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The Light in Dark
You see the black you see the white
You see the dark in the pale moonlight
For what you see there is no grey
Only pale shadows of what will be
You look for Love at those that give
For giving is better then receiving with
You feel the warmth of those around
And all the poor souls with broken hearts abound
You search for this you search for that
You search people’s dreams in pictures no bounds
They ask for this they ask for that
For in people’s dreams there are no bounds
As you gaze to the heavens with your soft eyes
The stars tell you never give up that dream
Never give up that hope
It’s just a mere inconvenience of life
For in the dark there is always light
Everyone to see shining so bright
For it is you Sarah Cassidy
Our jewel our dream princess
You see the black you see the white
You see the dark in the pale moonlight
For what you see there is no grey
Only pale shadows of what will be
You look for Love at those that give
For giving is better then receiving with
You feel the warmth of those around
And all the poor souls with broken hearts abound
You search for this you search for that
You search people’s dreams in pictures no bounds
They ask for this they ask for that
For in people’s dreams there are no bounds
As you gaze to the heavens with your soft eyes
The stars tell you never give up that dream
Never give up that hope
It’s just a mere inconvenience of life
For in the dark there is always light
Everyone to see shining so bright
For it is you Sarah Cassidy
Our jewel our dream princess
Thanks Guys not as good as my bronze Award winner though Ill stick that in poetry corner
I thought that was rather good, actually.
The change in structure then final revert could have been smoothened out a bit, but on the whole it worked quite well.
A very valiant effort.
The change in structure then final revert could have been smoothened out a bit, but on the whole it worked quite well.
A very valiant effort.
You started off with a
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Rhyme scheme which turned to a
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somehow.
You need to keep a constant pace and rhytmn with a solid rhyme for it to work.
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Rhyme scheme which turned to a
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somehow.
You need to keep a constant pace and rhytmn with a solid rhyme for it to work.
It was decent, but you should have posted it in "Poetry Corner"
The Light in Dark
You see the black you see the white
You see the dark in the pale moonlight
For what you see there is no grey
Only pale shadows of what will be
You look for Love at those that give
For giving is better then receiving with
You feel the warmth of those around
And all the poor souls with broken hearts abound
You search for this you search for that
You search people’s dreams in pictures no bounds
They ask for this they ask for that
For in people’s dreams there are no bounds
As you gaze to the heavens with your soft eyes
The stars tell you never give up that dream
Never give up that hope
It’s just a mere inconvenience of life
For in the dark there is always light
Everyone to see shining so bright
For it is you Sarah Cassidy
Our jewel our dream princess
You see the black you see the white
You see the dark in the pale moonlight
For what you see there is no grey
Only pale shadows of what will be
You look for Love at those that give
For giving is better then receiving with
You feel the warmth of those around
And all the poor souls with broken hearts abound
You search for this you search for that
You search people’s dreams in pictures no bounds
They ask for this they ask for that
For in people’s dreams there are no bounds
As you gaze to the heavens with your soft eyes
The stars tell you never give up that dream
Never give up that hope
It’s just a mere inconvenience of life
For in the dark there is always light
Everyone to see shining so bright
For it is you Sarah Cassidy
Our jewel our dream princess