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It’s probably worse because I didn’t know what to expect. One minute I felt normal, the next all these new sensations were bombarding me. It manipulates me, my mood, the things that I do and how I feel. Such power for something so tiny, something buried deep underneath.
But there was nothing they could do. The doctors, those men who seem to know everything, well, they just didn’t know enough. And how could they? They’d never experienced anything like this, unless they were hiding some sort of secret. It made me feel alone, but strangely, at the same time, I was bonding with this thing, it was getting to me and I promised myself that it wouldn’t.
The problem started when I met this strange man. He seemed so nice, but he had a glint in his eye that I should have been more wary of. Stupid me, I just didn’t register. He promised me a good time, and for a while he was right. But he had plans, plans that didn’t involve me and I found out too late at my cost.
Anyway, I’ve made it sound like something terrible, and it isn’t. I guess I get scared at times, but that passes. All I think about is this new life under my skin, a part of me and yet something new and alive. It’s amazing and overwhelming, but I’m happy.
I'm not sure if I'm entering in this one, I cant get my idea written.
> This is curious. It sounds quite blatantly like a pregnancy, were
> it not for the part about doctors not experiencing anything like
> it before, which shatters the pretense entirely.
I thought it was pretty obvious, that's the problem with not having time to re-read it from a reader's point of view. Thanks for the input, but hopefully one small change of a single word might make all the difference...
Otherise nice use of the contrasting feelings.
I think im going to have to take some time out and read more of this creative writing you all do!
It’s probably worse because I didn’t know what to expect. One minute I felt normal, the next all these new sensations were bombarding me. It manipulates me, my mood, the things that I do and how I feel. Such power for something so tiny, something buried deep underneath.
But there was nothing they could do. The doctors, those men who seem to know everything, well, they just didn’t know enough. And how could they? They’d never experienced anything like this, unless they were hiding some sort of secret. It made me feel alone, but strangely, at the same time, I was bonding with this thing, it was getting to me and I promised myself that it wouldn’t.
The problem started when I met this strange man. He seemed so nice, but he had a glint in his eye that I should have been more wary of. Stupid me, I just didn’t register. He promised me a good time, and for a while he was right. But he had plans, plans that didn’t involve me and I found out too late at my cost.
Anyway, I’ve made it sound like something terrible, and it isn’t. I guess I get scared at times, but that passes. All I think about is this new life under my skin, a part of me and yet something new and alive. It’s amazing and overwhelming, but I’m happy.