may be to young to have read this.
Short and succinct, but... gross! :D
Very nicely written. Flowed well, even when I didn't actually wish to reach the end but had no choice.
* Does it sound like a feasible lie?
Short and succinct, but... gross! :D
Very nicely written. Flowed well, even when I didn't actually wish to reach the end but had no choice.
* Does it sound like a feasible lie?
Initially missed this, but glad I found it from reading the SSC8 thread. So much good description and words that really add to the mood like "writhe" and "inflammation" really stood out.
I like, and these two parts in particular:
> this palace of pleasure trembles as I lay here.
> These parasite creatures writhe on my skin, they engorge themselves
> on the blood that rushes around my veins.
Top stuff, pb.
I like, and these two parts in particular:
> this palace of pleasure trembles as I lay here.
> These parasite creatures writhe on my skin, they engorge themselves
> on the blood that rushes around my veins.
Top stuff, pb.
Really good if scarily erotic.
I'm thinking that perhaps I should have entered this one!
Oh well :-)
Oh well :-)
Like reading a cloud. :-)
Wow, brilliant stuff.
Fantastically well written, so fluent. Thoroughly enjoyed that.
Ok, so I did another one. But this is not for the competition, ok? Oh, and it's adults only.
The Fanatic
What a great feeling, pleasure and pain all in one creature. I lie here watching her watching over me. She stands in her own state of ecstasy and I am in mine, this palace of pleasure trembles as I lay here.
These parasite creatures writhe on my skin, they engorge themselves on the blood that rushes around my veins. I watch them rise as they fill with blood, their bodies becoming taut as they grow ever larger. Her skin is marked with small beads of perspiration as she watches these creatures in their dance of inflammation. Her eyes are wide, then close as hands move down, sliding towards her pulsing thighs.
She moves to join me, a magnetic attraction that cannot be broken now. Her skin touches the dark throbbing creatures as she moves against me. They fill from me as I too fill and grow, gaining identical animal pleasure in our joint rapture. Still they rise and swell, their bodies filling to completeness as I feel their tight hold against my flowing veins.
And then, release. Their bodies satisfied, they liberate the bloodline as they fall away, pleasure fulfilled. The blood is spent, the body filled, a wave of relaxation sweeps over all.
The Fanatic
What a great feeling, pleasure and pain all in one creature. I lie here watching her watching over me. She stands in her own state of ecstasy and I am in mine, this palace of pleasure trembles as I lay here.
These parasite creatures writhe on my skin, they engorge themselves on the blood that rushes around my veins. I watch them rise as they fill with blood, their bodies becoming taut as they grow ever larger. Her skin is marked with small beads of perspiration as she watches these creatures in their dance of inflammation. Her eyes are wide, then close as hands move down, sliding towards her pulsing thighs.
She moves to join me, a magnetic attraction that cannot be broken now. Her skin touches the dark throbbing creatures as she moves against me. They fill from me as I too fill and grow, gaining identical animal pleasure in our joint rapture. Still they rise and swell, their bodies filling to completeness as I feel their tight hold against my flowing veins.
And then, release. Their bodies satisfied, they liberate the bloodline as they fall away, pleasure fulfilled. The blood is spent, the body filled, a wave of relaxation sweeps over all.